Issue144 @@A DREAM @@小组第2次作业 by zdcforever

zdcforeverUID: 2641750

When people stand in a gallery, appreciating the opuses by the artistic masters, often, they overlook the contribution of the critics. Undoubtedly, it is the artist who creates something, however, without his/her controversial partner, the critic, the quantity of the productions perpetuated which are putted out by artist would be considerably decreased.

    It is truly that the artist can create works, endued a kind of value from the perspective of art, with lasting value. Artist, as a group of people who are skilled or versed in learned art and practice imaginative art, can create art-valuing production, after all, artist vary from scientist for the reason that the production of them have no necessity to endued with technical value, but the artistic one. Artistic value within some of the artworks which can pass positive contribution to the generations in the future, in another word, has lasting value. For instance, Picasso, whose artworks created by his own are estimated to 50,000 including paintings, sculptures, ceramics, drawings and so on, influence artists and devotees from generation to generation through his artistic treasure, no only to exhilarate, but to inspire and evoke. The case of Picasso clearly illustrates the artist can create works, which have artistic value, with a lasting value to our society.

    However, all of the artworks could give society lasting value is “mission impossible”. Given that the critic can refine the artwork and strengthen the value of it, it is a sufficient way that artwork is considerably criticized to endue the productions of artist with lasting value. Critic, who is professional in analysis, evaluation and appreciation of works of art, specializes in expressing reasonable opinions on art especially involving judgments of its value, truth, purity, cohesion or even moral and universal issues. Artwork can withstand the appreciation of the critic to seemly have more opportunities being passed down to offspring. After all, critics can judge whether the artistic value of a work could be accept by society or has a potential influence to generations, if so, they will put their attentions to the flaws of the work, under the condition in which the creators accept the arguments by the critics and fix them, the artistic work should be exquisite with the lasing value. As we know, Karl Marx and Friedrich Engels, in last eighties, not only are they colleagues, but also critic to each other on their advancing process, it is only because they put different opinions on their partner momentous and significant opus can be created. Since our societies level of perspective is diversity, it is critic who might be great helpful in order for artist to perpetuate their creations.

    An art, only withstanding the judgment by society, could be passed down, and every flaw be found, amended is a step to perfection. Thus, as our society necessities the artist to the lasting value, still we could not ignore the positive affect by the critic.

nicoleqUID: 2626973

还没人改~~我来了哦~
When people stand in a gallery（这几个去点吧，画廊？美术陈列馆？太局限了~~还包括文学等等呢~）, appreciating the opuses by the artistic masters, often, they overlook the contribution of the critics. Undoubtedly, it is the artist who creates something, however, without his/her controversial partner, the critic, the quantity of the productions perpetuated which are putted out by artist would be considerably decreased.（提出观点了么·~~貌似不明确。貌似是Critics重要？）
It is truly that the artist can create works, endued a kind of value from the perspective of art, with lasting value. Artist, as a group of people who are skilled or versed in learned art and practice imaginative art, can create art-valuing production, after all, artist vary from scientist for the reason that the production of them have no necessity to endued with technical value, but the artistic one（but 为连接元件，前面不用，号吧~这个but分句改下放到value之前是不是更好？）. Artistic value within some of the artworks which can pass positive contribution to the generations in the future, in another word, has lasting value. For instance, Picasso, whose artworks created by his own are estimated to 50,000 including paintings, sculptures, ceramics, drawings and so on, influence artists and devotees from generation to generation through his artistic treasure, no only to（对吗？）exhilarate, but to inspire and evoke. The case of Picasso clearly illustrates the artist can create works, which have artistic value, with a lasting value to our society.
However, all of the artworks could give society lasting value is “mission impossible”. Given that the critic can refine the artwork and strengthen the value of it, it is a sufficient way that artwork is considerably criticized to endue the productions of artist with lasting value. Critic, who is professional in analysis, evaluation and appreciation of works of art, specializes in expressing reasonable opinions on art especially involving judgments of its value, truth, purity, cohesion or even moral and universal issues. Artwork can withstand the appreciation of the critic to seemly have more opportunities being passed down to offspring. After all, critics can judge whether the artistic value of a work could be accept by society or has a potential influence to generations, if so, they will put their attentions to the flaws of the work, under the condition in which the creators accept the arguments by the critics and fix them, the artistic work should be exquisite with the lasing value. As we know, Karl Marx and Friedrich Engels, in last eighties, not only are they colleagues, but also critic to each other on their advancing process, it is only because they put different opinions on their partner momentous and significant opus can be created. Since our societies level of perspective is diversity, it is critic who might be great helpful in order for artist to perpetuate their creations. （⊙﹏⊙b汗，这一段弄不清楚~LZ，想表达什么中心？中心句在哪里啊？我怎么找不到~~~~~~~~狠晕~·看到给我留言吧）
An art, only withstanding the judgment by society, could be passed down, and every flaw be found, amended is a step to perfection. Thus, as
our society necessities the artist to the lasting value, still we could ignore the positive affect by the critic.
（可以忽略Critics？与第一段矛盾么？）

kren_crazyUID: 2623887

"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value." *a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc

