Issue154 ACTION小组第2次作业！

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Issue 154   Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators.
提纲：agree
1. 教育的重要性不言而喻。教育本来就不只是学校的任务。而是全社会的任务 。
2.家长对子女的教育是学校所不能替代的。
3.教育之后迟早要接触社会的。参加社区服务，可以增加和别人的交流。可以更好理解社会的运转。
4.当然家长和社区过多的参与学生教育也有弊端。

I agree with the assertion that education is so important that parents and communities should involed in it. It is no doubt that education is not only the priority for a child but also a fundamental factor for a society. It is not a big statment that education system of high-effectiveness and integrity can guarantee the society to move forward steadily. So, education is the obligation of the whole society not a certain group. That is, anyone who is related to a child should involved in the child's education more or less.

Indisputablly, schools play the most important role in the education system. But the function of a school is limited which focus on teaching students knowledge and practical skill. Besides knowledge and practical skill there are much more students should learn such as morality and interpersonal skills. On these aspects, schools usually can not do a good job. So, parents must play their roles at this point. For example, qualified parents often teach their children to be willing to help others out of trouble, or do not give up when facing failure. Unfortuntely, quite a few parents at present are not qualified because they believe education is none of their business but schools.

As for communities, they are also responsible for children's education. The reason for the participation of communities is they can help children touch with the society and socilize them. The role of communities can not be replaced by schools. Because in touching with communities children get in touch with individuals with different ages, jobs and status. Unlike in schools, they are only able to contacts with children about their only ages. With the participation of communities children know the the society better and help them better adapt to the society. And provide a good enviroment for children growth is more imoportant. The chances are that a child lives in a community full of crime will be a criminal when he grows up.

However, too much participation of parents and communities maybe harmful to children. Some parents are so skeptical that they just intervene children's study in school inchluding choosing curriculum and text books, pace and schedule for learning. This kind of behavior is considerable because parents are usually lacking of experience in education. And the choice of them are likely to be counterproductive. Too much participation of parents and communities will confuse children if what they learn from three parties conflict with each other which is no good to children's development.

In sum, besides schools, parents and communities should involved in education. Moreover, the three parties just play their own roles in the education system and not to intereven the others' job.

coralwuUID: 2101200

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先谢谢你给我改的作业啊.真感动,虽然红了一大片,但心里很希望有人这么严厉地批下去.

你的文章论述的还是很不错的,但是理论性的论述多了点,加点例子什么的可能会更好.因为这一个题目,一般都是从这三方面去写的,想要出采,不能只靠论述..

加油加油..