【09年1月-4月】TOEFL作文互改小组-之【TWE作文】01.30号作业 by woaichixigua

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Agree or disagree? It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts.

Which kind of skill is more important for students to acquire at school, understanding of ideas and concepts or learning of facts? I think the former is of more significance for a student to learn rather than the latter for the following three reasons.

Firstly, if we compare facts to the treasure that has been coached in an unknown locale, then the ideas and concepts are the routine that lead us to find out all these treasure. That is to say, one cannot really get full comprehension of a fact unless he or she understood the underlying principle behind it. Everyone has ever witness the fall of an apple from the tree, but it is of no significance until Newton found the reason why apple falls is gravitational force. It is his progenies apply his concept to widely application that nowadays we enjoy the boon of hydropower station.

Secondly, it is easier and better to learn the facts in real practice rather than at school. No matter how many facts the teacher pumps to students, fact never turn to be useful knowledge itself unless the person have experienced it in real life. For instance, a surgery can only acquire proficient skills through thousands of operations. But school cannot offer him such a environment, all a school can do is teach him as much as possible theories and prepare him a qualified apprentice in real practice.

Thirdly, the root of expansion of knowledge is not through the advancement of facts but through the progress of concept. History gives us plentiful examples. Economic depression put the whole America into panic. Populace got depressed. Government bent over backward to turn the table. But all measures were unless. It is Adam Smith who brought up a concept that there is an invisible hand who control the economy to balance, therefore government discard tough control over economy, thence free market get flourished.

In conclusion, it is more important for students to learn the ideas and concepts, because as long as one acquires them, he or she obtains the ability to learn.

终于有一篇半个小时之内写完的了,但是就是不知道自己在说什么
这个题目太BT了...

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首先要保证文章写的完整性
然后再提高时间

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1# woaichixigua

Which kind of skill技能？。。不合适额。 is more important for students to acquire at school, understanding of ideas and concepts or learning of facts? I think the former is of more significance for a student to learn rather than the latter for the following three reasons.

Firstly, if we compare facts to the treasure that has been coached in an unknown locale, then the ideas and concepts are the routine that lead us to find out all these treasure. That is to say, one cannot really get full comprehension of a fact unless he or she understood the underlying principle behind it. Everyone has ever witness the fall of an apple from the tree, but it is of no significance until Newton found the reason why apple falls is gravitational force. It is his progenies apply his concept to widely application that nowadays we enjoy the boon of hydropower station.

Secondly, it is easier and better to learn the facts in real practice rather than at school.段首句貌似和主旨不太搭 No matter how many facts the teacher pumps to students, fact never turn to be useful knowledge itself unless the person have experienced it in real life. For instance, a surgery can only acquire proficient skills through thousands of operations. But school cannot offer him such a environment, all a school can do is teach him as much as possible theories and prepare him a qualified apprentice in real practice.
知道你想的意思。但是没能和understanding 对比，所以显得和主题不大搭调。

Thirdly, the root of expansion of knowledge is not through the advancement of facts but through the progress of concept. History gives us plentiful examples. Economic depression put the whole America into panic. Populace got depressed. Government bent over backward to turn the table. But all measures were unless. It is Adam Smith who brought up a concept that there is an invisible hand who control the economy to balance, therefore government discard tough control over economy, thence free market get flourished.

In conclusion, it is more important for students to learn the ideas and concepts, because as long as one acquires them, he or she obtains the ability to learn.

撇开主题不说，行文很流畅，例子举得也很恰当。
第一个理由段我很喜欢呢。
但是第二个理由段，开始和主题稍微有点不搭了，但是仔细体会还是有的。主要缺少点题的句子，主要是两方面对比。
第三段。。额。。跟学生就根本木有关系了@.@
最后。。我还是觉得结尾段多写点好- -  个人意见