issue50 [背水一战]_by flaflagogo

flaflagogoUID: 2280642

呵呵,企图掐时间裸写,结果1个小时写了430个字,然后完全不堪入目
都是错别字不说,表达也不清楚,词汇也运用不准确,没办法了全上高中词汇,然后全部是重复的词.(笑)
看来还是背的和临摹的东西太少了,自己硬上太勉强了,撤回改了3个小时,尝试裸改,不抄别人的
然后发现水平烂的可以,呵呵.算了,反正是第一次脱稿写,以后再慢慢补救吧.(实在懒得再改了,对不住给我改文章的同学们了.)
恩,下一阶段有必要加大临摹和背诵的力度了.
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issue 50
"In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant
to the courses they teach."

提纲:
partly positive
1)to prepare students better  for a job
2)to be familiar with the new things
3)not all faculty should do
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The statement above claims that all faculty should work outside the academia in professions relevant to the courses they teach, so that the quality of instruction at the college and university will be improved. I agree with the speaker that most of the faculty except those from the pure theoretic fields should participate the real works.

To begin with, engaging in the practical work will make professors acquainted with what is essential to the job and help them to prepare students better for their future career. I still remember when Rachel- in the TV play “Friends”- failed to find a job, she cried that “I’m trained for nothing!” This is a reflection of the problems in our education system: what we are taught is quite different from what the society needs. But things will change if professors instruct the knowledge in the textbooks combining with the personal experiences. With the vivid cases professors show in the class, students will find the complex principles much easier to apply, and will make good use of them in the similar circumstances. Besides, considering the information provided by professors what a job is and what a job needs, students can make a better decision when they choose what kind of jobs to pursue.

Moreover, participating a real work will help professors to comprehend what they teach better. The modern time is undergoing a rapid development: the great changes of technology make the knowledge, which people have already gained, easy to become out of time. Take law for example. Common sense tells us that the study of law relays on the analysis of the classic cases. But if a professor is not familiar with the cases of “internet crime”, how can he explain to his students? So it is our professors' responsibility to keep away from being “out of time”. And a possible way to be pioneers is taking a job in a law office. Their work experiences will not only enrich the minds of themselves but also the future lawyers who are used to be their students. The same circumstances also occur in other disciplines such as computer science, medicine, psychology, etc. That's why I strongly push the statement that faculty of applied disciplines should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.

However, it is not to say all faculty should go out for the professions. Those professors who teach pure theoretical principles have no need to combine their lessons with world outside the academe. Contrarily, they should take more effort to their studies in the lab. There are two reasons for my view. For one thing, it is not easy for these professors who instruct biology, chemistry and physics to find a job which is relevant to their courses; for another thing, the purpose of teaching theoretical principles is just to give students a common sense, rather than training them for a certain job.

In sum, let the faculty of applied disciplines attend a job in the outside world, and let the faculty of pure theoretical disciplines study principles in the academe. That should be a better way to benefit our students, our education, and our society.

[ 本帖最后由 flaflagogo 于 2007-2-1 04:54 编辑 ]

lourryUID: 2157624

看来还是背的和临摹的东西太少了,自己硬上太勉强了
恩,下一阶段有必要加大临摹和背诵的力度了.

呵呵，同感中，:) 我先来看看呵~~

lourryUID: 2157624

The statement above claims that all faculty should work outside the academia in professions relevant to the courses they teach, so that the quality of instruction at the college and university will be improved. I agree with the speaker that most of the faculty except those from the pure theoretic fields should participate the real works.(这里最好不要用agree with the speaker that...,因为原文的观点和你并不完全一样，还是用I concede that比较保险)

To begin with, engaging in the practical work will make professors acquainted with what is essential to the job and help them to prepare students better for their future career. I still remember when Rachel- in the TV play “Friends”- failed to find a job, she cried that “I’m trained for nothing!” This is a reflection of the problems in our education system: what we are taught is quite different from what the society needs. But things will change if professors instruct the knowledge in the textbooks combining with the personal experiences. With the vivid cases professors show in the class, students will find the complex principles much easier to apply, and will make good use of them in the similar circumstances. Besides, considering the information provided by professors what a job is and what a job needs, students can make a better decision when they choose what kind of jobs to pursue.

