issue43 小女子第一次限时成功，写了607字，欢迎拍拍

杨亦涵UID: 2187928

Should the requirement of being an effective leader is to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards? In this statement the author states so. In my view, whether a public official is effective or not depends on different situation and thus the issue is a case by case analysis.

In the political area, it is generally considered that to an effective leader one may not to be with high ethical and moral. The main responsibility of an effective leader should be establishing, building and expanding the wealth, prosperity and political influence on his or her nations. Undoubtedly this is his or her main concern. We are convinced that high moral and ethical standards are not the prerequisite for a leader to be effectiveness. A typical illustration is the former American President Bill Clinton. During his administration he won the extraordinary high approval ratings even most of the supporters did not agree with his personal life. It is because people often owe great contributions to a political official without the consideration of the ethical and moral standards.

In business area, I would say that being a good business leader, he or she should maintain the high ethical and moral standards even not the highest. I concede that the main duty of a business leader is to enhance the reputation of the company and contribute maximized profits to the shareholders. Nevertheless, to be honest could contribute to a company's success. Honesty is a very important part of moral and ethical standards. On the one hand, a business that does not invest the trust will, over time, will be rejected by the market, by investors, by its customers and above all by its own people--employees. For example, Shanghai Robust, a corporative that once produced sports beverage, had added some substances which are easily addictive for human into their products follow the directions of its leaders in order to improve their sales. Unfortunately, the beverage was proven to be nocuous to human body rather than really make one "robust". Therefore the company had to face the bankruptcy duo to nobody buying their products any longer. On the other hand, a leadership without honesty could result in employees reluctant to give their loyalty and superior performance. Remember that employees want to feel proud of their company they work for as well as comfortable with its cultures and values.

In scientific realm, I would strongly agree that a leader should maintain the highest and moral standards. The one could never have some advances in his or her research, however never do not have the highest moral and ethical standards. Take The Hang Woo-Suk scandal for example. Dr. Hwang, a South Korean veterinary researcher once regarded as the national hero and a great effective leader in his scientific research area, was pointed out to have cheated during his experiment paper. It was proved to be untrue and artificial in his work which was published on the Science that he claimed he had cloned the embryo of the human successfully. Although someone in his research team found out the cheating when doing experiment, they could do nothing but keeping mum because they are under the leadership of Dr.Hwang. Now the whole South Korean suffers a great humiliation and Dr.Hwang was not a leader in his research team any more.

In sum, whether an effective leader should maintain the highest ethical and moral standards depends on different areas. In scientific area I say that a public official leader should be the highest and in business area, an individual should maintain the high ethical and moral standards. However in political area, it is probably not

杨亦涵UID: 2187928

哎呀， 忘发题目了。。。。。。

TOPIC: ISSUE43 - "To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."

wqylUID: 176809

限时能写这么多字数,先赞一记~
楼主的文字功底不错,思路也很清晰,用词丰富,语言地道.但是我总觉得文章还是有一种天马行空的感觉,还是有一些不必要罗嗦的话夹杂在论证中.还有个别句子显得有点口语化.
举的例子可以在叙述上精简下,这样可以有更多时间检查和润色.

杨亦涵UID: 2187928

原帖由 wqyl 于 2006-3-11 12:31 发表
限时能写这么多字数,先赞一记~
楼主的文字功底不错,思路也很清晰,用词丰富,语言地道.但是我总觉得文章还是有一种天马行空的感觉,还是有一些不必要罗嗦的话夹杂在论证中.还有个别句子显得有点口语化.
举的例子可 ...

谢谢wqyl的意见

嗯，我现在也觉得有点罗嗦，等会好好精简下

能有哪位GG帮我具体改改吗？？最好在文章的逻辑方面啊

wqylUID: 176809

原帖由 杨亦涵 于 2006-3-11 12:37 发表

谢谢wqyl的意见

嗯，我现在也觉得有点罗嗦，等会好好精简下

能有哪位GG帮我具体改改吗？？最好在文章的逻辑方面啊

晕~~还特别指明要GG改...呵呵

wqylUID: 176809

Should the requirement of being an effective leader is to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards? In this statement the author states so. In my view, whether a public official is effective or not depends on different situation and thus the issue is a case by case analysis.
开头不错.

In the political area, it is generally considered that to an effective leader one may not to be with high ethical and moral. The main responsibility of an effective leader should be establishing, building and expanding the wealth, prosperity and political influence on his or her nations. 前面3个动词和后边的名词可以一一互相搭配么?偶不清楚Undoubtedly this is his or her main concern. We are convinced that high moral and ethical standards are not the prerequisite for a leader to be effectiveness. A typical illustration is the former American President Bill Clinton. During his administration he won the extraordinary high approval ratings even most of the supporters did not agree with his personal life. It is because people often owe great contributions to a political official without the consideration of the ethical and moral standards.
这段虽然有举例,但感觉论证还是不能让人很信服.有点one-sideness

In business area, I would say that being a good business leader, he or she should maintain the high ethical and moral standards even not the highest. even 应该是if吧I concede that the main duty of a business leader is to enhance the reputation of the company and contribute maximized profits to the shareholders. Nevertheless, to be honest could contribute to a company's success. Honesty is a very important part of moral and ethical standards. 我觉得无须具体到honest,这样显得狭隘.用high ethical and moral standards论证就可以了,毕竟honest仅仅是一个方面On the one hand, a business that does not invest the trust will, over time, will be rejected by the market, by investors, by its customers and above all by its own people--employees. For example, Shanghai Robust, a corporative that once produced sports beverage, had added some substances which are easily addictive for human into their products follow the directions of its leaders in order to improve their sales. Unfortunately, the beverage was proven to be nocuous to human body rather than really make one "robust". Therefore the company had to face the bankruptcy duo to nobody buying their products any longer. On the other hand, a leadership without honesty could result in employees reluctant to give their loyalty and superior performance. Remember that employees want to feel proud of their company they work for as well as comfortable with its cultures and values.

