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发表于 2010-3-10 16:22:52 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Argument 186
"In a recent telephone survey of automobile factory workers, older employees were less likely to report that having a supervisor present increases their productivity. Among workers aged 18 to 29, 27 percent said that they are more productive in the presence of their immediate supervisor, compared to 12 percent for those aged 30 or over, and only 8 percent for those aged 50 or over. Clearly, if our printing company hires mainly older employees, we will increase productivity and save money because of the reduced need for supervisors."

In this argument, the director recommends the president of Professional Printing Company (PPC) to hire mainly order workers in order to increase productivity and save money. To strengthen this conclusion, the director cites a recent telephone survey which is carried out in automobile factory to show that older employees are more effective than younger workers without supervisors. Close scrutiny of this evidence, however, reveals three logic flaws and it therefore unpersuasive as it stands.

As a threshold matter, the director's recommendation rests on the unsubstantiated assumption that the productivity of older workers is higher than that of young workers so that increasing orders' productivity will raise the whole company's productivity. Yet it has possibility that even if the older workers' productivity is increased, it is still lower than that of young works. In this condition, it is no doubt that increasing older employees’ productivity will not increase the company's productivity.

In the second place, the director unfairly indicates that the automobile factory and PPC are sufficiency alike in ways that hiring mainly older workers will increase the productivity of PPC. It is entirely possible that the working environment in those two companies are total different, perhaps in PPC, more attentions should be pay for workers because of the easily firing during print, as a result, more energy will be consumed and older worker are more easily exhausted.
For that matter, older workers could not be more productive than younger ones. In short, without evidence to verify that those two companies are relevantly similar, the author cannot convince me on the basis of automobile factory's experience that hiring older will increase the productivity.

Finally, even if the director can substantiate all of the foregoing assumptions, hiring older employees can truly increase our productivity and less supervisors are needed for pay in company, the assertions that it will save money because of the reduced need for supervisors is still an unwarranted problem. The director provides no evidence about the condition of the cost in company. Maybe hiring older employees will cost company more money, such as the cost of life insurance, the cost of retirement pension and so like. Any of these scenarios, if true, would serve to undermine the recommendation that reducing the money for supervisors is equal to saving money.

In conclusion, the director's recommendation is doubtless incredible, at least based on the argument. Rather than depending solely on the recent survey, the director had better provide firm and direct evidence about the employees and about the difference or similarities between the workers in automobile factory and those in PPC. In order to properly evaluate the availability of this recommendation, it would be useful to know more information about the PPC, especially about the cost condition.

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