本帖最后由 soarer0474 于 2009-11-26 20:14 编辑
Have you ever been shacked in Titanic that Jack giving up his right to life for his beloved girl? Have you ever been moved to banker Andy in The Shaw Shank Redemption's pursuit of freedom and hope? (moved by the banker, Andy 's pursuit of freedom and hope in The Shaw Shank Redemption?) He once said:" Some birds are not caged, their feathers are just too bright." (原句是这个You know some birds are not meant to be caged, their feathers are just too bright. ,如果你不太肯定的话应该用that从句) The television gives us a window to the world. It brings our life a great impact." v( R7 g0 X$ |, k2 T
With the development of media, the world has become smaller and smaller. We can get to know all the events taken place only staying at home. TV media offers a large amount of(只能修饰可数名词的:a large/ great/ good number of, a good/ great many, dozens of, scores of, quite a few 只能修饰不可数名词的:a great deal of, a large amount of, quite a little, a large sum of 既可修饰可数也可修饰不可数名词的:plenty of, a lot of, lots of, a large quantity of, a good supply of) programs for us to choose. The televison let us always keep updating their knowledge, learn the latest information and knowledge. What's more, television news with abundant images, sound records and pictures can better deliverthe truth about the event.' e; [$ x' G* K7 S5 U3 K: ^: W
As Television comes into our daily life, it exhibits some excellent film can allow us to learn a lot of knowledge and truth, the priciple of survival, moral norms and human thinking view of the world, even experienceS in different life. All these are benefit beneficial
for us. When we watch "Harry Potter and the sorcerer's Stone", we know how friendship and love overcome evil and greed. We also understand even without parents we can still be optimistic and happy 什么意思没有看明白. The lines in The pursuit of Happiness:" There is no "why" in happiness", there is an "I". That make us believe our happiness depends on our efforts. "Just as if both had passed through the grave, and we stood at God's feet, equal as we are!" Jane Eyre said. She was a poor and even not a beautiful girl, but she had a noble soul, survival with her own wisdom. From her, we know that women should have their own ideas, minds, rather than relying on a man.(rather than 用法:
He loves her rather than likes her.
他不是喜欢她,而是爱她
) All these above are brought by television.
However, the telephone has its own contribution to society, we can tell to friends whenever we want instead of writting letters. We can hear their sounds and even know their feelings. While,television can carry images and sounds so the information appeared to us is vividly to understand. In this point of view, I think the televison has a great effect in our life.
优点:词汇和材料很多,这两点值得我学习
开头的引入也很不错。
缺点:
1 某些词词性掌握有误
2 逻辑结构有问题:首先是整体中间两段论证并不是平行的分论点,当然如果你是故意将第三个段作为详细展开说明的话,也不算太大问题,主要是最后一段中,说了电话的好处,然后突然总结出电视更重要感觉有点突兀 |