issue38 2006.2.21- mars站队，练习，希望大家给予支持，谢谢

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38"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."

提纲：有保留地反对
1、电视在给人们提供娱乐上起到了相当大的作用，也可以顺便学习到一些简单的知识。（调查）
2、教科书仍然是人们学习的主要工具，因为采用电视或ppt教学不利于人们吸收只是。（教授的观点）
3、读书是有作为兴趣的好处，电视作为兴趣的坏处。（叙述）

Recently, with the thriving of television and developing technology used in it, there is much debate over whether television can take place the functions of books, akin to television’s partially occupation of the position of radios in daily lives. Some people maintain that the latest television does no harm to eyes, so they will replace books and receive much more support; meanwhile other scholar insist no matter how advance newest TV is, the advantage of reading has been integrated into human nature. As far as I concern, even though TV sets, which is inevitably needed, are so amazing today, books will still take a significant position in education, recreation, etc.

Admittedly, most recreation time is spent on watching films, advertisements and tournaments. To most residents, time before sleeping, minutes after eating, and leisure time without any burden, the only thing that satisfies them a lot is TV programs. People always find it is, also, possible to reach the latest information, some anecdotes, touching stories, introduction of modern technology and news from programs such as news at ten, rostrum of scholars, discovery, and national geography. According to recent survey conduct by sociality department Peking University among tem top universities in China, seventy six point five percent interviewees advocate that it is quite leisurely sitting in front of TV sets with nothing to worry about, the result of the survey also uncovers that eighty point two undergraduates have learned a lot from science documentary. For instance, medical documentary reveals the secret of human body; geography documentary explain the truth of volcano eruption; and the documentary of NESA tells me the configuration of enormous cosmos. Imagine the days without televisions, we may find how the replaceable position of television in our daily life.

However, the important role that television plays in people’s daily does not mean that books are going to be replaced by it. As the head professor of my department said (and I paraphrased) “The education effect conducted by PPT through projecting is far from the effect taught by reading books and writing on blackboard, so he can’t agree the method of ordinary education more by his thirty years’ experience of education.” On one hand the thought of this professor is, definitely, exact, since it is almost impossible to consider quickly and precisely for quite a long period of time, some reading back and pause of mind is inevitable. On the other hand, the method of studying by reading books originates from childhood, which means it has integrated in to our brain. So books will continue to be our main implements for studying.

Last but not least, a habit of reading always leads people become diligent, on the contrary, television always makes them lazy. Reading books is akin to dating with your girl friends, the better relationship you have, the more thought and love you will give her. Hence you will certainly get the best response. However, some television programs are meaningless, but appeals audience deeply. Thus time is wasted on these garbage, and the audience receives nothing, but become lazy. Obviously, the advantage of reading books compares with watching creates a tremendous gap.

In sum, people may never be able to reach the same conclusion on this controversial issue, due to their different experiences and conflicting values. Nevertheless public awareness of various dimensions of the question on whether television can take the place of books discussed above will certainly contribute to the through understanding of my notion that no matter how advance the television is, the importance of books will never be shaken.

[ 本帖最后由 staralways 于 2006-2-22 10:46 编辑 ]

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Recently, with the thriving of television and developing technology used in it, there is much debate over whether television can take place the functions//the functions觉得还是不要的好，保持句子连贯性 of books, akin to television’s partially occupation of the position of radios in daily lives//为什么要用复数？. Some people maintain that the latest television does no harm to eyes, so they will replace books and receive much more support; meanwhile other scholar insist no matter how advance newest TV is, the advantage of reading has been integrated into human nature. As far as I concern, even though TV sets, which is inevitably needed, are so amazing today, books will still take a significant position in education, recreation, etc.//开头有点长了，觉得简要叙述一下矛盾和观点就好

Admittedly, most recreation time is spent on watching films, advertisements and tournaments. //开头主题句如果能提到“学习“就更好了To most residents, time before sleeping, minutes after eating, and leisure time without any burden, the only thing that satisfies them a lot is TV programs. People always find it is, also, possible to reach the latest information, some anecdotes, touching stories, introduction of modern technology and news from programs such as news at ten, rostrum of scholars, discovery, and national geography.//特指某电视节目是不是要大写？ According to recent survey conduct by sociality department Peking University among tem top universities in China, seventy six point five percent interviewees advocate that it is quite leisurely sitting in front of TV sets with nothing to worry about, the result of the survey also uncovers that eighty point two undergraduates have learned a lot from science documentary. For instance, medical documentary reveals the secret of human body; geography documentary explain the truth of volcano eruption; and the documentary of NESA tells me the configuration of enormous cosmos. Imagine the days without televisions, we may find how the replaceable position of television in our daily life.//最后一句没看懂，是想说明电视的重要性？用肯定的语气说更好吧，imagine这种词汇不太严谨，我感觉。

However, the important role that television plays in people’s daily does not mean that books are going to be replaced by it. //不错的转折As the head professor of my department said (and I paraphrased) “The education effect conducted by PPT through projecting is far from the effect taught by reading books and writing on blackboard, so he can’t agree the method of ordinary education more by his thirty years’ experience of education.” On one hand the thought of this professor is, definitely, exact, since it is almost impossible to consider quickly and precisely for quite a long period of time, some reading back and pause of mind is inevitable. //这里似乎补一句总结比较好，否则感觉很突然。On the other hand, the method of studying by reading books originates from childhood, which means it has integrated in to our brain. //这一点论证感觉有些无力，为什么从小接受的方法长大就不能改呢？So books will continue to be our main implements for studying.

Last but not least, a habit of reading always leads people become diligent, //这个用法有些奇怪，有把握的话就用吧，没把握的话还是换个好。on the contrary, television always makes them lazy. Reading books is akin to //这个短语用了两遍，换一个吧。表示类似的短语好像不少。dating with your girl friends, the better relationship you have, the more thought and love you will give her. Hence you will certainly get the best response. However, some television programs are meaningless, but appeals audience deeply. Thus time is wasted on these garbage//语气有些强烈了，换个缓和点的吧, and the audience receives nothing, but become lazy. Obviously, the advantage of reading books compares with watching creates a tremendous gap.

In sum, people may never be able to reach the same conclusion on this controversial issue, due to their different experiences and conflicting values. Nevertheless public awareness of various dimensions of the question on whether television can take the place of books discussed above will certainly contribute to the through understanding of my notion that no matter how advance the television is, the importance of books will never be shaken.

总体上说感觉还不错，但是在举例论证方面感觉有些欠佳，论证过程似乎不是很严密，有些地方也感觉话没说完就开始下一段了。另外最后一段那个“girl friend”的类比没看懂……楼主加油~~~

iven19821005UID: 2160156

这篇文章虽然不是很难,但我觉得没什么有力的论据好有用,我要学习一下队友的论据,希望可以有里力度一点.
谢谢,你的分析,让我看清了本文的好多不足,修改后一定会好多了.