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The best way to improveeducation is to raise teachers’ salaries.
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I don’t agree that the best way to improve education is to raise teachers’salaries. Although by this way teachers’ enthusiasm might be stimulated, thebasic problem of education still remains unsolved.
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There is no doubt that it is an effective way to improve education by raisingteachers’ salaries. Encouraged by the higher salaries, teachers would like tomake more effort to teach students, such as being more patient with students,paying more attention to students’ problems, and spending more time figuringout the way to be better teachers. It seems that the more teachers areencouraged by higher salaries, the better the education will be. However, wouldthe situation develop as how simple we wish? 这段写的很好很丰富
There are still many problems to solve by raising teachers’ salaries. First ofall, it is teachers’ obligation to teach students well, which should not bemotivated by material incentives. If every improvement in teaching demandsrising of salaries, there is no difference between teachers and businessmen,the one who judge everything in business terms.9 Z 这个是不是第二点?这段开始写There are still many problems to solve by raising teachers’ salaries.,但是内容没有提及problem。
Second, the rising of teachers’ salaries can not guarantee the same rising ofthe quality of education. The improvement of education needs the efforts of thewhole society, including teachers, students, parents and the other socialmembers. Also, the development of education takes a long time, which can not beachieved by a simple method within short time like raising teachers’salaries.
要丰富一些,举一些例子,感觉这段刚刚开始就结束了。
Therefore, although raising teachers’ salaries is an effective way to improveeducation, there are still lots of problems to solve. As these problems can notbe solved easily, I do not think that raising teachers’ salaries is the bestway to improve education.
文章第一段提到了basic problems,但是后面没有提到,而且既然wage不是最好的办法,是不是提点其他的办法。 从标志词来看,只有两点?但是23段似乎也不是一点。全文字数不够。写作基本功感觉挺好的,内容一定要有例子有解释。 |