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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People feelhappier when they finish a challenging or difficult work than they finish aneasy one.
Nowadays, we have to face more and more(托福作文里不要用more and more这种过于低级的词组) challenging and difficult works. Is that finish a challenging or difficult work can make peoplefeel happier compared with an easy one? I cannot agree with it more. Once you(这种假设最好不要用第二人称,因为这样直接指考官了) achieve a difficult work, you will get more satisfactory than achievean easy one. More difficult work you achieved, can simple prove there is stronger ability you have. You also can learn morein a challenging work than easy one这段你想写什么?观点模糊了
Initially, we canget more satisfactory when we accomplished a challenging work这句话貌似你重复了很多次了吧. Comparing tofinish an easy job, finish a tough one need you spend more time, cost yourextra hard work啥意思?, and response for a risk of fail. But when you successful doneit done which?, look bacl upon the past, savored the barriers you overcame, you would时态保持一致 appreciate those precious memories. As the experience I had last semester, we前面是I,后面就变成we了。。。 should learn three different programming languages and over 40 hours course timeper week. I will never forget how hard time we deal with: it made all the teamswork at least 10 hours per day without any weekends. But now, as you(u, 指谁?) see, wesurvived(服了。。。学习学到用这个词来形容。。。用we conquered difficulties会不会好点?), we cannot believe that we can could survive in such a horrible semester andthat make all of us weep for joy.不行啊。。。楼主你的时态变化和用词得加强了
Additionally, morechallenging work you have achieved means stronger ability you have你数下这句话有多少个动词,但是有用that隔开吗?. I am amember of long-distance running exercise club, occasionally, the club tell us that we need to attend Marathon competition stand for our collage, which hold bylocal government. It is really a challenging task that completes 42 kilometerscompetition, it requires incredibly strong courage, diligent and willpower, butwe survived跑不完就得死是不?为什么楼主你这么喜欢用这个词来形容学习和运动? again. When I interview for an inter job, the certificate ofcomplete Marathon competition makes me passed it smoothly(smooth,smoothly是副词) because it symbolizes my strong power of willing.
Moreover, we canlearn more things in a difficult work than easy one. To complete the work, you(前面we后面u,通吗?) need to read more books, find more information, discuss and cooperation withyour classmates or colleagues. After you finish the work, you will find thatyou learn more knowledge and improve your communication skill.
Consequently, finish challenging work cangive us more satisfactory, prove how strong ability you have, and also cansolidify our knowledge. So, I agree with the opinion that challenging work canmake people feel happier.
楼主的问题比较多,例子的论证给不给力先不说了
像经常喜欢前面用us后面来个u,就算用中文说说都不符合逻辑啊
另外建议楼主加强语法和用词的准确性,诸如survived来形容学习和运动就彻底的被雷了一下。。。
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