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[活动] 【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 happylr的 第20次作业】 [复制链接]

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It’s important to know events happening around the world though sometimes they are unlikely to affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.(04/29/07)

As creative individuals of emotion and wisdom in this infinite world, to live alone in a cage caring less about the events happening around the world is ignorant and contemptible. It makes nonsense to be isolated from the surrounding in such a heightened civilization society because we are supposed to make adaptation to the public through paying attention to the affairs covered by mass media. In other words, focusing on the the current and local news serves to enlarge our knowledge, cultivate our interest and promote mutual communication.

Initially, widespread events or news benefit us to recognize and analyze the current world in terms of politics, economics, sports, entertainments and so on. Several months ago, American president election was a heated topic all over the world and enormous commentators and experts talked about the candidates and extrapolated who would be the final winner. Nevertheless, astute political sensitivity is favorable for countries to enact correct and necessary political route. For another instance, the great Wenchuan earthquake in Sichuan Province shows the power of the nature and arouses experts to research the genuine origin to avoid the similar slaughter. As mentioned above, prevailing events an effective and convenient means for people to keep pace with the world.

An additional factor involves this recognition that people learn to become interested in one specific aspect when they concentrate on some fields continually. I often feel puzzled that why those guys are so crazy for basketball or football and they can remember so many members’ weird names. One friend tells me that it’s because of interest just like we girls are so addicted to bands of clothes. As they often watch matches and scan sport news, it’s hard for them to forget these prevalent names. Indeed, intense circumstances are easy to breed our interests! As me for example, I’d like to pay special attention to super stars such as Brad Pitt, Tom Bruce and Brittney Spears and so on. Speaking out the names of their latest movies and songs is a piece of cake for me.

Lending more credence to my point is that reciprocal emotion connection which is beneficial to success is strengthened during the process. Nowadays, diverse competitions of writing, singing, internet games or activities of various organizations are popular around the world. Once you become a member of them, you will indisputably collaborate with a great deal of persons who are helpful to your achievement. Other things being equal, a man who care about present events is sure to succeed more rapidly than a man whose command of information is poor.

As the statement presented above, I’d undoubtedly hold the viewpoint that knowing events happening around the world is definitely important to sublimate our social value, to breed our interest and to provide access to success.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It’s important to know events happening around the world though sometimes they are unlikely to affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.(04/29/07)

As creative individuals of emotion and wisdom in this infinite world, to live alone in a cage caring less about the events happening around the world is ignorant and contemptible. It makes nonsense to be isolated from the surrounding in such a heightened civilization society because we are supposed to make adaptation to the public through paying attention to the affairs covered by mass media. In other words, focusing on the the(写了两个,笔误了吧) current and local news serves to enlarge our knowledge, cultivate our interest and promote mutual communication.(开头写的很精彩)
   Initially, widespread events or news benefit us to recognize and analyze the current world in terms of politics, economics, sports, entertainments and so on. Several months ago, American president election was a heated topic all over the world and enormous commentators and experts talked about the candidates and extrapolated who would be the final winner. Nevertheless, astute political sensitivity is favorable for countries to enact correct and necessary political route. For another instance, the great Wenchuan earthquake in Sichuan Province shows the power of the nature and arouses experts to research the genuine origin to avoid the similar slaughter. As mentioned above, prevailing events an effective and convenient means for people to keep pace with the world.(和我举了一样的例子啊哈哈,不过你写的比我成熟多了,要多多学习你)
An additional factor involves this recognition (is)that people learn to become interested in one specific aspect when they concentrate on some fields continually. I often feel puzzled that why those guys are so crazy for basketball or football and they can remember so many members’ weird names. One friend tells me that it’s because of interest just like we girls are so addicted to bands of clothes. As they often watch matches and scan sport news, it’s hard for them to forget these prevalent names. Indeed, intense circumstances are easy to breed our interests! As me for example, I’d like to pay special attention to super stars such as Brad Pitt, Tom Bruce and Brittney Spears and so on. Speaking out the names of their latest movies and songs is a piece of cake for me.
   Lending more credence to my point is that reciprocal emotion connection which is beneficial to success is strengthened during the process. Nowadays, diverse competitions of writing, singing, internet games or activities of various organizations are popular around the world. Once you become a member of them, you will indisputably collaborate with a great deal of persons who are helpful to your achievement. Other things being equal, a man who care(s) about present events is sure to succeed more rapidly than a man whose command of information is poor.
As the statement presented above, I’d undoubtedly hold the viewpoint that knowing events happening around the world is definitely important to sublimate our social value, to breed our interest and to provide access to success.
好几次和高手你一组了呀,真的很荣幸,越改你的文越改不出来,真是越写越有水平啊,要是我有那么好就不练了呢呵呵。
提个意见哈,你上次说我写两个论点会不会显得太少。其实是XDF老师说的,基本上高分作文都是两个论点,说是两个论点写的不够清楚才会去写第三个论点的。我看楼主的文章两个论点已经写的相当清楚了,已经有400字了,所以没有必要再写第三个,不然文章就实在太长了,打起来会比较费时间的吧。只是点小小的提议哈。
还是要向你好好学习下句型之类的啊。

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