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10.24 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important characteristic for politics is to accept responsibility for mistake. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it comes to the most crucial element of politics, it is no exaggeration to say that ten people will hold ten different opinions. In this day and age, there is a view that we should give priority to the characteristic that politics should accept responsibility for mistakes. Speaking for myself, I agree with the statement with certain qualifications.
Admittedly, having the courage to shoulder the responsibility for the mistake(s) you have made is one of the fundamental factors of politics. Once a politician brings any negative effect to the society, no matter who you (You started the sentence with 'a politician', which is in 3rd person. And here you switch into 2nd person 'you'. This is not consistent, and the meaning of your sentence is thus twisted.) are, you must explain it to the public and dedicate yourself to tackle these problems. A politician may not gain people's understanding and support otherwise. Nevertheless, we cannot overstate the significance of this kind of duty but neglect other pivotal characteristics.
For example, the wisdom of politicians plays an essential role in their work. The leader of one country, who is confronted with increasing challenges, needs the wisdom. Hu jingtao, the president of China, is just stuck in a complex situation. The economic environment around the world is disappointing, so is China's (This construct is in fact a parallel sentence: 'the…environment around the world is disappointing, China's environment is disappointing too'.). The president and his assistants have to make new plans and find out the efficient methods. It is a really tough task for common citizens. However, as the most powerful leader of China, Hu must think out the functional plan based on his team's wisdom. This example illustrates my opinion that intelligence is also one of the cornerstones of the politics.
Another significant characteristic is the honesty. No matter how clever and how courageous a politician is, he/she is likely to become the "enemy" of the public if he/she is dishonest. Countless leaders pretend to be honest and warm-hearted when they face the public but do many illegal things behind us. Imagine this, if a person like that is voted by the public and become an office staff, how will our city or even the whole country will be? (This is a genuine question sentence, so you need to inverse the subject and the modal verb.) We can conclude from the analysis that honesty is one of the characteristics that we must take into account first.
Taking all these factors into account, it is apparent that plenty of characteristics, including the one that is being responsible for the mistakes, are necessary for the politics. It is quite hard to determine which one is the most crucial element on earth considering all of them are important and without any one, the politics may become deformed and unreliable.(True, but you didn't really make direct comparisons between intelligence, honesty and responsibility, or state very clearly that it's very hard to compare them in terms of absolute importance. So I can only agree that there are more than 1 important elements in politics, but I can't say I 100% agree with 'it's hard to determine which one is the most crucial', since you didn't really make a comparison in the essay.)
总结:
感觉政治题材比较不拿手啊~请注意语法和表达的准确~另外就是这个问题是比较型题目所以我喜欢多一些比较。。你要证明A不是最大的,你现在的写法是说因为A很大,B很大,C也很大,所以很难说A是不是最大的,但是严格地说,你应该还要说出ABC之间没有办法比较绝对大小,或者在不同的情况下ABC之间的大小关系不固定,所以无法判断A是否最大。。
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