Moreover, participating(in) a real work will help professors to comprehend what they teach better. The modern time is undergoing a rapid development: the great changes of technology make the knowledge, which people have already gained, easy to become out of time. Take law for example. Common sense tells us that the study of law relays on the analysis of the classic cases. But if a professor is not familiar with the cases of “internet crime”, how can he explain to his students? So it is our professors' responsibility to keep away from being “out of time”. And (and开头不好呵)a possible way to be pioneers is taking a job in a law office. Their work experiences will not only enrich the minds of themselves but also the future lawyers who are used to be their students. The same circumstances also occur in other disciplines such as computer science, medicine, psychology, etc. That's why I strongly push the statement that faculty of applied disciplines should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.

However, it is not (proper)to say all faculty should go out for the professions. Those professors who teach pure theoretical principles have no need to combine their lessons with world outside the academe. Contrarily, they should take more effort to their studies in the lab. There are two reasons for my view. For one thing, it is not easy for these professors who instruct biology, chemistry and physics to find a job which is relevant to their courses; for another thing, the purpose of teaching theoretical principles is just to give students a common sense, rather than training them for a certain job. (这句话好像有点说不过去吧，理论教学仅仅是教给学生一些常识，而非训练他们使这些学生以后能更好的工作？)

In sum, let the faculty of applied disciplines attend a job in the outside world, and let the faculty of pure theoretical disciplines study principles in the academe. That should be a better way to benefit our students, our education, and our society.

总体感觉，基本上把自己的观点表达清楚了呵。
但是，给人感觉论证力度不够。另外，语言方面要加强呵！
呵呵，不过这是第一篇裸写的嘛，不错了呵~~（反正我现在是挤不出来呵）
加油呵~~

kylinUID: 2242436

The statement above claims that all faculty should work outside the academia in professions relevant to the courses they teach, so that the quality of instruction at the college and university will be improved. I (partly，毕竟题中是给的all faculty，lz给的是most of，否则有藐视原题之嫌了 呵呵) agree with the speaker that most of the faculty except those from the pure theoretic fields should participate （in）the real works.To begin with, engaging in the practical work will make professors acquainted with what is essential to the job and help them to prepare students better for their future career. I still remember when Rachel- in the TV play “Friends”- failed to find a job, she cried that “I’m trained for nothing!” This is a reflection of the problems in our education system: what we are taught is quite different from what the society needs. But things will change if professors instruct the knowledge in the textbooks combining with the personal experiences. With the vivid cases professors show in the class, students will find the complex principles much easier to apply（个人感觉这里改成understand比较好，因为课堂偏知识理解嘛，而且下文又说到了实际应用，就没必要重复）, and will make good use of them in the similar circumstances. Besides, considering the information provided by professors what a job is and what a job needs, students can make a better decision when they choose what kind of jobs to pursue. (例子不错，总结也很好)Moreover, participating （in） a real work will help professors to comprehend what they teach better. The modern time is undergoing a rapid development: the great changes of technology make the knowledge, which people have already gained, easy to become out of time. Take law for example. Common sense tells us that the study of law relays on the analysis of the classic cases. But if a professor is not familiar with the cases of “internet crime”, how can he explain to his students? So it is our professors' responsibility to keep away from being “out of time”. And（这里的and可以直接去掉。另：不要用and放句首表并列，and连接句内成分。） a possible way to be pioneers is taking a job in a law office. Their work experiences will not only enrich the minds of themselves but also the future lawyers who are used to be their students（who are their students now）. The same circumstances also occur in other disciplines such as computer science, medicine, psychology, etc. That's why I strongly push the statement that faculty of applied disciplines should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.However, it is not to say all faculty should go out for the professions. Those professors who teach pure theoretical principles have no need to combine their lessons with world outside the academe. Contrarily, they should take more effort to their studies in the lab. There are two reasons for my view. For one thing, it is not easy for these professors who instruct （such as） biology, chemistry and physics to find a job which is relevant to their courses; for another thing, the purpose of teaching theoretical principles is just to give students a common sense, rather than training them for a certain job.(这句话。。有点牵强～难道大学里的理科只是教学生常识？而且大学里专业多少是要为将来就业做准备的～) In sum, (universities and colleges should encourage 不要let)let the faculty of applied disciplines attend a job in the outside world, and（while）let the faculty of pure theoretical disciplines study principles in the academe. That should (might) be a better way to benefit our students, our education, and our society.

很好 思路很不错 相当的顺畅 给人感觉lz的例子也很活 因为是第一次裸写 所以词汇多样性受影响是很正常的 但并没有什么大的毛病 词的运用也还是比较到位的～呵呵
加油加油啊 这篇一点都不像lz说的有恶心感觉！ ^^