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Arg 1 Palean Basket unique

Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.


Claim: the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Data:a 'Palean' basket was found in Lithos.
  /   The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat,
/and no Palean boats have been found.
Warrant: Because no Palean boats have been found, Palean people can't reach Litho without boats. It can believed that the 'Palean' basket in Lithos discovered by archaeologists was made by Lithos people.

开头段：According to the argument, the so-called Palean baskets maybe had been made by other people not only Palean people as the same baskets have been found in Lithos, where is an adjacent village of Palea ,which is separated from Lithos by deep and broad Brim River.Given that the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found,  It's believed that the baskets were not uniquely Palean. In order to evaluate this argument, we need more evidence about geographic and climate information of the areas ,the technologis of building boats and bridges , the material of the baskets and the environmentalbackgrounds of the areas.

中间段：Although the author believes that only by boats which were still not found  could Palean people carry the baskets from Palea to Lethos , we can't deny that maybe there are other reasonable scenarios. First of all, the Brim River maybe at the time was not as deep and broad as it is now. If  Brim River was so shallow and narrow that people on both sides could deal with baskets by walking across the river. For another, it is not of impossiblity that maybe there was no Brim River between the two villagea at the time. What's more, if the climate is so cold  that the river was frozen in winter, people on both sides could also trade baskets by walking across the river without the needs of boats. Therefore, we need more information about geographic and climate of the areas to assess the possibility of the above scenarios.


点评20楼：
开头段有点太啰嗦了，应该概括总结一下，一些细节点东西可以省略，比如Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern可以概括为the baskets.
中间段不错，有理有据，很充实！