Dark_Tournament写作组yoyodandy第13次作业

yoyodandyUID: 2456812

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Drivers should pay a fee to be allowed to drive on the city streets during the time when there is the greatest amount of traffic. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.(07.1.14)  周三22：00前
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The hottest discussion which we can here around us is whether drivers should pay a fee to be allowed to drive on the city streets during the time when there is the greatest amount of traffic. Some people think it is another way to ask the drivers pay more money which will cause a bad influence on the society. Although it may have a lot of negative effects, I still vote for the idea that drivers should pay money if they want to drive in the city street during the rush hours.

First of all, as we all know, the trash that cars pulled out has cost a series of problems each year. For instance, too much gas makes our environment worse. The gas has polluted the air and more and more people are caught in some disease as respirator hypersensitivity these days. With so many cars driving in the road would make the situation hotter in the earth. It is reported by the government that the climate is much higher than twenty years before. The average temperate of the earth was 15 degree while it is 5 degrees higher this year. Asking drivers to hang up some money will solve the problem in a certain extend because some of them do not want to pay for the fee.

In addition, if people are asked to pay the fee, they would properly take buses or ride their bikes or even walk to school and the workplace. When people walk or ride to the place they want to go, it helps them to have some essential exercises. With the development of industry, people do not have enough sports. It is true that cars and other vehicles make our lives simple and more convenient. But what we can not deny is that human beings’ healthy have decreased rapidly since the cars have been invented.

In general, it will be a good policy to ask drivers to reduce the traffic. By doing such kind of movement will solve the problems such as traffic jam, greenhouse issues. That’s why I agree with the idea.

wazzaUID: 2473807

1# yoyodandy

The hottest discussion which we can here(hear ??) around us is whether drivers should pay a fee to be allowed to drive on the city streets during the time when there is the greatest amount of traffic.( 最好不要照抄题目,很可能被认为抄袭，可以同义改写） Some people think it is another way to ask the drivers to pay more money which will cause a bad influence on the society. Although it may have a lot of negative effects, I still vote for the idea that drivers should pay money if they want to drive in the city street during the rush hours.

First of all, as we all know, the trash that cars pulled out has cost a series of problems each year. For instance, too much gas makes our environment worse. The gas has polluted the air and more and more people are caught in some disease as respirator hypersensitivity these days（这个例子不错，用到很具体的名词）. With so many cars driving（被动drived or running） in the road would make the situation hotter（用词不当） in the earth. It is reported by the government that the climate is much higher（temperature 用high ，weather用hot） than that twenty years before. The average temperate of the earth was 15 degree while it is 5 degrees higher this year. Asking drivers to hang up some money will solve the problem in a certain extend because some of them do not want to pay for the fee.

In addition, if people are asked to pay the fee, they would properly take buses or ride their bikes or even walk to school and the workplace. When people walk or ride to the place they want to go, it helps them to have some essential exercises. With the development of industry, people do not have enough sports. It is true that cars and other vehicles make our lives simple and more convenient. But what we can not deny is that human beings’ healthy have decreased rapidly since the cars have been invented.(这个转折很不错）

In general, it will be a good policy to ask drivers to reduce the traffic. By doing such kind of movement（此成分作主语就要去掉 by ） will solve the problems such as traffic jam, greenhouse issues. That’s why I agree with the idea.

1、字数有点不足

2、有些地方用词不当

加油！

风中随想UID: 2517785

The hottest discussion which we can here around us is whether drivers should pay a fee to be allowed to drive on the city streets during the time when there is the greatest amount of traffic. Some people think it is another way to ask the drivers pay more money which will cause a bad influence on the society. Although it may have a lot of negative effects, I still vote for the idea that drivers should pay money if they want to drive in the city street during the rush hours.



First of all, as we all know, the trash that cars pulled out has cost a series of problems each year. For instance, too much gas makes our environment worse. The gas has polluted the air and more and more people are caught in some disease as respirator hypersensitivity these days. With so many cars driving in the road would make the situation hotter in the earth. 这句话没有主语。It is reported by the government that the climate is much higher than twenty years before应该用ago. The average temperate of the earth was 15 degree while it is 5 degrees higher this year. Asking drivers to hang up hang up 做何解？ some money will solve the problem in a certain extend extent because some of them do not want to pay for the fee.



In addition, if people are asked to pay the fee, they would properly take buses or ride their bikes or even walk to school and the workplace. When people walk or ride to the place they want to go可以去掉，多余, it helps them to have some essential exercises. With the development of industry, people do not have enough sports. It is true that cars and other vehicles make our lives simple and more convenient. But what we can not deny is that human beings’ healthy have decreased rapidly since the cars have been invented. 这个观点很好！


In general, it will be a good policy to ask drivers to reduce the traffic.没有叫司机减少交通啊，减少交通是政策的效果。 By doing such kind of movement 缺主语will solve the problems such as traffic jam, greenhouse issues. That’s why I agree with the idea.
最好能有3条理由！
没有主语是很不应该的。
论点都很好，加油哦！