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发表于 2012-10-30 22:58:38 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Some people think that governments and companies should keep their patents forever; while others think that governments and companies should share their discoveries with all the scientists in the world.

Recently, it is a phenomenon that there are more and more governments and scientists keep their patents, which has triggered a heated discussions among publics. Some hold the opinion that governments and companies should share their discoveries with all the scientists in the world. However, I think this thing should bear more analysis.

to bigin with, there is no denying that if the discoveries is about the change of environment, governments should share these findings with all of the other countries. For instance, when the first scientists who find that the density of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere is higher than usual level do not publish his discoveries, and all the people in the world still continue to release the excessive amount of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere. imagine what will happen in the coming future. Sea-level will continue to worsen, threatening to submerge the Earth surface. The precious ozone layer will continue to be depleting, leaving the holes above the polar areas and thus leading to extra ultraviolet. Human will confront the problem that how to survive.

On the other hand, it is univeraslly acknowledged that if the patents is closely related to professional technique, all the companies or scientists should keep their patnets, because it could blur other companies and scientists invent better goods. For instance, consumers are crazy about iphone and ipad because of its powerful function, should Jobs tell other companies how to produce ipad and iphone? He keep their patnets forever which is the protection of their knowledge. To avoid Apple establish a monopoly of electric products market, many other cooperations do their utmost to develop new products. Now, there are various electric products that is similar to ipad and iphone are selling in the market and people have more choices when they pursue their desirable electric products. All of the people in the world be responsible to keeping knowledgeable patents.

To put it in a nutshell, when the discoveries is associate with something that will cause effects on the people all over the world , governments should open these discoveries. In addition, if the patent is about specialized technology, all the cooperations should preserve the patents forever.

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发表于 2012-11-12 10:12:47 |只看该作者

(这位童鞋你的帖子被系统吃掉了，现在恢复了，所以修改迟了，望见谅~鞠躬~)

Some people think that governments and companies should keep their patents forever; while others think that governments and companies should share their discoveries with all the scientists in the world.

Recently, it is a phenomenon that there are more and more governments and scientists keeping their patents, which has triggered a heated discussions among the publics ('the public' is a generic term. The word 'public' itself does not mean a person in the public as an individual, and therefore can't be used in the plural to mean 'people of the public'.). Some hold the opinion that governments and companies should share their discoveries with all the scientists in the world. However, I think this thing should bear more analysis.

To begin with, there is no denying that if the discoveries are about the change of environment, governments should share these findings with all of the other countries. For instance, when the first scientists who find that the density of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere is higher than usual level do not publish their discoveries (But this is just a discovery, not a 'patent'. A patent is something different altogether, and is usually likely lucrative – that's why governments and companies have the incentive to keep them forever.), and all the people in the world still continue to release the excessive amount of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere. Imagine what will happen in the coming future. The Sea-level will continue to worsen (The sea level only rises or falls. It doesn't become better or worse..), threatening to submerge the Earth's land (70% of the Earth's surface area is already covered by water anyway, so being submerged isn't really a problem for those places..) surface. The precious ozone layer will continue to be depleted (This, has nothing to do with the CO2 density in the atmosphere..), leaving the holes above the polar areas open and thus leading to extra ultraviolet. Humans will confront the problem of how to survive.(You described these environmental problems in a lot of details, but they are all irrelevant – because as I said, this environmental discovery thingy doesn't involve 'patents'. At least your arguments and descriptions didn't mention any. This question is not just about the sharing of any scientific discovery. It is about the publication and sharing of patents. Whatever you discuss, no matter for or against, should be within this boundary.)

On the other hand, it is universally acknowledged that if the patents are closely related to professional technique, all the companies or scientists should keep their patents, because they could blur (I'm not really sure what you intend to express with 'blur' here. 'blur' means 'to make unclear', as in you can't physically see things clearly. From the rest of the sentence I'm guessing something more like 'prevent'.) other companies and scientists to invent better goods. For instance, consumers are crazy about the iphone and ipad because of their powerful functions (Seriously, they are not functionally better than many other smartphones. Apple's products are just much better designed in terms of usability and interface..that's me blabbering from an engineering perspective.), should Jobs tell other companies how to produce ipads and iphones? He keeps their patents forever which is the protection of their knowledge. To avoid Apple establishing a monopoly of the electric products market, many other cooperations do their utmost to develop new products. Now, there are various electric products that are similar to ipad and iphone are selling in the market and people have more choices when they pursue their desirable electric products. All of the people in the world are responsible in keeping knowledgeable patents.(I don't see how you get to the last sentence from the rest of the paragraph..)

To put it in a nutshell, when the discoveries are associated with something that will cause effects (This is meaningless and redundant. If you 'cause' something it will be some kind of effects..try to be specific about what you say.) on the people all over the world, the governments should open these discoveries.(In this train of thought, we should force Jobs to share his patents on the iPad and iPhones, so they can be produced and sold by any company, and will become so cheap that everyone in the world can afford to benefit from these modern products..again, this is because you're just too vague in your language. What kind of things do you consider as things that will 'cause effects on the people all over the world', anyway? If you don't define this, your reader can effectively argue that anything under the sun can potentially affect the whole world.) In addition, if the patent is about specialized technology, all the cooperations should preserve the patents forever.

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请特别注意长句中的单复数。。论述方面第一个论点直接走题，和patent没有任何关系。。不是说你不可以写一般的scientific discovery，但是你写到这段最后必须还回到patent的问题上去，否则你讨论的根本就不是原本的问题。。