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cocolinkinUID: 2333716

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The next twenty years from now on, students will not use printed books any more. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.08/04/07


Printed books were invented to memorize history in ancient which played an important role on society development. Some people believe printed book would be used forever because of its siginificant value. But others, including me, hold the idea that printed books would be replaced with new media as the time goes by. The benefit of not using printed books, as I would describe in follow passages, are obviously proved nowadays.


Using unrenewable resourses such as wood, bamboo, silk and so on, printed books are harmful to the environment. Generally, It would spend more than ten years for a mature tree on growing to the eligible materials to produce paper. Huge amount of waters, nutrients and humanity resourses are payed to produce the printed books which could be more valuable in the environment protection process. On contract, environmental damage is not a pay for most of young media like internet and e-book.



Not using printed books also have economical benefits. As we know, it takes lots of money to buy printed books as the result of the materials they used. An example of my university library could prove my point. The printed books are the main subject the library hold in the past. The cost of buying books and buildings to place them is so large that the library nowaday buy more e-book, which are more economical, than printed book. Because of the saved money, the library buy more e-book to broden the horizon of students.


I do not deny the significance of printed books which have influenced human million years. However, the physical characteristics of them make them unconvenient. All of us had the experience of hard move for carrying outweighted books. What is more, the papers are destroyed and the words on them disappered as the time goes by. The new media bring us much convience of transit and preserve.


To conclude, students will not used printed books any more the next twenty years from now on. The measures should be taken to decrease the use of printed books and efforts should be made to encourage using new media by government. Using new media not only benefits to environment and economy, but also bring more convenience to us.

cw025UID: 2181480

第二段的论点没有直接证明你的首段论点
再衔接一下
printed books which have influenced human million years.？
真的是million years么？

cocolinkinUID: 2333716

2# cw025

其实是随便写得= =
应该是printed product have influced haman for million years...
thx for checking:)

lingyao1UID: 2467525

1# cocolinkin

Printed books were inventedto memorize history in ancient which played an important role on societydevelopment. Some people believe printed book would be used forever because ofits siginificant(significant) value. But others, including me, hold the ideathat printed books would be replaced with new media as the time goes by. Thebenefit of not using printed books, as I would describe in follow passages, areobviously proved nowadays.

Using unrenewable resourses(resources)such as wood, bamboo, silk and so on, printed books are harmful to the (natural+)environment. Generally, it would spend more than ten years for a mature treeon growing to the eligible materials to produce paper. Huge amount of waters,nutrients and humanity resourses are payed(paid) to produce the printed books, whichcould be more valuable in the environment protection process(which后面要说的这个价值不对吧，这些因素影响环境的，是保护的目标；“然而，这些因素是影响自然环境的关键”). On contract, environmental damage is not a pay formost of young media like internet and e-book.（所以…；后面没有结论句，可以接着说啊，要不这段第一句话就得给一个明确的中心句。）# w  ~7i  u( c: H2 G* c"|: I  n
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Not using printed booksalso have economical benefits. As we know, it takes lots of money to buyprinted books as the result of the materials they used. An example of myuniversity library could prove my point. The printed books are the main subjectthe library hold in the past. Thecost of buying books and buildings to place them is so large that the librarynowaday buy more e-book, which are more economical, than printed book.(The costof buying books and the spaces of collecting books are so large that peoplecould use this expenditure to building other several library.你看是否可以) Because of the saved money, the library buy moree-book to broden(broaden) the horizon of students.(感觉这个because of 引导的句子没有起到结论的作用)

I do not deny thesignificance of printed books which have influenced human million years.However, the physical characteristics of them make them unconvenient(inconvenient).All of us had the experience of hard move for carrying(move和carry重复)out-weightedbooks. What is more, the papers are destroyed and the words on them disappered(disappeared,是太不对) as the time goes by. The new media bring us muchconvience(convenience) of transit and preserve.

Toconclude, students will not used(use) printed books any more (in) the nexttwenty years from now on. The measures should be taken to decrease the use ofprinted books and efforts should be made to encourage using new media bygovernment. Using new media not only benefits to environment and economy, butalso bring more convenience to us.(最后的结尾读到感觉和你第一段的观点没那么紧密)

个人能力有限，敬礼！

cocolinkinUID: 2333716

4# lingyao1

thx for checking.

The papers are destroyed and the words on them disappeared as the time goes by.
這句時態該怎麼改呢?