【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 天泽的 第五次作业】

天泽UID: 2340391

Do you agree or disagree, technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.

In the recent past, many new things came out day after day. Some people bring out that technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated. However, I am against this view. Apparently, thanks to the technology, people’s lives are becoming simpler and simpler.

What I would like to explain at first is what the simple life is. Simple life means to do so little to live as comfortable as possible. For instance, in the past ages, we have to go far away to see those relatives living far from us, while today we can call them by telephone or chat with them on line, conveniently. Nowadays, there are also many new machines to improve our life standard. Take the washing machine as an example. In the past, we usually went to the rive bank to wash clothes. Even though some centuries later it was capable for people to wash clothes at home, it was still a hard work to each one. However, today what we should only do is to put all the dirty clothes into the washing machines and press
the key. Several minutes later, everything will be ok.

Some people point out that, too much new technology may make you a little puzzled, and there are also more knowledge should be attained, in order to confirm lives having become more complicated. Actually, every new thing, undoubtedly, should go through this process that something doesn’t work as our wishing. Those technologies regarded to push people’s lives more complicated are around this step. Take the same example, the washing machine. When the washing machine first came into use, it took more time washing fewer clothes. Sometimes clothes washed were not as clean as by hands. It seemed that the washing machine made people’s lives more complicated. But now, of course, it turned our washing work simpler.

From what is discussed above we can easily draw the conclusion that technology really makes people’s lives simpler. Why some people hold the view that it puts our lives more complicated to some extent because it is a necessary process that all the new things may bring some new troubles when they first come out, while it should be perfect in the nearly future.

angeloolUID: 166036

Do you agree or disagree, technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.

In the recent past, During the late history of human being, many new things came out day after day. Some people bring out that technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated. However, I am against this view. Apparently, thanks to the technology, people’s lives are becoming simpler and simpler.
（这两句完全可以合成一句）

What I would like to explain at first is what the simple life is. Simple life means to do so little to live as comfortable as possible. For instance, in the past ages, we have to go far away to see those relatives living far from us, （与前面的far away表达重复） while today we can call them by telephone or chat with them on line, conveniently （位置很奇怪，而且加了”,”）. Nowadays, there are also many new machines to improve our life standard. Take the washing machine as an example. In the past, we usually went used to go to the rive bank to wash clothes. Even though some centuries later it was capable for people to wash clothes at home, it was still a hard work to each one. However, today what we should only do the only thing the we need to do is to put all the dirty clothes into the washing machines and press the key button. Several minutes later, everything will be ok. (Everything can be accomplished just within quite a few minutes.)

Some people point out that, too much new technology may make you a little puzzled, and there are also more knowledge that should be attained, in order to confirm lives having become more complicated （confirm可以这样用吗？建议改写）. Actually, every new thing, undoubtedly, should go through this process that something doesn’t work as our wishing (as the way planned). Those technologies regarded to push people’s lives more complicated are around this step. Take the same example, the washing machine. (这种说法很难受，上一段也有，建议想个更好的) When the washing machine first came into use, it took more time washing fewer clothes. Sometimes clothes washed by machine were not as clean as by hands. It seemed that the washing machine made people’s lives more complicated. But now, of course, it turned our washing work laundry simpler.

From what is discussed above we can easily draw the conclusion that technology really makes people’s lives simpler. Why some people hold the view that it puts our lives more complicated to some extent is because it is a necessary process that all the new things may bring some new troubles when they first come out, while it should be perfect in the nearly future.

小评：
1.
用语还应再灵活多变；这篇文章我也觉得很难写，很容易就变成一篇讲得很琐碎的文章，不应只谈一个洗衣服，还应多一些宏观的例证，多些论述性话语。
2.
一定注意提取分论点，作者可以自己找找自己明确的分论点，我觉得比较难找。

mimicaUID: 2457275

In the recent past, many new things came out day after day. Some people bring out that technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated. However, I am against this view. Apparently, thanks to the technology, people’s lives are becoming simpler and simpler.（However, in my opinion, thanks to the technology, people’s lives are becoming simpler and simpler.）

What I would like to explain at first is what the simple life is. Simple life means to do so little to live as comfortable as possible.(Simple life means to live comfortable at the cost of least time and money. )For instance, in the past ages, we have to go far away (spend much time)to see those relatives living far from us, while today we can call them by telephone or chat with them on line, conveniently. Nowadays, there are also many new machines to improve our life standard. Take the washing machine as an example. In the past, we usually went to the rive(r) bank to wash clothes. Even though some centuries later it was capable for people to wash clothes at home, it was still a hard work to each one. However, today what we should only do is to put all the dirty clothes into the washing machines and press the key. Several minutes later, everything will be ok.(见楼上)

Some people point out that, too much new technology may make you a little puzzled, and there are also more knowledge should be attained, in order to confirm lives having become more complicated. Actually, every new thing, undoubtedly, should go through this process that something doesn’t work as our wishing. Those technologies regarded to push people’s lives more complicated are around this step. Take the same example, the washing machine. When the washing machine first came into use, it took more time washing fewer clothes. Sometimes clothes washed were not as clean as （washed）by hands. It seemed that the washing machine made people’s lives more complicated. But now, of course, it turned our washing work simpler.!

From what is discussed above(above reasons)we can easily draw the conclusion that technology really makes people’s lives simpler. Why some people hold the view that it puts our lives more complicated to some extent (is)because it is a necessary process that all the new things may bring some new troubles when they first come out, while it should be perfect in the nearly future.

问题：
1. the 乱用
2. 论述不够充分，例证太少，比洗衣机高科技的东西很多，不要两段都用它。
3.句型问题较多，可多看一些范文。