argument185

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT185 - The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment building to its manager.

"One month ago, all the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately 1/3 of its original force. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, restricting water flow throughout all the 20 floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase our profits further."
In this argument, the author concludes that the restricting water flow throughout all floors of Sunneyside Towers will increase our profits further. In order to brace his conclusion, the author cites the result of the modifying over the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers. The line of analysis seems reasonable at first sight, while several illogical flaws make it unpersuasive.

The threshold problem of the letter is that, in the example, only the first five floors were included in the test, as there are 20 floors in total, we can hardly get any reference information from that test if we want to modify the showerheads on the last fifty floors. Since we all know that, the higher the layer is, the less the water press is. If we restrict all the showerhead in the buildings to approximately 1/3 of its original force, the people lives on the twentieth floor may get no water for bathing through the showerheads.

Secondly, from the letter we can know comparing to the water usage before the adjustment, that after the modifying, no actual readings of water usage are yet available. Consequently, we can entirely doubt that how can the author get the assumption that the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation. whether it is based on actual statistic data or it is just based on the prediction of the author. And, this subjective case, seriously weaken the validity of this letter.

Finally, the author explained that except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. As there was only a month passed since the modifying, the author seems to hasty to make his generalization. There are also feasibilities that it happened to be the slack season of travelling a month ago, and few guests come to live in the Sunnyside Towers apartment, maybe since the boom season of travelling comes several months later, accompanying with the growing number of the new livers, the water press may gets lower and the complaints may become more. Or even perhaps the people living here don not like to respond their actul ideas, and they would rather move out if  they  cannot bear the water problem.

In addition, the owner should take the disadvantages of the modifying into consideration. For instance, whether the pay is worthwhile comparing to the gain we get, or whether modifying showerheads will emebrass guests from living here. The author should not ignore all these aspects.

To sum up, the author should make a more concrete study involved all the floors in the buildings, based all his conception above the actual statistic data, pay attention to all factors which may affect his notion, after all this, his assumption may be more validity.  

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In this argument, the author concludes that the restricting water flow throughout all floors of Sunneyside Towers will increase our(our?the  apartment's) profits further. In order to brace his conclusion, the author cites the result of the modifying over the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers(是否应该吧complaints那个因素也加进去概括一下？）. The line of analysis seems reasonable at first sight, while several illogical flaws make it unpersuasive.

The threshold problem of the letter is that, in the example(example?不合适吧), only the first five floors were included in the test, as there are 20 floors in total, we can hardly get any reference information from that test if we want to modify the showerheads on the last fifty floors. Since we all know that, the higher the layer is, the less the water press is. If we restrict all the showerhead in the buildings to approximately 1/3 of its original force, the people lives on the twentieth floor may get no water for bathing through the showerheads.

Secondly, from the letter we can know comparing to the water usage before the adjustment, that after the modifying, no actual readings of water usage are yet available. Consequently, we can entirely doubt that how can the author get the assumption that the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation. whether it is based on actual statistic data or it is just based on the prediction of the author. And, this subjective case, seriously weaken the validity of this letter.

Finally, the author explained that except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. As there was only a month passed since the modifying, the author seems to （too) hasty to make his generalization. There are also feasibilities that it happened to be the slack season of travelling a month ago, and few guests come to live in the Sunnyside Towers apartment, maybe since the boom season of travelling comes several months later, accompanying with the growing number of the new livers, the water press (pressure) may gets (get) lower and the complaints may become more. Or even perhaps the people living here don not like to respond their actul ideas, and they would rather move out if  they  cannot bear the water problem.

In addition, the owner should take the disadvantages of the modifying into consideration. For instance, whether the pay is worthwhile comparing to the gain we get, or whether modifying showerheads will emebrass (?) guests from living here. The author should not ignore all these aspects.

To sum up, the author should make a more concrete study involved all the floors in the buildings, based all his conception above the actual statistic data, pay attention to all factors which may affect his notion(notion?不太对吧）, after all this, his assumption may be more validity (valid).  

逻辑错误找的很准确，分析也很到位
个别单词词性有误，还有些用法不太恰当，
开头个人觉得把那个因素应该包括进去更全面
还有一点，further profits我觉得profits不能因为水费就把profits提高了，水费毕竟不是很大一部分，应该是其他更重要的因素。
楼主意下如何？布置这样分析对不对？