[a习作temp] 我的第一篇argument, argument 9，欢迎大家拍砖 [复制链接]

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发表于 2010-1-23 23:23:25 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

两天前开始准备的g，看了论坛发觉i还是放到后面去准备吧，之前看了整整一天的北美范文，发觉特别依赖那书了，很多开头结尾的句子都想用里面的不知道是否可以？希望大家帮帮我。

这是我今晚写的一篇，写完觉得怪怪的，模板的感觉很重。希望大家多给我提点意见，不胜感激哈。我在15天后就要考了额。

ARGUMENT9 - The following appeared in a memorandum from a dean at Omega University.

"Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by thirty percent. Potential employers apparently believe the grades at Omega are inflated; this would explain why Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors."

The argument above presents a sound case for arguing that in order to enable graduates of Omega University to secure better jobs, it should now terminate student evaluation of professors, which take a negative effect in teaching and studying. The dean implements that the turning up of evaluation renders professors begin to assign higher grades in their class so that potential employers believe the quality of teaching has decreased. In case of the fact that grades at Omega are inflated, companies are stricter to graduates from Omega University to those from Alpha University. This argument is fraught with dubious assumptions, which render it entirely unconvincing.

First and foremost, the dean make a fallacy of "Post hoc, ergo propter hoc" in assuming that the new procedure was implemented fifteen years ago is the cause of the following problems, such as assigning higher grades. He ignores other relevant factors. For example, it is entirely likely that students pay more attention to get high grades rather than gain any working skills. Or maybe what professors taught is interesting to students, but is out of date so that the graduate insofar cannot adapt themselves to working conditions. On the other hand, evaluation of professors stimulates teacher s exert more characteristic; however, does not necessarily impose professors on assigning high grades. At last, to show that evaluation of professors is responsible for the decreasing rate, the dean must give more sufficient reasons with ruling out all possibilities.

Even assuming that assigning higher grades are attribute to the evaluation, there is no evidence that the inflated grades have causal relationship with getting jobs successfully. Perhaps when potential employers find the grades are higher than that of Alpha University, they believe graduates with high grade in this school are applied much more to laboratory other than enterprise. Or it is entirely possible that graduates from Omega University are not so satisfied with small cooperation in which Alpha University graduates works as to quit the job. Without ruling out these possibilities, the dean cannot convince me that inflated grades are straightly related to get jobs.

Moreover, even if the inflated grades have connection with getting jobs, the dean is too hasty to terminate student evaluation of professors without taking conditions which alter the quality of this into account. In order to enable its graduate to gain better jobs, the dean can invite more schoolmates to teach some skills useful to graduates or spend some money in bringing about new notion of working taught by some organization specialized in finding jobs, gaining jobs and so on. Above all, it plays a vital role in secure better jobs that enhancing their own capabilities.

In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it, the dean must provide evidence that evaluation is responsible for the assigning higher grades, analyze whether the inflated grades are the cause of the gap of getting jobs between Omega University and Alpha University and rule out possibilities as many as possible to decide whether to terminate the evaluation.

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