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48.The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.


The most essential events and trends were made possible by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten instead of the famous few. However, historians concentrate on individuals because these famous people have representativeness.

Historians place mainly emphasis on celebrities for the reason that they can represent significant events and trends. As we know, in important events and trends, there were persons who led, organized or be the most manifest, and they would probably be recorded in the history records. It is easier for historians to know about their life which includes what they did and said, their background and their behaviors, also people's attitudes towards them can be known. For example, we know many things about Shakespeare, such as he left his hometown in his eighteen because he owed other people a lot of money, after he arrived at London, he work in a theatre from a choreman to a leading actor, later he wrote play books himself and so forth. So it is inevitably that most attention will be paid to these famous few.

There is no possibility for historians to study those groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten. First, the amount of work will be huge if historians study those groups of people. Since the number of people is considerably large, how can historians found all of their records, let alone study each of them. Second, there is no meaning to study each of them. The emphasis should be placed on what they had done. Events and trends which made possible by them are more essential than their names or behaviors. Another reason why they were not emphasized is that each of them can not represent any event or trend. For instance, all soldiers in the first and the second world war involved in these two significant events, can you imagine that if historians try to find out all their identities?

The famous few and those groups of people are equally important, but people emphasize the celebrities for many reasons. In history, the most significant events and trends would not happen without those groups of people, they are the main part of those events and trends while the famous few are the representatives, so all of them are of the same importance. But it is more convenient for historians to study the celebrities in the history, and it is also easier for students to study history through knowing these famous few. We can easily remember the Civil War because of Abraham Lincoln, and we know the theory of relativity is published by Albert Einstein.

In sum, it is true that groups of people made the most significant events and trends in history possible while their identities are forgotten by the current people, instead, historians emphasized the famous few. But from the perspective of the study of history, we have to do that.

amanda2005UID: 2120493

representativeness 好像没这个单词
choreman好像没这个单词

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48.The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.


The most essential events and trends were made possible by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten instead of the famous few. However, historians concentrate on individuals because these famous people have representativeness.
开头说的是代表性，看完全文之后感觉是 工作量太大所以不能研究groups of people
Historians place mainly emphasis on celebrities for the reason that they can represent significant events and trends. As we know, in important events and trends, there were persons who led, organized or be the most manifest, and they would probably be recorded in the history records.
famous individuals in the significant events and trends were the most manifest organizer or leaders who would probably be recorded in the history

It is easier for historians to know about their life which includes what they did and said, their background and their behaviors, also people's attitudes towards them can be known. For example, we know many things about Shakespeare, such as he left his hometown in his eighteen because he owed other people a lot of money, after he arrived at London, he work in a theatre from a choreman to a leading actor, later he wrote play books himself and so forth. So it is inevitably that most attention will be paid to these famous few.
从it is easier 开始就与代表性无关了
There is no possibility for historians to study those groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten. First, the amount of work will be huge if historians study those groups of people. Since the number of people is considerably large, how can historians found all of their records, let alone study each of them. 没懂Second, there is no meaning to study each of them. The emphasis should be placed on what they had done. Events and trends which made possible by them are more essential than their names or behaviors. Another reason why they were not emphasized is that each of them can not represent any event or trend. For instance, all soldiers in the first and the second world war involved in these two significant events, can you imagine that if historians try to find out all their identities?
这段已经完全跟代表性无关了
The famous few and those groups of people are equally important, but people emphasize the celebrities for many reasons. In history, the most significant events and trends would not happen without those groups of people who are the main part of those events and trends while the famous few are the representatives, so both of them are of the same importance. But it is more convenient for historians to study the celebrities in the history, and it is also easier for students to study history through knowing these famous few. We can easily remember the Civil War because of Abraham Lincoln, and we know the theory of relativity is published by Albert Einstein.
最后两句例子意思没有表达清楚，建议写长一点，分几句话说。
In sum, it is true that groups of people made the most significant events and trends in history possible while their identities are forgotten by the current people, instead, historians emphasized the famous few. But from the perspective of the study of history, we have to do that.

建议尝试再深入思考一下，个人意见是那些少数人是具有先进革命思想和战争策略或者治国本领的人，等等！

文中不要总是用 famous few, 还有minority, elite,还有你用了的celebrities 都可以

[ Last edited by amanda2005 on 2005-8-28 at 01:24 ]

amanda2005UID: 2120493

children,你知道我今天有多惨，我用word拷贝出来，都已经改完了，结果整个文档死掉，怎么点，怎么等都不东，结果只好把记得的写上了。

fishwater00UID: 182063

支持一下

childrenqUID: 2109575

谢谢你啊～～辛苦了～～害你这么晚才睡～～

Originally posted by amanda2005 at 2005-8-28 01:22
children,你知道我今天有多惨，我用word拷贝出来，都已经改完了，结果整个文档死掉，怎么点，怎么等都不东，结果只好把记得的写上了。

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我发现我的论点有问题，如果我把论点改成为了学习历史所以关注名人，再把第一段的TS改为获得名人的历史资料比较容易，这样一来逻辑上是否就正确了？


ps：representativeness和choreman这两个单词都是存在的～我查了字典了

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Originally posted by childrenq at 2005-8-28 11:42
我发现我的论点有问题，如果我把论点改成为了学习历史所以关注名人，再把第一段的TS改为获得名人的历史资料比较容易，这样一来逻辑上是否就正确了？

这样你自己的逻辑通顺了，但是有点偏题啊。毕竟第二句，谁创造历史才是题目的主要观点。


The most essential events and trends were made possible by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten instead of the famous few. However, historians concentrate on individuals because these famous people have representativeness. 就像你说的，论点不妥

Historians place mainly emphasis on celebrities for the reason that they can represent significant events and trends 这个represent有点费解. As we know, in important events and trends, there were persons who led, organized or be the most manifest 好像也不妥, and they would probably be recorded in the history records. It is easier for historians to know about their life which includes what they did and said, their background and their behaviors, also people's attitudes towards them can be known. For example, we know many things about Shakespeare, such as he left his hometown in his eighteen because he owed other people a lot of money, after he arrived at London, he work in a theatre from a choreman to a leading actor, later he wrote play books himself and so forth 这个例子不能说明问题。你单纯的罗列了Shakespeare的经历，说明我们都知道他的生平。但是没有跟本段主题联系起来啊。Shakespeare跟文学史有什么关系？. So it is inevitably that most attention will be paid to these famous few.

There is no possibility for historians to study those groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten. First, the amount of work will be huge if historians study those groups of people. Since the number of people is considerably large, how can historians found all of their records, let alone study each of them.? Second, there is no meaning to study each of them. The emphasis should be placed on what they had done. Events and trends which [were] made possible by them are more essential than their names or behaviors. Another reason why they were not emphasized is that each of them这里应该是想强调single吧 can not represent any event or trend. For instance, all soldiers in the first and the second world war involved in these two significant events, can you imagine that if historians try to find out all their identities?

The famous few and those groups of people are equally important, but people emphasize the celebrities for many reasons. In history, the most significant events and trends would not happen without those groups of people, they are the main part of those events and trends while the famous few are the representatives, so all of them are of the same importance. But it is more convenient for historians to study the celebrities in the history, and it is also easier for students to study history through knowing these famous few. We can easily remember the Civil War because of Abraham Lincoln, and we know the theory of relativity is published by Albert Einstein.  这一点的意思很多与第二段重复啊

In sum, it is true that groups of people made the most significant events and trends in history possible while their identities are forgotten by the current people, instead, historians emphasized the famous few. But from the perspective of the study of history, we have to do that.



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