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TOPIC: ISSUE159 - "The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."


In current society, there is a heat debate over the controversial issue that whether human mind will always be superior to machines. Some hold the view that machines will always be inferior to human mind in any case because of they are only the tools of our human being, while others believe that machines will probably replace the leading role of human being with the fast development of artificial intelligence in the future. As far as I know, it is very likely that both the two groups overlook the accurate definition of “superior”, which has different meanings in distinct aspects while compared.
On the one hand, while human being and machines compared in these aspects such as efficiency, quality, quantity and productivity, undoubtedly, manpower will in absolute disadvantage with regard to mechanical machines. According to a recent survey, a new mechanical invention in the field of farm can highly increase the efficiency by 100 times than manpower without which the farm owners have to employ 100 workers per day in the harvest time, which have fully demonstrated the advantages of automation. In addition, mechanical automation can produce manufacture ceaselessly as long as having enough raw materials, electricity, water, fuel, and so on... while common workers should have enough resting time, health welfare, sufficient democracy right and good cooperation between each other, all of which are not necessary for machines. Furthermore, artificial intelligence such as computer has the capability of doing accurate computing at a high speed with high efficiency while human being even the most distinguished mathematician can not catch up with in the world. Therefore, any one could not come to the conclusion that human being will always be superior to machines at every aspect in a hurry.
   On the other hand, when creativity and originality are mentioned, human mind will show greater advantage and vitality far over machines. As known to all, every invention results from the creative job and unique insight of human being through probing into the truth and disclosing the mystery of the world, which is impossible for the lifeless machines. Through endless exploration and attempt and experiment, a great deal of outstanding inventions help bring our society into a more technological, more convenient, more harmonious world, which mechanical machines will not realize of course. The task what the artificial intelligence is competent for is just these programs which have been already fixed on by their designers, that is to say, under the control of human being, which helps us play the leading role in the development of the social history. For example, no matter how advanced the machines are, they can not run normally without the careful maintains and accurate control by the operators, which is important for all the automations even for the most smart ones.
Most importantly and specially, thought and sensibility take up a unique position in our mental life and our daily life, which makes all the things around us are enthusiastic, however, machines even the most advanced robot will never possess.
However, in order to make better use of technology and benefit the welfare of the whole world, we should not only magnify the positive effect but also eliminate the negative effect of high technologies such as the controversial clone technology, transverse-genetic technology and computer science which are related to the development of our society closely. Only in this way, our human being will never have to face the embarrassment, destroyed by the evil technology, which always appears in the fictional movies.
All in all, although many people may sincerely believe that human mind will always be superior to machines, taking into all the dimensions, I could not agree with this statement completely. Furthermore, we should also make better use of the progress of science correctly in order to welfare the whole human being.

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TOPIC: ISSUE159 - "The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."

In current society, there is a heat debate over the controversial issue that whether human mind will always be superior to machines. Some hold the view that machines will always be inferior to human mind in any case because of they are only the tools of our human being, while others believe that machines will probably replace the leading role of human being with the fast development of artificial intelligence in the future. As far as I know, it is very likely that both the two groups overlook the accurate definition of “superior”, which has different meanings in distinct aspects while compared.开头最好提出你的观点哦

On the one hand, while human being and machines compared in these aspects such as efficiency, quality, quantity and productivity, undoubtedly, manpower will in absolute disadvantage with regard to mechanical machines. According to a recent survey, a new mechanical invention in the field of farm can highly increase the efficiency by 100 times than manpower without which这个从句连的有点太长了，建议without后面的这个分句用if重写一句吧 the farm owners have to employ 100 workers per day in the harvest time, which have fully demonstrated the advantages of automation. In addition, mechanical automation can produce manufacture ceaselessly as long as having enough raw materials, electricity, water, fuel, and so on... while common不common的worker也要吃饭啊，直接worker吧：） workers should have enough resting time, health welfare, sufficient democracy right and good cooperation between each other, all of which are not necessary for machines. Furthermore, artificial intelligence such as computer has the capability of doing accurate computing at a high speed with high efficiency while human being even the most distinguished mathematician can not catch up with in the world. Therefore, any one could not come to the conclusion that human being will always be superior to machines at every aspect in a hurry. 这段论证的逻辑很清楚，in addition, furthermore, therefore顺序很清楚，向你学习哦

   On the other hand, when creativity and originality are mentioned, human mind will show greater advantage and vitality far over machines. As known to all, every invention results from the creative job and unique insight of human being through probing into the truth and disclosing the mystery of the world, which is impossible for the lifeless machines. 这句很赞哦Through endless exploration and and改成逗号attempt and experiment, a great deal of outstanding inventions help bring our society into a more technological, more convenient, more harmonious world, which mechanical machines will not realize of course. The task what the artificial intelligence is competent for is just these programs which have been already fixed on by their designers, that is to say, under the control of human being, which helps us play the leading role in the development of the social history. For example, no matter how advanced the machines are, they can not run normally without the careful maintains and accurate control by the operators, which is important for all the automations even for the most smart ones.

Most importantly and specially, thought and sensibility take up a unique position in our mental life and our daily life spiritual and substance life, which makes all the things around us areare去掉，不然句子就不对了 enthusiastic, however, machines even the most advanced robot will never possess.这句是一个which后面接两个从句么？感觉有点不对

However, in order to make better use of technology and benefit the welfare可以这样用么？感觉有点问题 of the whole world, we should not only magnify the positive effect but also eliminate the negative effect of high technologies such as the controversial clone technology, transverse-genetic technology and computer science which are related to the development of our society closely. Only in this way, our直接human being就可以了 human being will never have to face the embarrassment, destroyed by the evil technology,destroy的主语是什么？这句有点问题 which always appears in the fictional movies.

All in all, although many people may sincerely believe that human mind will always be superior to machines, taking into all the dimensions, I could not agree with this statement completely. Furthermore, we should also make better use of the progress of science correctly in order to welfare the whole human being.你的观点是什么呢？

1你的观点是什么呢？看了好几遍我还没看懂。Body部分你先承认机器的作用，然后是两端强调人脑的作用。最后段你是不同意人类始终会超过机器么？好像和body部分冲突啊。而整个文章你的观点始终没有明确提出哦。
2论证的部分还是很清楚的，句子的连接也很清楚，想你学习：）
3你好像很喜欢用很长的从句结构哦，很多用的很漂亮，但是也有几个似乎太长了而且我理解上有点问题，呵呵。建议尽量在表达清楚的情况下用从句吧。

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