When people stand in a gallery, appreciating the opuses by the artistic masters, often, they overlook the contribution of the critics. Undoubtedly, it is the artist who creates something, however, without his/her controversial partner, the critic, the quantity of the productions perpetuated which are putted out by artist would be considerably decreased.（问题的焦点是谁对社会有更好的长久价值，按我的理解换句话说是谁更有深远的影响，而不谁没了谁，能不能创造出巨作，巨作是能产生深远的影响，但还是进一步阐述一下为好，否则开头有跑题的嫌疑）

    It is truly that the artist can create works, endued a kind of value from the perspective of art, with lasting value. Artist, as a group of people who are skilled or versed in learned art and practice imaginative art, can create art-valuing production, after all, artist vary from scientist for the reason that the production of them have no necessity to endued with technical value, but the artistic one. Artistic value within some of the artworks which can pass positive contribution to the generations in the future, in another word, has lasting value.（我觉得这样的说法可能有点，这样把“有长久的价值”等同于“能造福后代”，从吹毛求疵的角度看，这种理解有点问题）For instance, Picasso, whose artworks created by his own are estimated to 50,000 including paintings, sculptures, ceramics, drawings and so on, influence artists and devotees from generation to generation through his artistic treasure, no only to exhilarate, but to inspire and evoke.（这句话用的好，把长久的价值到底是什么描述了一下:) ） The case of Picasso clearly illustrates the artist can create works, which have artistic value, with a lasting value to our society.

    However, all of the artworks could give society lasting value is “mission impossible”. Given that the critic can refine the artwork and strengthen the value of it, it is a sufficient way that artwork is considerably criticized to endue（这个字用的频率有点高，有机会换换） the productions of artist with lasting value. Critic, who is professional in analysis, evaluation and appreciation of works of art, specializes in expressing reasonable opinions on art especially involving judgments of its value, truth, purity, cohesion or even moral and universal issues. （对critic 作了定义，丰富了文章的内容，也阐述critic能带给lasting value 的潜力， 好， 我向你学习:handshake ）Artwork can withstand the appreciation of the critic to seemly have more opportunities being passed down to offspring. After all, critics can judge whether the artistic value of a work could be accept by society or has a potential influence to （这里貌似是on吧，你再看看）generations, if so, they will put their attentions to the flaws of the work, under the condition in which the creators accept the arguments by the critics and fix them, the artistic work should be exquisite with the lasing value.（“the lasting value到底是何物，一篇措辞优美的文章就有lasting value 吗，flaw 这个词用得有点轻”读到这里我的感觉是这样的，为安全起见，我建议自己可以界定一下lasting value这个概念，这一点我也是缺乏的，我也得改改） As we know, Karl Marx and Friedrich Engels, in last eighties, not only are they colleagues, but also critic to each other on their advancing process（句式变换的好）, it is only because they put different opinions on their partner momentous and significant opus can be created. Since our societies level of perspective is diversity, it is critic who might be great helpful in order for artist to perpetuate their creations. （读到这里，我自然而然地问 critic 到底是一类人，还是具体的人，是泛指，对吧，是人能产生lasting value 对吧， 而不是criticism对吧，我觉得这里有偷换概念的嫌疑）

    An art, only withstanding the judgment by society, could be passed down, and every flaw be found, amended is a step to perfection. （倒装句用的好，我向你学习，但内容归纳的视乎有点跑题）Thus, as our society necessities the artist to the lasting value, still we could not ignore the positive affect by the critic.

总的来说，你的文采还是很好的，文章语言很不错，但是逻辑有点混乱，对一些概念界定有点问题，以上是我个人的观点，批的有点严重，希望兄弟过来报仇雪恨:@

小小amyUID: 2541111

写的比我好。。。向你学习~~~偶今天刚写第一篇，就是这篇。。。跑题了貌似