ssphia 2015-10-27 17:18
дissue61鷳 де ...
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ssphia 2015-10-27 17:18
дissue61鷳 де ...
https://quip.com/QHMuAkE2NbJ2
ssphia 2015-10-27 17:18
дissue61鷳 де ...
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这里是我练习的Issue 55:
In order for any work of art—for example, a film, a novel, a poem, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
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Art works are the embodiments of human’s aesthetic tastes, and through art works, people can see a spiritual world that brings many feelings. Some people say only those are works that can be understood by most people are good ones. However, I believe that the comprehensibility to certain art works is determined by several factors, such as language, cultural backgrounds and generation gaps. And sometimes, a good art word is deliberately opaque since they are targeted at certain groups of people rather than the common public.
Primarily, the art works, either in the form of film, novel, poem or song are strongly confined by factors in terms of appreciation. For example, songs are composed to express people’s inner feelings and emotion to the outside world. However, the song lyrics are written in certain languages. It is not uncommon to see that a Chinese song that moves so many people remains unpopular among American listeners, because the language barrier. No matter no beautiful and poetic the lyrics are, people who cannot speak Chinese will not be able to see its beauty. Other than languages, cultural differences hinder the appreciation of art works. Some comedies in English is hard to be understand by non-native speakers due to some puns and slangs in the conversations are not familiar with foreign audience. Also, the time gap weakens people’s comprehensibility to art works. Beijing opera was a heat in the late Qing Dynasty, either the young or the old enjoyed it and took it as a great way to entertain. However, as time passes by, less and less people can understand Beijing Opera, since the contents are out of the date. Despite all these facts, people cannot deny the greatness of these art forms. The the appreciator stands in the shoes of certain group of people and see from certain angle, they have many merits actually.
Second, some art works are targeted at some people, and most people lack the ability to understand them indeed. Modern art is one of these works. Modern art is famous for its abstract nature, and through those abstract lines, shapes, and lousy colors, the painters can convey transform their invisible feelings to the outside world into a tangible image. Some appearing messes perhaps speaks for the painters conflicting emotions inside; while the tiny elaborated storks express the sentiments that are hard to capture. Only people who are trained with a pair of professional eyes can appreciate these modern arts. Even though the explanations to these arts are not entirely exact, since they can be very personal feelings of painters themselves. Nevertheless, saying these difficult and abstract modern arts have no merit is unfair. To some extend, modern arts reflect notions that beyond the public understanding.
Admittedly, the art works that are understandable to most people tend to be more popular and have more merits. A potential reason is that they are open to different explanations by different people. For instance, there is a saying, there are a thousand Hamlet in a thousand readers’ mind. Some people see Hamlet as a coward, some see him as a martyr. The variant understanding adds to its merits since it gives readers enough space to resonance with Hamlet. Films, as a form of public art works, in most cases should be understandable to most people. The investment into films is not a small sum of money, in order to earn the investment back, these films need to be understandable. If a film is aloof and very few people get its deep meaning, the revenues would not be able to cover its cost. When films are understandable, critics, news papers and audience will find the merits in them, therefore making them merrier.
In conclusion, a good art work does not necessarily to be understood by most people; due to language, cultural and time reasons, they can remain opaque to the public, but it is still merry. However, when art works are understandable, the merits of them will double, even triple. In a word, the merit of art work should not be measure by the number of people who can understand it. (631words)
王老师，今天回家较晚，把我考前半月的时候练习的一篇ARGUMENT习作贴上来，您看一看我的语言。我因为考前时间特别紧张，作文基本没有练习，ISSUE没有写过，ARGUMENT练过几篇。这是其中的一篇，稍微超了些时间写的，大约四十分钟，写完改了一下TYPO，别的没有怎么动过。
Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author assumes that the franchise of Nature’s way in P town, which sells health food and other health-related products, would be very successful because he/she believes that P town is an area in which the residents living a health life. The author offers some evidences to verify the assumption that P town’s residents living a health lives: an all-time high sales report of the running shoes and excise clothing, more members in the health club taking the weight training and aerobics classes, and a fitness-for-life program for the schoolchildren. Even if these evidences are true, it is unnecessarily leading to the truth that the residents in P town have an enthusiastic interests in the health life, thus the assumption that the franchise of the Nature’s Way would be successful seems unwarranted. We need more information to reason that the NW will be successful in this area.
