Issue30 新种的机井高频椰树，科技进步目的与人们是否有更多闲暇

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No.1 Issue30，新种的机井高频椰树，科技进步目的与人们是否有更多闲暇
Issue30 The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time.

提纲：
1。不同意。科技进步的主要目的在于探知未知和提高人们的效率，未必更多空闲
2。科技进步的目的1
3。科技进步的目的2
4。两个目的都未必更多空闲。
5。总结

Living in such a world with rocketing development of technology, people must have been thought to enjoy much convenience so they should have more leisure time. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of technological advancement is not concentrated only on increasing people's efficiency but also on meeting human beings' curiousness by exploring unknown realms, to have more leisure time is not an inevitable byproduct of either.
开门见山的点明主旨，典范典范:p
不过个人认为最好再强调一下leisure time. 的问题，回应题目。

Foundationally, a probe would find out that technology advancement firstly result from the endeavors to offer useful tools to increase people's efficiency. The basic technology revolution somewhat could be pointed to " the first great step", that ancient people had learned to use simple tools other than their hands since they realized that some jobs were far beyond their capability or they could only do in a quite time-consuming way without the help of tools. So somehow like the prime instruments, almost every advancement human beings have made is based on the needs of living better. For example, the sewing machine helps people accelerate their speed to do sewing; computer is a great invention to solve problems which would take a mathematician over one or even more years before. As the same, Watt's steamer in 18th century was not only an engine of a boat or a train but also a motor to a more efficient time. Those technological advancements, to some extent, are all created on the purpose to liberate people from laborious jobs.
这段最好和leisure time联系一下。可以论证科技的发展的却是人们的效率提高了，表面上看给人们带来了更多的空余时间。但实际上并非如此。这样可以使文章看起来层层深入，紧扣主题。

Another goal of the technological advancement lies in meeting human being's innate curiousness. People are born with a curious sense about unknown matters, no matter they are ultimately found to be dangerous or boring. Such curiousness sometimes acts as a motivation of a new advancement of technology. For instance, if people, enveloping Brother Whites, were not so eager to why human beings can not fly as the birds do, there would no such great and significant invention, airplane, appear. Also, if it were postulated that there is no curiousness on the situation out of the earth where human beings live, astronautics would not be so developed to send Armstrong to the moon. In brief, some advancements of technology are somehow impulsed by people's curiosity.
这段是对题目的一个引申，本人认为还是和题目很有关联的，但不知道老米会不会认为是跑题。以前我曾发过帖子就论证的深度进行讨论，对题目的延伸会不会被认为是跑题，如果有兴趣可以查一下:P

However, no matter how the technological advancements arouse up, spurred by the needs or by the curiosity, they do greatly change the people' life style, but not necessarily a more leisure one. Sometimes, they do make people even much busier than ever before. Certainly, there are numerous examples to show how people are influenced by the technological advancements and are made idle since plenty of machines have taken over them on doing many jobs and convenient transports have saved so much time for them, but the same is the opposite examples. Living in a time with highly advanced technology, people have to pay more time to learn much to keep the pace with it, and make them not be washed out from their work positions. And what is more, they also have to arrange matters compactly in a single day since with the machines' help, a single matter would take less time than before. People are really more efficient but to try to catch up the speed of machines even makes them busier.
这段的论证有些单薄，最好就各个领域多举些例子。这样的例子很好找，也可以编自己身边的人。

In sum, the goal of technological advancement does not only stand on the single point to increase people's efficiency, also it results from the curiousness of human beings sometimes. With the convenience brought about by the innovations, people are more efficient but one cannot take granted that they will have more leisure time.（598 words）

我觉得这篇文章论证不错，如果主体3再详细点，可以拿5分吧
呵呵，个人意见:P
(有空也请看看我的文章，谢谢)