作文思考：文化交流对本土文化的影响

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[B]Development of communication making a multi-cultural world[/B]

Because of developments in communication and transportation，countries are becoming more and more alike. In China, the resemblances are shown in language, fashion and life style.

Learning foreign language is becoming unbelievable popular in China nowadays. From the lowest age of 4, to age of 70, Chinese are crazy of learning foreign language, especially English. Every Chinese university has foreign teachers and more and more high schools even primary schools invite foreigners to teach foreign language. Foreign language courses are much more popular and welcomed than Chinese courses in China’s matriculation. And English speaking is in most Chinese companies’ employment requires.

Foreign fashions are welcomed in Chinese cities. As soon as China opened its every area to the world, western fashion has affected the young Chinese people very much. Skateboards, hip-hop music, Japanese street dresses, old school sneakers… everything popular in western countries are popular China as well. Second hand western music CDs, Japanese clothes could be seen in every major cities.

Chinese life style is changing as well. Chinese will not stay at home at weekend any more. Night clubs, wine bars, disco and Kara OK is becoming normal activities in Chinese lives. The choice of foreign food will not be only McDonald’s or KFC, sushi, Turkish BBQ and French cooks are also enjoyed by Chinese people.

But China is still a traditional country, those changes just a representation that China’s economic and communication developments has created a multi-cultural life to Chinese people, and we enjoy it.

lucy_zq2002UID：177408

很多的举例,能写出来已经不错了
可惜缺乏深度挖掘,只是举例

lucy_zq2002UID：177408

斑竹gg搞得和case analysis似的,以后文章多了,你可以做个专辑了.写作大全,5分,6分,7分,8分~~~
不过我是真的很期待高分作文啊!

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嗯，支持MM的观点，有了分类我们会更清楚怎样给自己的文章定位和怎么审改自己的文章。

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现在我说说对这篇习文的看法：
文章结构不错，文字比较流畅。但是看了此文深感作者对我国的语文教育特别是作文中毒颇深啊～～～他太有针对性了，全篇就在说China的情况，呵呵，这样似乎不太理智，现在不是globalization了吗：）这个Development of communication making a multi-cultural world 是全世界的问题啦～～而不我们中国才有的现象。还有感觉上作者自己的观点不太鲜明：P

lucy_zq2002UID：177408

印象中本版改过的作文就是这么多了,不顶起来偶怕以后自己忘了.斑竹看着好的作文给点精华好了.谢谢!
欢迎大家都来写作!共同进步!

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文章衔接连贯挺好，读起来很通顺，但是时有出现的语法错误看起来很别扭。
题目是沟通交流造就多元文化社会，文章一直在说的是影响的结果，略显片面，罗列事实，自己的见解表述不够