To begin with, we need to know how many other stores dealing the same kinds of products or health-related foods in the town already. If the residents in this town have a great enthusiasm in health life, and there should be huge needs of the health food and health-related products before, thus, there must be other health-related stores in the town already. If this is true, the NW’s franchise has to compete with the other stores in the town. So if the related data is not demonstrated, we cannot judge that the UW will definitely success.
Moreover, it is not a sound reasoning to say that the fondness of the physical exercise must lead to a fondness of the health foods. Maybe the residents in this town have a proclivity to eat the unhealthy foods so they need more exercise to prevent from getting to obesity. The truth that the sales report of the clothing merchant or the members records in the health club do not lead to the conclusion that they are really care the health of their food. Even though they realize that they need more exercise, they would not change their habits in foods. So if we do not know the real habits of the residents in the town, we cannot expect that they are likely to choose the health foods or health related products in NW franchise.
Finally, the author cites a fitness-for-life program in the school and takes the schoolchildren as the potential customs of their business. The author’s assumption should be doubted in two reasons. Firstly, the fitness-for-life program in school may be true, but we do not know its real effects. If there is no further survey of the students, we do not know what are their real opinions on the program. We can imagine a scenario: the school initiates the program, but the schoolchildren do not care about the program. Secondly, even if the children take the program seriously, the NW franchise could not point on the children as the future potential customs because there are years for them to grow up and decides what kinds of food they could choose.
In conclusion, the author makes a lot of assumptions which need to be reconsidered thoroughly. There are many other evidences or information should be count in to make the assumptions. If the author could not do this, the argument will be not strong enough.
geomo 发表于 2015-10-27 23:36
王老师，今天回家较晚，把我考前半月的时候练习的一篇ARGUMENT习作贴上来，您看一看我的语言。我因为考前时 ...
你没有理解什么是assumption 一开始就把结论当成assumption
于是就呵呵了
erinyhr 发表于 2015-10-27 21:06
这里是我练习的Issue 55:
In order for any work of art—for example, a film, a novel, a poem, or a so ...
我昨天在微信上跟你讲的 你可否这个记录放在这里 再改一下这篇
nice!
tesolchina 发表于 2015-10-28 06:50 static/image/common/back.gif
你没有理解什么是assumption 一开始就把结论当成assumption
于是就呵呵了
谢谢王老师。仔细想了一下，您说的是，这个开头就整歪了。当时练习的时候没有想好就动手写了，惭愧，这种低级错误……我也忘记考试的那篇当时是怎么开头的的，不知道会不会也是这种情况。
另外我想问您一下，我的语言，总体差距大吗？考了这个低分，对自己各方面的表现都很怀疑了……
现在基本决定二战了，可能在二月份。备考时少不了要请王老师指点。麻烦您了
练习：Argument 46
The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined.
But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness.
Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit.
Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does.
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The health magazine makes an argument on the cause of the low fitness rate in Corpora, and bases its argument on several assumptions: the relatively low fitness rate in Corpora compared to that twenty years ago, the correlation between computer ownership and fitness, as well as that between the declining economy and fitness. However, these assumptions are not fully warranted, and there are unseated assumptions beyond the argument. A careful examination on the arguments is needed.
First and foremost, the health magazine contends that the population that meet the current standards of physical fitness is smaller than that twenty years ago. This assumption is based on another assumption that either the fitness standard and demographic structure in Corpora remain the same as it was twenty years ago. However, the argument fails to give clear information on the situation on these two points. It is highly possible that the nowadays fitness standards in Corpora is much higher than that twenty years, and the changes may due to the overall healthier diet structure and larger accessibility to gyms. Also, the different population structure can bring different outcomes. It is reasonable to assume that those who reached the fitness standards twenty years ago move to somewhere else, and the there are increasing number of senior citizens moving into Corpora in recent years, therefore the percentage of the population who can be counted as physically fit shrink.
Second, the health magazine refers to the computer use as a potential cause to lower fitness rate, but quickly reject this idea by citing that those who have higher ownership of computers actually show higher fitness rate. This assumption is not reliable at all. The frequency of the usage of computer among these people who have computers remain unknown to us, but the assumption automatically assumes people who have computer use the computer the most. However, it is possible that these people seldom use computers, and use the time to work out in the gyms. It is also reasonable to argue that those who do not have computers use the computers in public places instead, but make up the major population who use computers frequently. And they tend to ignore the fitness. Thus, the correlation between computer ownership and fitness rate does not necessarily suggests the experts’ assert is wrong.
