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[未归类] TOEFL 4—6月Dark_Tournament写作小组 恩恩的囡囡的 第十七次作业 [复制链接]

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发表于 2009-4-1 22:57:31 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The ability to cooperate with other well is more important today than in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.



It was a technology-based society in the late 20th century. Now the 21st century is absolutely an information era. As long as people mention the information, they will come up with the word- Internet. Internet leads to cooperation. So in my opinion, the ability to cooperate with others well is more important than in the past.

First of all, tens of thousands of multinationals are operating in this world. They almost spot in every corner. With large items, the companies have to cooperate with each other. If they can't deal with the job well, they will waste a lot of time. However, time is more expensive than gold nowadays. Fast moving life makes people realize that only saving time can they succeed. Then it's clear that well cooperation is really important.

Secondly, well cooperation can maximize everyone's ability. It cannot be denied that each person's talent is limited. Nobody is Mr. Know-all. So why not combine the minds together? A Chinese old saying goes like this,"three cobblers with their wits combined equal Zhu Geliang, the master mind."
Great minds are unavoidably needed in this subprime economy crisis. This is a global recession. Not only the United States should try their best to solve the problem, but the countries of world must give a hand. Or it will eventually turn out to be an economy disaster.


Finally, the ability to cooperate well with others is a rifle in the market economy. To grasp successes, businessmen spare effort in attracting customers’ ' attention. Excellent ads will be one useful way. But it's also a tough job to think up a marvelous design. Cooperation then becomes a brilliant method.

From all of these, we can draw a conclusion that the ability to cooperate well is more important than that in the past.
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发表于 2009-4-2 08:56:51 |只看该作者
这就去拍,欢迎回拍,这是我的作文链接
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=936886&extra

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发表于 2009-4-4 21:50:41 |只看该作者
2# jackie1983
lz的文章结构清楚,内容也表达清了,没发现什么语法错误.
建议lz多增加些长句的使用,可使文章增色不少~

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发表于 2009-4-14 09:58:54 |只看该作者
well cooperation can maximize everyone's ability
开发潜能 楼主 是说这个意思吗? 表达不大准确
,"three cobblers with their wits combined equal Zhu Geliang, the master mind."
诸葛亮 少些拼音  容易被判拼写错误
写成这个吧 two minds are better than one


短句子 在TOEFL比较适用    不要追求长句子 这点很好

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