issue196 点评by GITER and galaxysong

poohUID：146994

Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or
damage the quality of life.【196】
技术解决了问题，但是带来了更多的问题，并且可能会威胁或损害生活质量。技术对人类社会的影响


Many people blame on technology of worsening the world by enduring problems such as wars, poverty, and pollution, while ignoring what they've been enjoying in everyday life, say, a computer or medicine to cure diseases. Although I admit that problems never leave us even for one minute; however, technology doesn't give birth to those problems but human do. Moreover, to maneuver technology in a wise way, it can benefit us; to be afraid of it, we check ourselves to move forward.

Wars, the most terrible and last thing we want, have deluded us too long. In another word, some people think it is technology that should be responsible for the great losses that wars impose on human. Reckless people even criticized those scientists who contributed to the research on atomic energy. In their disappointment and fears that technology is a monster that would one day destroy us, while they forget that technology is just a tool, a servant, invented by us and implemented by us; and if it has done something wrong, it is human that should be to blame. Why turn angry at the scapegoat, technology? The illusion on wars has cheated us and confused us, so that it takes the place of facts, then how could we progress if we go on coax ourselves? If someone thinks that to stop the advancement of technology is enough, that idea seems too childish and naive. It is time to wake up and have a retrospect on ourselves.

Actually, we, human can render technology work for us, which has made modern world today. To go on with the example of atomic energy. After we have seen how powerful the atomic energy, for a better use of such power, many nuclear power stations are built to provide electric power. The advantage of such energy enables us to save lots of natural resources as well as satisfy needs at a low cost. From the nuclear bomb to the nuclear power station, it is nearly the same technology, but with huge difference in the result. How come? The answer is that we are the commanders and it is eventually up to human that decide how to use technology. When it comes to progress in medical technology, everyone is a beneficiary. Born before the age of Pasteur, one could be knocked down to death even with a common wound exposed to the air, not to mention once catching vaccinia. Thanks to the advancement of medicine, most diseases cannot threaten people's lives and even some cancers can also be cured with special treatment. Thus, to use technology in a positive way, it can be a good servant.

Moreover, those pessimists that turn a blind eye to the benefit technology brought to us, not only indulge themselves in illusion, but also hamper the further development of technology. For instance, every time there is a space exploration of the outer space, there are always groups of people that fiercely protest or demonstrate against the exploration. They just fear that the movement will enrage deities or bring forth some disasters. If every member of a society has adopted the same opinion like them, no technology research or attempts could have been carried out, needless of saying any progress. Would anyone like to live in such a word just in order to feel 'safe'? Absolutely no. Even those detractors would not choose to live in any of the less technological ages that have preceded ours.

To recapitulate my point, only we break through the erroneous conception that technology spawns problems that can we realize the responsibility of any misconducts, if ever related to technology, should be accounted for us, and this is the premise for us to better use technology and make it a powerful engine to gear towards a brighter future. To fear technology only results in stagnation.

PS: 所谓经典‘范文’，乃是本人作品中的范文， :p

poohUID：146994

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poohUID：146994

谢谢GITER给我批，很有道理啊,我会认真改的


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Wars, the most terrible and last(lasting好像更好一点) thing we want(“want”这里是什么意思?), have deluded(这个词好像用来形容战争不是很合适，应该指的是一些没有解决的科学问题什么的，总之不是应该说这种纯人为因素造成的争端) us too long.

the last thing we want 最不想要的，最不想发生的事
我的意思是，人们痛恶战争，但是却一直被蒙蔽，应为人是战争的制造者，是这个思路，可以吗？

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turn a blind eye(hehe, 典型中国人的说法, 直接blind就可以了) to the benefit

gg可以查字典，不是中国人创的

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(其实有无神论者对于外太空的探索并不是绝对的分歧，其实反对者主要是根据高昂的费用发起的protest, 举个例子, 在崇尚唯物的中国，却出现了法轮功这种连唯心都称不上的邪说，而西方信仰自由，崇尚上帝对人精神的操控，实际上他们在从事科学的研究中并没有把信仰加入到主观的意识中，这也使得他们在铸造了伟大的科学成就的同时，保持着自己的信仰)

西方也有邪教，即使是基督徒也有很多因为信仰反对的。
不知道你有没有看过一个电影叫做contect 里面就有很多人反对搞太空研究，是因为信仰，不是因为钱的问题。

poohUID：146994

rukawa: mm言之有理，我会改正的，另外你说的那个攻击点，不太明白你的意思，我想我在作文里说到了人类的使用使科技自造了problem也解决了problem, 至于那个more,倒是没写到呢， :(

GITER:
gg真是厉害，佩服，不仅知识面广，而且很思辨，相对来说我写作文就没有考虑那么多，思路也比较简单，向你学习ing

BTW: 是contact，呵呵

poohUID：146994

galaxysong：感激ing, 佩服佩服。。。

我要仔细研究一下了，太感谢了，你一定花了不少时间吧，还帮我重写了。
兄弟，帮我看看刚写得argument吧，心里没底，不知道那样写行不行