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xieqy0326UID：2653877

新手上路，留个脚印！

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回改了~加油

xieqy0326UID：2653877

因为这个曾经被狠拍~~

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挺不错  

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8.22 作文修改补上

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大神，写得很好，佩服！

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8月23日ML10.03.1
Books have more influence on society than television.

Do printed books bring greater influence to people's lives than television? In my view, there are many books lying in the bookshelf covered with dust; while, many people stay in the front of televisions and enjoy their lives. The answer is obvious since television has already been in people’s vision. （进入人们视线?）Therefore, I claim that printed books have less effect on the society.

Actually, printed books are formerly used and regarded as the most traditional way for people to record information and acquire knowledge. Though printed books still have an undeniable position in people's lives, its influence is far less significant than television considering the current development of television industry. 这段写得好，既点到books的好处，也表明自己的观点！

One reason is that the interesting television programs are more popular and convenient for people to gain information. As we all know, TV is a complex system composed of numerous channels and various kinds of programs, such as economic, politic, military, art, technology. Just moving one finger and clicking the remote-control, you can get your favorite channel. Immersing in the favorite TV shows, nobody would ask why people always forget to pick up a book. Consequently, this popularity of television is great effect on people’s lives.

Another strong factor is that the dramatic television change people’s behaviors and habits easier than books in modern time. Being aware of it or not, individual’s behaviors are effected by television. For example, when people go to the super market, it is more likely for them to choose the products which are frequently advertised in television. In addition, as television provides people the opportunity to share the event or experiences, it plays an important role in communicating process with each other. So many buzzwords will be popular in a short time. While, printed books has less effect on people’s life.

In conclusion, owing to the popularity of television and kinds of television programs, television industry provide more information and change our living styles, while printed books gradually lost its former role in disseminating knowledge and information.
很好的文章，找不到毛病，破题立意，段落分析都很好！

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Do printed books bring greater influence to people's lives than television? In my view, there are many books lying in the bookshelf covered with dust; while, many people stay in the front of televisions and enjoy their lives. The answer is obvious since television has already been in people’s vision. Therefore, I claim that printed books have less effect on the society.

Actually, printed books are formerly used and regarded as the most traditional way for people to record information and acquire knowledge. Though printed books still have an undeniable position in people's lives, its influence is far less significant than television considering the current development of television industry. （这段我觉得可以放到倒数第二段去）

One reason is that the interesting television programs are more popular and convenient for people to gain information. As we all know, TV is a complex system composed of numerous channels and various kinds of programs, such as economic, politic, military, art, technology. Just moving one finger and clicking the remote-control, you can get your favorite channel. Immersing in the favorite TV shows, nobody would ask why people always forget to pick up a book. Consequently, this popularity of television is great effect on people’s lives.

Another strong factor is that the dramatic television change people’s behaviors and habits easier than books in modern time. Being aware of it or not, individual’s behaviors are effected by television. For example, when people go to the super market, it is more likely for them to choose the products which are frequently advertised in television. In addition, as television provides people the opportunity to share the event or experiences, it plays an important role in communicating process with each other. So many buzzwords will be popular in a short time. While, printed books has less effect on people’s life.（以上两个例子都是阐述电视对人的影响大于书，而题目是论证电视和书对社会的影响哪个大。所以，也许换个例子，或者把对人的影响与对社会的影响之间联系起来，会好一点）

In conclusion, owing to the popularity of television and kinds of television programs, television industry provide more information and change our living styles, while printed books gradually lost its former role in disseminating knowledge and information.

xieqy0326UID：2653877

同组的同学，不好意思，今天有点不舒服，晚点再来~~

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留印，我来找你13号的作文，看到你的留言了~~谢谢你帮我改:D

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33# season08 嘿嘿有没有兴趣看看我的作文？我会回改的~~~

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补充一句，如果能注意词汇多样性就更好了，用很多不同的单词（甚至是词组、句子）表达同一个意思~~

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怎么贴文件？不好意思新手不会贴文件，改好的放在这里，不介意吧~希望回改哦~~
8月12日
20100221NA
Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement? All school teachers should be required to take courses every fiveyears to update their knowledge?

In this modern era, with the high rate ofupdating（前后两个update，这里可以考虑替换成renewing） information, it is undeniable that everyone should be required toupdate their knowledge for following the rapid development（in order to follow the rapid development。？？）. Especially for theteachers, who play an important role in the children’s growth up, are asked tolearn more and update their knowledge.（怎么感觉这句怪怪的，似乎没有主语耶....看这样写行不,和前一句合并：......rapid development, which is especially important for teachers who........）

First and foremost, taking courses is anexcellent method to update teachers’ knowledge and enhance their ability. Inother words, taking course could broaden their horizon and get(course不能get吧，人才能“get”。建议换成help teachers get) types ofteaching pattern by exchanging teaching experience with each other. On the onehand（这个好像一般是表示转折的，建议换成additionally, furthermore等）, they should learn academic knowledge and exert the latest technology tomake their work more efficiently, like（应该是such as 吧） using computer to teach easier（低级错误哦，动词后面用副词，应该是 more easily). On theother hand（同样的问题哦）, they should learn some experience from other teachers and maketheir students study without boring（being bored）.

Second（secondly）, the process of updating theirknowledge is necessary（用critical，vital这种词是不是更好呢） to improve（the improvement of；名词化，个人习惯~） students' academic interest. Teachers areobliged to impart knowledge to their students. If the teacher could talk（要加about） somenew ideas, or the latest technology, which is not available in the books, theycan attract their student's attention better（这句比较chinglish了，你应该是要说能更好的吸引学生注意力。这样改你看如何：students will be better involved in courses）, since human beings always paymore attention and passion to new things in their life. Apart from that, thestudents can even get involved in the study of the most updating fields,(and) takesome projects with their teachers, which inevitably improve their academicability.

Third（thirdly）, imparting the latest knowledge tostudents improves students' ability. There's no denying the fact that we shouldapply what we have learned in school into the real life. However, if the informationtaught by our teachers is out-date, we will meet some embarrassments in thefuture time and have to take time to learn new knowledge by ourselves. In thisway, our ability will not be trained.

In conclusion, I reinforce the opinion thatthe school teachers should be demanded to take courses to renew theirknowledge. Taking courses is not the best way to access the knowledge andimprove their students’ ability.


观点清晰，结构明了，用了很高级的单词，唯一的不足就是语言组织了，楼主认真体会哦~~祝考试高分！！

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不好意思，昨天去爬山了，今天才回来，刚改完~~~~~~~~~~
加油！

xieqy0326UID：2653877

13的作文，我以前写过，所以今天帮我该作文的就免了哈，我还是会帮你们改的，嘿嘿~~