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发表于 2008-4-21 18:53:01 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today's world, to speak well is more important than to write well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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不同意，口才并不总是比文才重要

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In the modern society, the problem of whether to speak well is more important to write well not only draws great interests of linguists, but it also is a prevalent topic undergoing serious debate by citizens in that it affects their daily work. Actually, we are often told that to speak well is more important (than to write well), but is this really the case?

It's undeniable that to speak well have many merits. Speaking is a quick and convenient manner to express ideas. A typical example is in a debate, sharp speech can help one obtain the upper hand. Another example is when an advisor facing the questions from the students, to speaking well would be beneficial.

Even though to speak well is fairly important, however, we have no complete evidence to suggest that it is always better (than to write well). Writing also has lots of advantages. Writing can break the limitation of time and space and put impact on more people. Confucius, a Chinese philosopher born 2000 years ago, is well known all over the world for the book-- The Analects of Confucius. In fact, the book was written by his disciples according to his speech. Otherwise, the great thoughts of Confucius can not live that long and reach us.

Furthermore, under certain circumstance, speaking is not allowed. For example, many business or contract or legal documents have to be in writing. Still sometimes to speak is even impossible. Some people, who unfortunately lose the ability to speak, can express their preeminent ideas through writing, such as the famous physicist Stephen William Hawking and his masterpiece "Brief History of Time".

From what has been discussed above, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that to speak well is NOT always more important than to write well. Although both speaking well and writing well play an important role in our life sometimes, there is no proof shows us which is more significant all the time.

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发表于 2008-4-22 05:48:59 |只看该作者

如果是aw，这样的结构——首段居然找不到ts，是肯定会枪毙的。但是T作文这样写就没有问题。事实上T作文的套路性比issue小太多，怎么写都可以的。培训机构教育大家要按照套路写作，只是出于保证高分的考虑。其实只要写作的人明白自己的论题，下笔言之有物，把握住评分标准里的"development"，所谓的标准格式丢到天边又有什么关系？

lz的作文结构：虽然也是五段，但不是论点、论证、总结的模式，而是提出自己关于论题的疑问，讨论论题中对立一方，讨论对立的另一方，综合讨论，最后才下结论。和大部分考生的练习作文不一样，不是给出观点再试图说服读者，而是带着读者一起讨论，最后和读者一起下结论，——说服的过程隐匿了形迹，却依靠着潜移默化的作用更加有力。很少看到这样的习作，耳目一新的同时也很佩服lz的知识面。

语言也是很好的，不仅语感优越，表达方式、选词也表现出很强的变化，功底很不错。如果这篇还没有限时写作的话，以后可以限时练习了。

ps：
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/thread-827781-1-1.html
既然写的是同一主题，为什么不互相交流一下，尝试互改呢。:)

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板凳

发表于 2008-4-22 18:10:35 |只看该作者

原帖由 lintelle 于 2008-4-22 05:48 发表
事实上T作文的套路性比issue小太多，怎么写都可以的。培训机构教育大家要按照套路写作，只是出于保证高分的考虑。其实只要写作的人明白自己的论题，下笔言之有物，把握住评分标准里的"development"，所谓的标准格式丢到天边又有什么关系？

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