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In my point of view, whether living around your parents or living independently depends on your personal will and your family situation. Different situations interacting with families and adults results in different consequence.


What kind of group of adults is suggested to live on their own?


Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.


For those who are suitable to live out of family and raise themselves should have a strong personal plan as how to do something and what you want to do in your future. I have witnessed many examples of successfully seeking self independent behavior. Benjamin Franklin, who was forced to go hunting for himself when the printing factory could not satisfy his plan, is a worldwide known fact that encouraged young people in getting out of the home and fighting for themselves. However, in order to be like Franklin you must have a deep strong personal plan and outstanding skill or special trait that can make you different once you are out of the support of the family. If you do not have the advantages you will suffer from the irrational situation a lot. Another thing about living independently as a young adult is that you will have a high percentage of failure compared with the family living adults.


What kind of adults should live with their family as long as they can?


I think living with the family can benefit you a lot for those who feel there is no contradiction between their personal prospective future and the family issues. As a result, you can get advantages when living with your parents. For example, you want to go to a good college and need a huge amount of money, and what you can do is to ask for help from your parents; you also want to get a internship at a top company, then you can ask your dad or relatives related to the family for information; if you want to establish your own business you can even loan money from your parents. But, you should also remember living dependently will make you afraid to face more challenges comparing with the independent adults.
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发表于 2009-3-5 22:34:30 |只看该作者
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发表于 2009-3-9 13:00:51 |只看该作者
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. 这句是什么? 在段落中间出现 是问题?
楼主的语言还不错 这里就不赘述了
其实两方面都写 不大好写 而且老师也是建议写一个方面
例子举的很好 论点也好
米有结尾这个会丢分的
开头有些乱 不知道是不是把题目也混在一起了 反正米看明白
改改开头再发上来 看看

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thank you, I made a mistake..
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