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"Truly profound thinkers and highly creative artists are always out of step with their time and their society."
Because of some certain paradigm(s) in the history , I entirely agree with the speakers' (speakers??单数?复数?好象都不肯定,干脆不要用SPEAKER了,直接说THE STATEMENT ABOVE )assertion that some ingenious(好词,捏捏) thinkers and highly creative artists always precede their time and their society, thus few people coauld (could)understood them.(看完开头,觉得用词用句方面真是高手啊,捏啊 可惜有点短啊——鸡蛋里挑骨头,挖哈哈)
On the one hand, there are many famous scientists, artists whose works and theories were (为什么要WERE呢) far beyond the people’s ability of comprehension in their time and their society(很漂亮的 FAT BEYOND!捏捏). The history of any field is exactly a gradual process along with intermissions and breakthroughs. Those highly creative thinkers or artists are just like the "spark" which ignite(加S) a whole wood pile(哇,真是受益非浅啊,又拣到一个好句子,捏捏,8过单复数有点混乱哦), (句号咯)but when the dazzling "spark" jumps(西西,真可爱) to the “wood pile”, most people do not notice(REALIZE是不是更地道呢?西西)what would happen. Albert Einstein was the greatest scientist of physics in the last century, because of his works in Relativity which is now well known by the contemporary people(WORKS IN RELATIVITY?WORK后面加了S就是指美术、文学方面的著作,用这里不妥,你是想说“成就”吧?建议用ACHEIVEMENT 或者 CONTRIBUTE喔~). But in the time when he published his three papers of Relativity as a common clerk, there were only few people could understand his works. His thought of time and space entirely exceeded the intelligence(好!) of people in his time. After several years, American government discovered his talents. With the help of Albert Einstein, America invented the first atomic bomb which played an decisive role in ending the Second World War. Moreover, in the field of art, the Fauvism of Vincent Van Gogh, and the Cubism of Picasso had also suffered a long period to become famous to the public. Till his death, Vincent only sold three pieces of his artworks which are now the most invaluable collectives in the art museums. As for Picasso, his artworks were also not welcomed in early period of his career. Those great thinkers and artists provide human the most marvelous achievements which make consequential improvement in their specified field, even though some of them have not been granted the deserved honor due to their highly advanced theories or creations(这句太精彩了!!GRANT THE DESERVED HONOR!赞!).
(不错,论证的主题举用了大量的里子,8过感觉有点少啊~~~HOHO,而且,你开头都说了 ENTIRELY AGREE WITH 题目的观点,可下面这段怎么又来个让步呢?)
On the other hand, those great thinkers and artists did not absolutely separate from the common society. Though the geniuses’ works can not be kept up with by the public for a long time, in fact, their works were surely based on the common life in that time. For instance, the paintings of Van Gogh though were considered as crude and unskilled works by people in his time, and they loved paintings with delicate colors and exquisite skills, such as the painting of Vinci. But Van Gogh’s skills were not as crude as their opponents, his works honestly depended on his observation and unaffected presented his emotions and perspectives which endowed soul into canvases. One of his painting which portrayed a family who were eating potatoes in their dark and poky room described the real lives of destitute people, and another painting which drawed(挖哈哈DEPICTING) a naked woman who was his girlfriend and a whore are fraught with love and sympathy. Unfortunately, his subject can not intrigue the public in that time(小BUG,改成 AT THAT TIME), But those deeper aspects of his painting were really based on his distinct observations and unfeigned sensations.
To sum up, truly profound thinkers and highly creative artists are always out of step with their time and their society, (句号啊)(BUT)at the same time, their works are not entirely separated from the common society.
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