argument同主题写作第二类 8月16-17日

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Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

Claim: The Palean baskets could travel across the river only by boat.
Data: The Brim River is very deep and broad now.
Warrant: The ancient Brim River was as deep and wide as it is now, so it was impossible to build a bridge. There were no other means for the baskets to travel across the river if it was deep and wide.
Evidence1: The geography condition of the ancient Brim River.
Evidence2:Whether the river froze during the winter.
Evidence3:The material of the Palean baskets.

Claim: There was no boat to cross over the ancient Brim River.
Data: no Palean boats have been found.
Warrant: If no Palean boat exists, it was impossible for the ancient people to cross the river by boat.
Evidence1: Whether boats from Lithos existed.
Evidence2: The material of the boat.
Evidence3: Geographical condition in the local area (factors that might took the boat remains far from the local area).

According to the author, the Palean baskets were not unique to Palean, based on the fact that a 'Palean' basket was found in an adjacent village, and that there were seemingly no means for the basket to travel from Plea village to the adjacent one. However, in order to better evaluate the argument, we need more evidence about the geographical condition as well as the climate of the Brim River area in the ancient times, the materials the ancient people use to build a boat, and the material of the Palean basket.

The author claims that it was impossible for the basket to travel across the Brim River without a boat, because of the depth and width it has now. However, we need more evidence about the geographical condition about the ancient Brim River. It is possible that the river was shallow enough in the ancient times for the people to wade, or that the river was narrow enough to build a bridge, so the ancient villagers could take the basket to the adjacent village. Besides, we also need the local climate data. If it was cold enough for the Brim River to freeze in the winter, people can walk across the area, despite the depth and width of the river. What's more, we need to examine the material of the Palean basket. If the basket was made of wood or bamboos, which made the basket light enough to float on water, the river might carry it to Lithos.


点评：13楼
开头段：个人觉得firstly后面的这句是可以不用写的，因为这属于背景介绍一类，这里面并没有需要提供证据（也就是可驳斥）的点。

第一段没太看明白，个人觉得需要讨论的就是篮子有没有可能是从Palea而来的。不明白你这里讨论材料是针对什么？

In addition这段挑不出毛病，而且比较简洁。不过记得老师说过，新AW不要出现flaw这类词，因为作者的观点未必就是错的，只是需要更多证据。

Even if这段，同理，不要出现problematic。
个人觉得这段和上段有点重复了，你是想说明由于巨大的地质变化，这两个村子实际上在古时候很近吗？这和上一段的river was shallow or narrow实际是一个意思，都是说可以架桥或者涉水的意思吧？

困惑的地方，请老师或者其他小伙伴回答：
关于arg1的审题：如果这种篮子的编织技术是P村教给L村的，那么这还能算是P篮子吗？是不是此篮子已经不算unique了呢？

另外，我之前练习argu一直是3+1法，似乎和现在这种方法不太一样，Toulmin必须要写出warrant，不过我好像更习惯分层然后直接写出待解决的assumption/question/evidence。