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本帖最后由 Darren_Van 于 2012-11-23 15:32 编辑

前期计划两天写一次~加油

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发表于 2012-10-12 14:46:53 |只看该作者

已改完:)

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发表于 2012-10-12 15:00:20 |只看该作者

我想问下，，我没有加入什么组能不能谁帮我看看我写的文章啊？

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seeker2013 发表于 2012-10-12 15:00
我想问下，，我没有加入什么组能不能谁帮我看看我写的文章啊？

那就加一个呗···反正那天有时间了就写一下互改一下就好了~https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1450941-1-1.html戳这个

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Darren_Van 发表于 2012-10-12 19:03
那就加一个呗···反正那天有时间了就写一下互改一下就好了~https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1450941-1- ...

已改，写的很好呢！谢谢你的修改~

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已改~

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吸收阳光发表于 2012-10-14 17:59
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受益匪浅···感谢感谢:)

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发表于 2012-10-16 17:08:48 |只看该作者

Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? Young people todays are more likely to help others than young people in the past.

Warm-hearted people are always popular in every period. However, I have to agree with the statement that the youth today perform worse than several decades ago.(The statement is that the youth today are MORE likely to help others than youth in the past. You're like, writing the complete opposite. Please READ your question IN WHOLE – not just a few words and think that you have seen it in some 题库 or 机经 then happily go with the version that you think is the question..)

To begin with, an increasing number of young people become selfish. Young people, especially who were born after 1990 are regarded as a group that only take care of themselves. In the past, altruism is a virtue that almost all young people admired. But now, with the development of economy, parents pay more attention to their children. They offer the best food and clothes, some even forbid their "honey" to do any housework. These make children take it for granted that they are the center of the world. As they grow up, they become selfish and unwilling to give a hand to others.

In addition, the complex society forced us to just finish our own things to protect ourselves from getting hurt. (I don't see why you must 'finish' things to avoid getting hurt.) No one can deny that our society is quite different from the past. It is more dangerous. We can get this conclusion from some pieces of news. In China, some people always pretend to be hurt in the public occasion. (1. I don't understand why they must 'always' pretend to be hurt; 2. It doesn't really make sense what 'be hurt in the public occasion' means. I know what you're trying to describe – 碰瓷 – but you could have just described it straight-forwardly without trying to generalize too much: some people pretend they were hit by cars or have fallen down and they could not get up on their own.) And if you help them, even just touch them, they may catch you and acclaim you should be responsible for their accident. All they want to do is ask you for money. Actually, sometimes it is not the youth that is too selfish; it is the dangerous and unreliable world that forces them to protect themselves.

Taking all these factors into account, it is apparent that young men and women nowadays were less likely to give others assistance. It is a great pity of our society. As a member of the young, I insist that we cannot give up such a virtue since helping each other is one of the factors that stimulate the society to move on. Let us say no to difference (I think you meant 'Indifference'..) and devote ourselves to a harmonious world.

总结：

语法表达神马的问题不大，请注意复句的句法，尤其是有形式主语的句子（It's the youth that..）里面从句的句法。。但是！题目按照你给的，是和你agree的东西完全相反的。。= = 好吧这个问题这几天在坛子上看到很多次，连考试的时候都能一看是机经还是题库里出现过的就很嗨皮地按自己记得的版本去写了，结果发现人家就是把题目换了一个词变成完全相反。。所说怎么强调审题都不为过啊。。= =

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