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People can learn more from watching television than by reading books.
Our world has been changed dramatically during the last few decades. Television, which once was regarded as a cryptical ('cryptical' is a word, but is far, far less used or recognized than its equivalent 'cryptic'.) and luxurious device, becomes a common-thing in this day and age. The issue whether human can benefit more from television than books is still up to debate. Speaking for myself, books still play a more crucial role than television.
Admittedly, the occurrence of television is one significant milestone in mankind's life. It spreads knowledge in a vivid method ('method' implies a fixed procedure or protocol. It doesn't mean exactly the same as 'way'.) and involves plenty of utilized information (I've really no idea what kind of information is 'utilized information', but I'm guessing 'information that can be utilized easily', i.e. 'practical' or 'pragmatic'.). Nevertheless, compared with books, television seems to quite pale.
To begin with, books can lead us to deep meditation and better understanding. One of the merits of television that it expresses (But actually information is not 'expressed', rather it is 'conveyed'.) a large amount of information is also be proven to be a major drawback. (This sentence is not quite solid in terms of clause structure. If you're unsure exactly how different parts should be linked into a proper sentence, don't just randomly add 'that'. 'one of the merits' and 'express(es) a large..of information' is essentially the same thing, and is the subject of this sentence, so in fact you don't need 'that' at all – there is no subordinate structure here that needs to be 'that'-ed. This sentence, in fact, is simply 'One of the merits of television – to express…of information – is also proven..'. Otherwise, don't insist on always writing very long sentences. Split things up into shorter sentences that you can manage, and connect them with connective devices, e.g. 'One of the merits of television is to express..information. Yet, this is also proven..'. In my opinion, the latter is actually a better showcase of logical reasoning.) Inevitably, audiences are likely to loose themselves when watching TV shows. In contrast, books can create a fantastic atmosphere for readers and make a difference. (I don't see why people reading books won't lose themselves in this 'fantastic atmosphere', compared to watching TV. You need to think carefully about what exactly differentiates TV from reading books and express it clearly, instead of using vague, undefinable terms like 'fantastic atmosphere'.) This is perfectly illustrated by the one of the most outstanding novels named War and Peace, written by an excellent Russian author. (His name's Leo Tolstoy. Use examples that you know well enough (that's why some people say it's always better to use personal examples), not examples that you think are famous but you don't really know very well. If you don't know any author's names in English but want to cite them, then learn some.) In one chapter, the author describes mental activity. We cannot feel this procession through watching TV.(This is very arguable. TV characters can act out their mental activities or use monologues – good actors can do such things very well, and some of the best actors have very powerful screen representations of mental activities. The problem with your argument is that you didn't really have very strong or clear reasoning as to why watching TV doesn't give you the same 'procession' as reading about mental activities. You're not really 'arguing' for your opinion, but rather just trying to tug the conclusion in the direction you want.) Another thing is that redundant information will easily confuse people since we are not able to get and absorb so many things at a short time. (Again this is arguable. The assumption seems to be that books will have no redundant, confusing information, but this is definitely not always true. Not all books are simple, linear texts – many children's books, for example, have pictures, texts, pull-out paper cuttings, etc. that, according to your reasoning, would be very confusing. There is also a genre of books called manga, or comics in Japanese, that can get as dense and confusing as you can imagine. Yes, these are not your average 'books', but they are books and not TV nonetheless. My point is that, again, you don't seem to have thoroughly thought about your point, as so far your language and reasoning have been rather vague.) As a consequence, in the term of content, reading books is a wise choice.
In addition, books are convenient and portable. The tendency of television is bigger and bigger. (I had to read this sentence twice to get that you mean 'the tendency is for television to get bigger and bigger'..) It is impossible for people bring it with them. People have no choice but to watch them in their houses or some special occasions. However, books, instead, are more distinguished in this case. Both the traditional paper books and the advanced E-books facilitate readers.(I'm surprised. You know e-books but have never heard of watching TV on iPads, iPhones, or other smartphones?) Nowadays, people can read books on the trips, in the workplace, and almost everywhere you want. In the terms of the convenience, books go a long way to satisfy people's desire their needs.
Taking all these factors into account, it is apparent that although televisions convey colorful information, reading books can benefit people more.(Yes, but the question didn't ask you whether reading books benefit people more. It's about whether people learn more from TV than from books, or vice versa..you've been wandering about the borderline between addressing the task at hand and going entirely off topic.)
总结:
好吧这次不能说完全跑题但也绝对不算很好地完成了题目。。题目是问哪个学到更多而不只是哪个更有好处。。你最终要把这个好处带回学习更多这句话上面去。。但是更大的问题是你的论述基本属于想当然型的,用词很模糊,没有仔细考虑你所给的原因是否真正是能够区分书本和电视的地方,所以非常容易被反驳。。请在比较的时候仔细思考你说的一方的好/不好是不是也可以同样说另一方。。
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