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TPO 15 In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their money at a young age.

07-09-11

Recently, the majority of people argue whether it is a good solution to ask children to manage money by themselves. In various situations, the main aim of the solution is to teach children how to use money economically and effectively. To be frank, I think the advantages of the solution overweigh much more than the disadvantages brought to the children and their families, either for the purpose of financial education, or because of promoting life management, or just for developing trust between the children and others.

The first and foremost advantage is that children should manage their money when they were young. Consider when children grow up, they may face much complicate financial problems. If they acquire the opportunity to manage their own money when they were still at school, they may face these difficulties more successfully in the future. Also, though managing money, children can get a broad view over the financial and accounting cognition themselves, such as checking accounts, credit cards and credit ratings. Consequently, this knowledge will be the wealth of their life.

In addition, managing money can teach them to prepare their own life and to become more independently. For example, a recent American study indicates that about 32 percent of children without managing their money in LA. Their parents give them enough money and at the same time do not limit them use the money. If these children have the ability of self-control, they may do a good job about manage their money. However, if they cannot control themselves to spend money, what will happen? This may trend to be a severe consequence. It is my belief that both their parents and teachers should teach children how to manage their money. As their habits and characters have not built up, this will have a profound influence on these children. A typical example is that you can image that an adult could not change his/her habits easily.

Moreover, let children manage their own money can embody the sense of trust to children, and thus promote family harmony. My brother, for example, once was a naughty and dependent kid. But their parents let him manage his own money when he was 12 years old. Every thing was change, he realized that he was an independent man whom can manage the money, and after his parents teach him how to spent money reasonable, he can use his money do many things such as buy books, make charity. And to my surprise, he gets a habit that is save a part of his money into bank of his account every month. For this reason, I definitely will become a financially responsible adult.

Taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that it is wiser to make children manage money, this not only teaches them to prepare their money and life, but also enhance trust between the children and other people.

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TPO 15 In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their money at a young age.

07-09-11

Recently, the majority of people argue whether it is a good solution to ask children to manage money by themselves. In various situations, the main aim of the solution is (香香鱼是在用套路吗？我觉得这句话蛮不错的~但读起来逻辑上有点奇怪诶，在不同的情况下，主要目的是，前后有些违和，前面强调不同，后面强调一致，然而又没有合适的逻辑把它们连接起来。或许你想表达，不论何种情况，主要目的都是？)to teach children how to use money economically and effectively. To be frank, I think the advantages of the solution overweigh much more than the disadvantages brought（修饰对象不明？搞不太清楚，brought是修饰disadvantages 还是advantages） to the children and their families, either for the purpose of financial education, or because of promoting life management, or just for developing trust between the children and others.+ f2 I7 \$ {: Z2 ~

The first and foremost advantage is that children should manage their money when they were young(从意思上来讲，这是原因，不是好处，children没有在should中得到好处). Consider when children grow up, they may face much（如果修饰problems是用many修饰complicated应该用much more 因为problems是复数，前面应该有个体现复数含义的数量词，当然，我不否认很多时候可以直接用复数。） complicate（最好用complicated，虽然在小说里面见过这种动词形容词化的用法，但我觉得那不是很标准，所以不是很保险，毕竟连The light sings into the room也有很多人也会认为它是错句） financial problems. If they acquire the opportunity to manage their own money when they were still at school, they may face（overcome？面对是没有成败之分的，它只有面对与不面对） these difficulties more successfully in the future. Also, though managing money, children can get a broad view over the financial and accounting cognition themselves, such as checking accounts, credit cards and credit ratings. Consequently, this knowledge will be the wealth of their life.

In addition, managing money can teach them to prepare their own life and to become more independently. For example, a recent American study indicates that about 32 percent of children without managing their money in LA（这句话没有谓语）. Their parents give them enough money and at the same time do not limit them use the money（我不太清楚limit又没有这种用法诶）. If these children have the ability of self-control, they may do a good job about manage their money. However, if they cannot control themselves to spend money, what will happen? This may trend to be（tend to become? 首先，trend这样用有点怪不常见，但从意思上看似乎也没有什么特别出格的地方，你能告诉我为什么用这个词吗？我不太会用==另外就是be说明前面那个条件就是后面那个结果，这在逻辑上是不对的，前面的条件造成了后面的结果，所以应当用一个能体现逻辑上，或者至少时间上相互关系的词） a severe consequence. It is my belief that both their parents and teachers should teach children how to manage their money. As their habits and characters have not built up, this（指代不明） will have a profound influence on these children. A typical example is that you can image that（有点多余） an adult could not change his/her habits easily.

Moreover, let children manage their own money can embody the sense of trust to children, and thus promote family harmony. My brother, for example, once was a naughty and dependent kid. But their parents let him manage his own money when he was 12 years old. Every thing was change（没看懂什么意思==）, he realized that he was an independent man whom（who ）can manage the（为什么用zhe？） money, and after his parents teach（taught 过去发生的事，用过去式？） him how to spent（spend） money reasonable（reasonably）, he can use his money do many things such as buying books, make（making） charity. And to my surprise, he gets a habit that is to save a part of his money into bank of his account every month. For this reason, I （he？）definitely will become a financially responsible adult.

Taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that it is wiser to make children manage money, this not only teaches them to prepare their money and life, but also enhance trust（这点没有被证明啊？） between the children and other people.

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