[作文] 开个贴为大家修改作文吧[结束] [复制链接]

Enolate 发表于 2013-7-24 11:51
对啊 考完啦

xiaoyongnao 发表于 2013-7-24 11:52
哦，那坐等出分

Enolate 发表于 2013-7-24 11:53
谢谢啊 出完了= =

xiaoyongnao 发表于 2013-7-24 11:54
啊？作文多少啊？

Enolate 发表于 2013-7-24 11:56
fair+good 25.............

xiaoyongnao 发表于 2013-7-24 11:56
不错啦

copyzero2 发表于 2013-7-24 10:38
麻烦看一下这两篇作文，嘻嘻~~THX~~

xiaoyongnao 发表于 2013-7-24 16:51
simplify your words, like the two sentences I revised

delete irrelevant parts and concent ...

copyzero2 发表于 2013-7-24 10:38
麻烦看一下这两篇作文，嘻嘻~~THX~~

xiaoyongnao 发表于 2013-7-25 11:42
举例子来论证，最多3句话，一句background，一句statement，一句summary；多了都是废话。。。

you ...

copyzero2 发表于 2013-7-25 18:17
谢谢楼主，鞠躬~~每次经你改的作文就简洁了，so我是有多啰嗦啊~~

xiaoyongnao 发表于 2013-7-25 19:19
女人是比较啰嗦