Besides, the assumption that the declining economy should explain the lower fitness rate is not reliable, either. The health magazine suggests the year’s expenditure on fitness-related products and serve is unusually low, although this observation holds true, it cannot be used to defend the assumption. This assumption blames the declining economy contributes to the low expenditure but ignore the other cause. For example, people spend less money on fitness related products and services is because the gyms in Corpora has unusually high discounts on products and services in recently years, which lead to low expenditures. Apart from this, the improving economy cannot guarantee higher fitness level actually, since the people may have simply grown a habit and converted to jogging in the parks to keep fit instead of using the fitness-related products and services.
All in all, the assumptions the health magazine based on are not warranted. To make its argument more reasonable, a thorough examination on the stated and unstated assumptions is needed.
tesolchina 发表于 2015-10-27 20:34 static/image/common/back.gif
https://quip.com/QHMuAkE2NbJ2
https://quip.com/WBx3ALgv0MjI 感谢老师的点评，发现自己在30分钟内真的没有详细说明例子，写的比较浅显，这次修改也是上网查了些资料才写的，https://quip.com/G785AwmNRJpf （这个是修改后的，麻烦老师看一下）
ssphia 发表于 2015-10-28 21:22 static/image/common/back.gif
https://quip.com/WBx3ALgv0MjI 感谢老师的点评，发现自己在30分钟内真的没有详细说明例子，写的比较浅显 ...
我看了一下 以后同一道题 开一个文档就好了 同时可以在我的范文提纲那里加一个你的习作链接 这样其他同学也可以学习一下
我正在将博客的内容转到Quip上面去 主要是因为Quip提供的界面非常强大 很方便我帮助学生修改作文
同时我也可以利用Quip完成我的书稿
有兴趣的同学可以看这里 https://quip.com/NUNOA3SlV4V9
论坛这边我还会保持更新和参与
明年暑假的时候可能会在华中科技大学开一个GRE作文课 争取那时书可以出版
tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-5 21:17 static/image/common/back.gif
argument 14
The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
“Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions”
请问老师，我们是不是需要详细论述一下这一方面？
大家好，我是新人 ，希望大家能多多指点我，谢谢
这是我写的第一篇argument
Argument1
Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Conclusion: Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Evidence: The Brim Rever is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found.
In this argument, the author arrives at the conclusion that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. To support this claim, the author points out that the Brim river between Palean and Lithos is so deep and board that taking a boat is the only way to cross the river. Also, the author cites the evidence that no palean boats have been found. However, this line of reasoning is rarely convincing and we need further evidence.
To begin with, the author needs to provide evidence about the historical condition about the Brim River，since the current condition of the Brim River is not necessarily the same as that of the past. For example, the river may be the flatland or just a shallow brook in the past. Even if there really once existed a river between Palean and Lithos, we need specific number about the the width and depth of the river in the past and the height of ancient people and whether they have the ability to swim to rule out the possibility that they are able to walk through it or swim across it. In short, lacking detailed evidence the past condition of Paleans, the author cannot convince me to agree with his conclusion that baskets were not uniquely Palean.
What’s more, even if the river was deep and broad enough to obstruct ancient Paleans from crossing the river by themselves, the arguer is still required to provide evidence that the only way to cross the river is to travel by boat. For example, perhaps in the past Paleans had succeeded building a bridges so that people on both sides could drop around easily, which will make it hard to determine where the baskets originate from. Or perhaps in the winter the climate there was so cold that the river would have been frozen into ice, thus people can go to Lithos without trouble. Without eliminating these possibilities, the author cannot defend the conclusion that based on this evidence that Lithos also made baskets.
Finally, based on the assumption that Paleans could have crossed the river only by boat, the author cites the fact that no Palean boats have been found. Firstly, evidence about the method of identifying should be disclosed. If the method has some flaws, the evidence that no Palean boat have been found is unconvincing. For example, it may ignore some possible remains of the boat since the chemical component has changed. Or perhaps the boat has been destroyed entirely without any remains. Moreover, their failure to find Palean boats does not necessarily mean that Palean boats do not exist. It is entirely possible that Paleans has fine crafts to make boats but the boat relics have been buried too deep thus archaeologists have difficulty excavating them so far.
Even if Palean boats do not exist indeed, we had to consider whether Lithos could make boat. If Lithos can make boat, they can cross the river by boat to communicate with Paleans, which renders the author’s claim unconvincing.