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发表于 2005-10-25 18:39:59 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
我刚写的作文,请大家给点意见,哪些地方要改进。谢谢.....

我们的社会已变成一个充满垃圾的社会,原因是?有什么解决方法?

Along with the development of society and economy, one of the problems people have to face is how to deal with the increasing amount of the rubbishes produced by every aspect of people’s life. With no doubt that our society has become a terrible world where people live under the waste. Why we should face so embarrassing state? Maybe, the following aspect would be the reasons.

Material progress and the increasing number of people may be two significant aspects to response for the problem. As we all know, the population of the world has exceeded six billion and still increases rapidly. The more people there are, the more rubbish will be produced. We can’t image the terrible situation that each person in the world throws one piece of rubbish.Public’s weakness consciousness to protect environment also lead the environment worse which is implicated to lacking time and funds being put in technology for processing waste. Large amount of one-off products which can’t be processed take up useful land and do harm to environment. If we can find available method to reuse the one-off products, the environment will be improved to some extend.

According to the explanation of its cause above, I would like to offer some suggestion below. Firstly, creating more reservation product and reducing the production of rubbish such as one-off product may be the most efficiency method. Secondly, more and more money should be invested to the technology of rubbish processing. Using rubbish to create electricity and make constructional materials would do good benefit to the environment. Last and the most important, it’s to educate and appeal the masses to protect the environment not only for the society but for the next generation.
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发表于 2005-10-27 17:53:58 |只看该作者
感觉完全是按照中文的思维方式写出来的翻译式的作文。
估计6分没有问题,7分悬。

尽量不要让单纯的物体作主语。

还有这句Public’s weakness consciousness ……没看懂

还有就是老外不喜欢firstly这种说法,直接first就可以了
未来太远,明天太近

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发表于 2005-10-27 19:50:34 |只看该作者

谢谢你的指导哦

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发表于 2005-10-27 19:56:50 |只看该作者
我其实想说公众的环保意识弱,但不知道如何表达,就写出了Public 's ...........

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