0910AW 同主题写作第十一期 argument 9 by chloelin [复制链接]

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The writer stated that a procedure for students to evaluate teaching quality of professors been adopted fifteen years ago has caused the inflation of student grades and therefore has put the students of Omega university in a less competitive place compared with graduates from Alpha university in the job market. Based on the causal series he presented above, he argued that the evaluation system should be ended to raise the success rate of job hunting for students in Omega University. However, the basic assumptions of the statement lack supportive evidence and the causal links are built upon rootless judgments.

First of all, there is no evidence showing that the evaluation procedure has caused the higher assignment of grades by professors. The writer provides no information about the fluctuation trends of grades of students before the implement of the evaluation procedure. It is highly possible that the increasing trends of the grades had appeared long before the event and was caused by other factors. Even if the truth is the grade point started to rise only after the enforcement of the evaluation system, the author failed to exclude other causal factors that might have contributed to the trend. For example, the recruitment standards of Omega University might have changed due to an adjustment in educational policy and new students since 15 years ago then had higher SAT percentiles than earlier students, which really caused the growing trend of the GPA. Since the writer did not exclude any other possible causes, it is unconvincing for him to state the evaluation procedure sufficiently inflated the GPA assigned by professors.

Second, the comparison of employment rates between Omega University and Alpha university lacks benchmarks. It is highly impossible that the difference between Alpha and Omega graduates is that Omega students have the right to evaluate their professors but the Alpha students do not. There are many other possible reasons to make it easier for Alpha students to find a job. For example, Alpha may have its advantage in Engineering education while Omega in Law education. The situation might be that the area happened to need engineers badly that year while the supply of lawyers has already been satisfied. Therefore, the writer failed to prove that the lower employment rate of Omega students has been caused by the inflated grade points.

In sum, the consequential links stated by the writer are not flawless. Not any causal assumption the author made is supported by sufficient proofs. If the writer wants to support his suggestion, he should collect more evidence to support the causal relationships he declared.