In scientific realm, I would strongly agree that a leader should maintain the highest and moral standards. The one could never have some advances in his or her research, however never do not have the highest moral and ethical standards这句话费解,however never?. Take The Hang Woo-Suk scandal for example. Dr. Hwang, a South Korean veterinary researcher once regarded as the national hero and a great effective leader in his scientific research area, was pointed out to have cheated during his experiment paper. It was proved to be untrue and artificial in his work which was published on the Science that he claimed he had cloned the embryo of the human successfully. Although someone in his research team found out the cheating when doing experiment, they could do nothing but keeping mum because they are under the leadership of Dr.Hwang. Now the whole South Korean suffers a great humiliation and Dr.Hwang was not a leader in his research team any more.举例有点罗嗦了,句子可以精简下.

In sum, whether an effective leader should maintain the highest ethical and moral standards depends on different areas. In scientific area I say that a public official leader should be the highest and in business area, an individual should maintain the high ethical and moral standards. However in political area, it is probably not没贴上来?

[ 本帖最后由 wqyl 于 2006-3-11 12:50 编辑 ]

杨亦涵UID: 2187928

谢谢wqyl！！！
我觉得我现在较大的问题就是罗嗦，以前总觉得凑字数就尽量多写，看来还是不行呀！还是要有实质性的内容的！！！

apchyUID: 2121052

Should the requirement of being an effective leader is (be) to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards? In this statement the author states so. In my view, whether a public official is effective or not depends on different situation and thus the issue is a case by case analysis.

In the political area, it is generally considered that to (加个be似乎好一些) an effective leader one may not to (去掉) be with high ethical (ethic) and moral. The main responsibility of an effective leader should be establishing, building and expanding the wealth, prosperity and political influence on his or her nations. Undoubtedly this is his or her main concern. We are convinced that high moral and ethical standards are not the prerequisite for a leader to be effectiveness (effective). A typical illustration is the former American President Bill Clinton. During his administration he won the extraordinary high approval ratings even most of the supporters did not agree with his personal life. It is because people often owe great contributions to a political official without the consideration of the ethical and moral standards. (个人感觉这么评价Clinton有点冒险)

In business area, I would say that being a good business leader, he or she should maintain the high ethical and moral standards even not the highest. I concede that the main duty of a business leader is to enhance the reputation of the company and contribute maximized profits to the shareholders. Nevertheless, to be honest could contribute to a company's success. Honesty is a very important part of moral and ethical standards. On the one hand, a business that does not invest the trust will, over time, will (去掉) be rejected by the market, by investors, by its customers and above all by its own people--employees. For example, Shanghai Robust, a corporative that once produced sports beverage, had added some substances which are easily addictive for human into their products follow (应改为分词结构，followed还是following我不太确定) the directions of its leaders in order to improve their sales. Unfortunately, the beverage was proven to be nocuous to human body rather than really make one "robust". Therefore the company had to face the bankruptcy duo to (感觉有点别扭，是不是用because加从句更舒服一点) nobody buying their products any longer. On the other hand, a leadership without honesty could result in employees reluctant to give their loyalty and superior performance. Remember that employees want to feel proud of their company they work for as well as comfortable with its cultures and values.

In scientific realm, I would strongly agree that a leader should maintain the highest and moral standards. The (去掉) one could never have some advances in his or her research, however never do (does) not have the highest moral and ethical standards. Take The Hang Woo-Suk scandal for example (as an example). Dr. Hwang, a South Korean veterinary researcher once regarded as the national hero and a great effective leader in his scientific research area, was pointed out to have cheated during his experiment paper. It was proved to be untrue and artificial in his work which was published on the Science that he claimed he had cloned the embryo of the human successfully. Although someone in his research team found out the cheating when doing experiment, they could do nothing but keeping mum because they are under the leadership of Dr.Hwang. Now the whole South Korean suffers a great humiliation and Dr.Hwang was (is) not a leader in his research team any more. (例子很不错，要学习一下)

In sum, whether an effective leader should maintain the highest ethical and moral standards depends on different areas. In scientific area I say that a public official leader should be the highest and in business area, an individual should maintain the (好象应该去掉) high ethical and moral standards. However in political area, it is probably not

第一次拍砖，不当之处请多包含

apchyUID: 2121052

为什么在word里的颜色到这里没有了？谁能指点一下

杨亦涵UID: 2187928

谢谢apchy
有些语法问题我会根据你的意见好好改改的

大家一起进步呀！！

杨亦涵UID: 2187928

我也不知道呀，我也是新手，呵呵

jiachengxuUID: 144835

个人不是太赞同这样分类
再就是Dr.Hwang的例子似乎罗嗦了一点,可以精简一下
并且the embryo of the human 的说法好像不太妥当,应该是the stem cell of the human’s embryo(人类胚胎的干细胞,我不知道怎么表达,觉得应该是这样吧)

这么短的时间能写出这么多字,并且文字很流畅,偶素十分佩服呵呵,继续加油啊:)

杨亦涵UID: 2187928

谢谢jiachengxu的意见

我觉得如何分类无关紧要，只是要言之有理就可以了，呵呵

jiachengxuUID: 144835

原帖由 apchy 于 2006-3-11 12:58 发表
Should the requirement of being an effective leader is (be) to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards? In this statement the author states so. In my view, whether a public official is eff ...

word上面不有个可以改字体颜色的么?在工具栏位置