issue51 归队的前奏，高频（sally)

yangxingUID: 2112368

TOPIC：ISSUE 51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS：452          TIME：1:00:00          DATE：2005-12-25
1.赞成
2.对个人的独特教育可能导致一些问题
3.纵容个人的兴趣可能导致不可想象的后果
4.我们应该引导孩子们去寻找自己的兴趣

When we should say the education is more effective, there will be many factors influenced it. Perhaps, education, which is designed to adjust to the individuals requirments and intests, is a more suitable maethod to education. Whereas, it is seems too simple and extreme.

Education, which is designed to individuals, is a great way to nuturing the intests and hobbies of a person. As we all know, the education to different persons will hve different nurishing way and they also have different idears and inteligence to what they are studying. To a individual, he or she will have different requirement and intersting and they should have different education are the standards of a successful education.The standard is validy to our education system in this time.

The education designed to individuals also have the disadvantages to the future of a person. Maybe sometimes the type of educaiton is not the most effective way to educate a person. To have a specifically ducation means it should have a lonely deucation and don not hve the same education to the others. In our real lifetime,we know the coorparation should have more sufficient to us learning knowledge. When you have the troublsome and series problems, the educators maybe tell you how to deal with it, whereas, the methods of solving the problems chould not impressed on you. And the teameork with your classmates will have the opposite effectie.

Admittedly, the education to spectial individuals could have more effevtive to educate and chould inspire the intesting and requirement of individuals. Firstly, however, we also donnot know whether the individuals have know what they are intested and requirment. Maybe in the early times of a individual, he or she only perfer to play games onthe computer or concern about some special type of novels. It is not right to their future and harmful to them.

Secondly, maybe the intests and requirments will be different with the growth of a person. When the individual is a childern, they maybe intrest in many aspects of science. In the time, if you are order they to like some special knowledge, he ore she will be positive to learn it and don not have a continuous intesting and restrain their a braoder perspective.

In addition, in the hypothesisi, the special education to individuals is more stengthen, it may have positive effects to some essential content of education. After all, the study is a most important work to a student, however, if he ore she like to play game and watch TV or novels, should we sustain them?

To sum up, the special education to a individual, it maybe a more effective way to have a succesful eduaction, whereas, it may too exthem. If we put the other methods together, we must have a more successful and more effective educaton to students.

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[ Last edited by 11yaoyao on 2005-12-25 at 14:40 ]

sallyxinduUID: 2131253

哎呀，yangxing终于回来了～～～～大家都想念你了，还有４８７７８也考试去了．
有空快快参与到sally-kito小组的友谊铁中来，kito小组的成员很积极，很多都修改了我们这边提供的范文，但是我们这边的组员可能比较忙吧，都没去修改，我们可不能落下啊～～

sallyxinduUID: 2131253

另外，先占个坐，晚上一定看看你修炼后的文章

sallyxinduUID: 2131253

TOPIC：ISSUE 51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS：452          TIME：1:00:00          DATE：2005-12-25
1.赞成
2.对个人的独特教育可能导致一些问题
3.纵容个人的兴趣可能导致不可想象的后果
4.我们应该引导孩子们去寻找自己的兴趣
感觉４可以放在２的位置，因为１４都是说该因材施教，２３是说因材施教有弊端．一般来说最好相同的放在一起．

When we should say the education is more effective,when concerning the efficiency of education, there will be many factors influenced it. Perhaps, 不正式，even though好点。education, which is designed to adjust to the individuals' requirments and intests, is a more suitable a maethod to education. Whereas, it is seems too simple and extreme to evaluate education via only it's accordance with individuals' interests

Education, which is designed to individuals,重复，换表达法，which is of individuals' need provenance is a great way to nuturingsatisfying the intests and hobbies of a person. As we all know, the education to different persons will hve should adopt different nurishing wayas nd in that they also have hold different idears and inteligence to what they are studying. To a individual, he or she will have different requirement and intersting and they should have different education are the standards of a successful education.有两个动词了The standard is validy to our education system in this time.
句子的表达进步了很多，但分析有点空，加点例子会更好。

The education designed to individuals also have the disadvantages to the future of a person. Maybe sometimes the type of educaiton is not the most effective way to educate a person. To have a specifically ducation means it should have a lonely deucation and don not hve the same education to the others. In our real lifetime,we know the coorparation should have more sufficient 　bear some good to us learning knowledge. When you have the troublsome and series problems, the educators maybe tell you how to deal with it, whereas, the methods of solving the problems chould not impressed on you. And the teameork with your classmates will have the opposite effectie.
思维有点混乱，开始说因材施教有弊端，但结尾是合作会带来负面效应。严重需要调整，这种做法考试时最好不要用，

Admittedly, the education to spectial individuals could have more effevtive to educate and chould inspire the intesting and requirement of individuals. Firstly, however, we also either donnot know whether the individuals have know what they are intested and requirment. Maybe in the early times of a individual, he or she only perfer to play relishes playing games onthe computer or concernes about some special type of novels. It is not right to their future and harmful to them. which are detrimental to their future

Secondly, maybe the intests and requirments will be different change with the growth of a person. When the individual is a childern, they maybe intrest in many aspects of science. In the time, if you are order they to like some special knowledge, sheer chinglish, 改为；if you construct them to grasp a certain scrap  of knowledge,he ore she will be positive to learn it and don not have a continuous intesting and restrain their a braoder perspective., as time goes, however,they will get tired of it, thus all the efforts exerted in previosu times inevitably turn out to be in vain.

In addition, in the hypothesisi, the special education to individuals is more stengthen, it may have positive effects to some essential content of education. After all, the study is a most important work to a student, however, if he ore she like to play game and watch TV or novels, should we sustain them?
这段完全可以和上段合并

To sum up, the special education to a individual, it maybe may be a more effective way to have a succesful eduaction in some ways, whereas, it may too exthemor even harmful in some other aspects. . If we put the other methods together, we must have a more successful and more effective educaton to students.

句子的进步还是可以，但是，结构比混乱，不是严格按照提纲写的，有很多段落都是可以合并的，这样ＥＴＳ还觉得你把一个方面分析得比较透彻，但你这样一安排，有的段落就一句话，节下来的分析也没有，反倒让人觉得思考肤浅。另一个严重的问题就是连接词语的使用，比如在论述中都到了第四点还在说secondly，这样绝对是不行的．显得非常混乱。再者，口语化表达现象比较严重．
yangxing 的句子闭关修炼有效果，结构和逻辑注意了．可以参考下小组其他成员的同主题协作
加油！！！

[ Last edited by sallyxindu on 2005-12-25 at 22:52 ]