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发表于 2012-5-27 20:21:12 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

There are a range of publicities are given to this problem that a lot of dropouts from school for being negative to learning .Nowadays , it seems that they have arose more and more attentions of parents and teachers. I'll briefly discuss some of the main causes to this problem and also offer some suggested solutions to make the adolescents positive to the study the lessons in the school.

Personally, one of the main reasons for young people's negative attitudes toward learning is that the traditional methods which the teachers use to instruct the students are not suited for them any more . As the technology nowadays develops and advances rapidly in modern society, the youth prefer to receive knowledge through Internet ,TV programs or any other media .By this way, not only are they access to the useful information ,but also can acquire lessons more quickly. Clearly , modern technologies can also be applied to the teachers' daily teaching work in order to build an combination between the basic knowledge and the changing society ,which is vital to widen the youth 's horizon ,as well as make their class more various and interesting.

Another reason triggers more and more dropouts is that the youth are pretty much easily influenced by their peers. Today ,more adolescents seem to be addicted to the online games .Getting along with this people usually, students are likely to be tempted into an unhealthy lifestyle as they are too young to be mutual .This can lead to them fell in love with the games too so that they may lose their interests about the lessons. So ,in order to address this problem ,parents should give good suggestions for the young people to make a friendship with other people. Besides , in terms of school, only under a healthy circumstance could the youth hold a positive attitude towards the leaning.

In conclusion, this is such a tough problem that basically caused by the two reasons above. The suggested solutions I mentioned should be taken into practice promptly by the schools and parents. Only by this way can we reduce the number of the dropouts of school.

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发表于 2012-5-28 08:18:10 |只看该作者

本人不是大神…欢迎交流作文, 你这篇写的还行,5。5到6, 有语法错误,比如so后面不能加逗号,但是你加了 main reason只有一个, 不用加The one of。。。trigger在这篇文章不适合

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板凳

发表于 2012-5-28 13:39:13 |只看该作者

好的，很感谢你啊，问题点出了很多，以后会注意的到这些问题的，能帮忙的都是朋友哦。

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发表于 2012-5-28 21:22:09 |只看该作者

2楼的给分蛮准的哈

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As time pass
Hearing voice
On the magic cross
Creating interface
Through finger touch
Searching peace
In cyber space
Hunch is stylish
Above superficies
Life is synchronous
In between balance
It is for you …

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