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50"In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
名词解释
instruction
1 a : PRECEPT <prevailing cultural instructions> b : a direction calling for compliance : ORDER ― usually used in plural <had instructions not to admit strangers> c plural : an outline or manual of technical procedure : DIRECTIONS d : a code that tells a computer to perform a particular operation
2 : the action, practice, or profession of teaching

require
transitive verb
1 a : to claim or ask for by right and authority b archaic : REQUEST
2 a : to call for as suitable or appropriate <the occasion requires formal dress> b : to demand as necessary or essential : have a compelling need for <all living beings require food>
3 : to impose a compulsion or command on : COMPEL
4 chiefly British : to feel or be obliged ― used with a following infinitive <one does not require to be a specialist ― Elizabeth Bowen>
intransitive verb archaic : ASK

Generally speaking,people would like accept commonsence which is based on their daily life and present understandings, rather than abstract theories.Such a inclination is same to students. What can convince students at large in the course of instruction is real and objective evidence,especially information getting away from purely academic reasearchesand could support what they are taught.The need calls for a requirement to the faculty of having plenty of relative practical example in hand,in order to make what they are instructing effectively and vividly.Where can faculty get such gain?It seems that nothing will be better than getting a profession-relevent job outside the academic world and accumulate experience from practices,ultimately,impart to students.However,considering the various characteristics owed by different subjects and personality of each faculty,it is ill-conceived and unwise to acquire all faculty to spend time on course-relevent job outside existing academic work.Furthermore,whether the idea will finally achieve the goal is still questionable,even may cause a negtive disturb to the functioning of daily teaching.

When it comes to the Economics,which is closely interlated with our everyday life,faculty in relative field can easily find that ocassional working outside the academic researches does do a favor to normal instruction.Gregory Mankiw,who is a typical example that can keep a balance between teaching and official working.Mankiw was appointed as the chairman of the Concil of Economics Advisor from 2003 to 2005.Then he has since resume teaching in Harvard.Currently,he is a visiting fellow of the American Interprise Institution.Owning suchlike experience in both instructing of university and official working,Mankiw has demonstrated publicly he benefits a lot from trying various things,surely what he gets from government job has a positive effect on his instruction at university. But on the contravacy, it is hard to imagine the faculty in the field of aeronautics or archeology could find it very helpful to work outside lab,for such subjects are comparetively divorced from reality and acquire more accurate experimental data from scientific test and field-work.What should be instructed to students is mainly the method to do a research or analyse relative data.
Not only the factor of different subjects,but also personal characteristics ought to be taken into consideration when decide whether faculty should be demanded to work outside.Take John Nash,who is unsociable and eccentric,for example.Even in a broadly-speaking same field of learning with Mankiw,obviously Nash prefer to find his inspire and direction in a sphere of basic academic research.Ignoring the respect to individual traits and make a slapdash requirement blindly means ocuppying present time and energy,even disturbing the normal functioning of instructing.

All roads lead to Rome.In fact,the quality of instruction can also evaluated and promoted by other factors like students' learning activity and open academic environment provided by college and university.Actions should be taken on the basis of original intention,any one-sided decision may lead to a unexpected rusult against initial intention.

In sum,integrating the academic output and practical experience get from course-relevent work outside school is a good way to improve the quality of instruction.But comprehensive factors should be thought of when requiring all faulty to spend time on outside working,including the characteristics of different subjects and faculty's personal situation.In addition,excepting the requirement to faculty,promotion in the aspect of students and school can also upgrade the quality of instruction.

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本帖最后由 rodgood 于 2010-1-15 10:25 编辑

新手上路，只能发表自己的浅见。

这几天也在思考这道题目。LZ考虑地真全面，从专业角度和个体特点角度进行分析。功力比我深厚啊~~赞。

提一点小小的建议。1. 倒数第二段貌似偏题。题目要讨论的中心是should的问题，而没有how的问题，重点不在于讨论如何提高教学质量。
2.结尾的最后一句有点画蛇添足的味道。之前看草木斑竹的文法作业帖，其中有conclusion的写法，里面就提到结尾就不要再加入新的信息了。

现在还没有拿得出手的文章，呵呵，还在思考阶段。过几天贴上来欢迎狂拍~~~~

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又拜读了一遍。原来结尾最后一句是针对倒数第二段的观点进行的总结，汗。这样的话就只有第一条偏题的建议了。

【2025FALL】全站祈福已开放~~来领祈福章，求offer得offer

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提一点小小的建议。1. 倒数第二段貌似偏题。题目要讨论的中心是should的问题，而没有how的问题，重点不在于讨论如何提高教学质量。
2.结尾的最后一句有点画蛇添足的味道。之前看草木斑竹的文法作业帖，其中有conclusion的写法，里面就提到结尾就不要再加入新的信息了。
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谢谢你来拍哦~倒数第二段加上去说白了是自己心里没什么底，写到后面总觉得自己的结尾部分太薄了才会有这样的安排
因为题目中的目的在于提高教学质量，所以我在想既然不能要求老师到校外工作，如果还想要提高教学质量的话，也可以用提升学生能力和学校本身的学术氛围的方法来实现。我是这样想的，如果显得冗余或者时间不够我肯定会首先考虑放弃倒数第二段的。
没事，如果你写出作文还希望被拍的话，随时告诉我，我会尽我所能的。^_^

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发表于 2010-1-15 16:05:14 |只看该作者

首先要提出来的是拼写错误还是要尽量避免的吧，还有就是标点符号后面要空一格。
还有就是同意二楼的，感觉文章的思路不是很清楚，第二段作为例子应该能说明一个观点，而不仅仅是一个方面，这样会显得你的逻辑比较乱，稍加改动应该问题不大的。

这是我的习作，issue212，希望能多提意见哈，谢谢
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1051545-1-1.html

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首先要提出来的是拼写错误还是要尽量避免的吧，还有就是标点符号后面要空一格。
还有就是同意二楼的，感觉文章的思路不是很清楚，第二段作为例子应该能说明一个观点，而不仅仅是一个方面，这样会显得你的逻辑比较乱，稍加改动应该问题不大的。

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标点符号后空一格我总是忘记，而且我的word不知道怎么了，最近总是检查不出错误拼写……我会注意的
第二段最前面是应该加上一个小观点的……谢谢，我会改进

这就去回拍了~O(∩_∩)O~

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本帖最后由 wwwcccxxx007 于 2010-1-15 17:10 编辑

Generally speaking,people would like accept commonsence which is basedon their daily life and present understandings, rather than abstracttheories（这个分析好，收下了）.Such a inclination is same to students. What can convincestudents at large in the course of instruction（个人建议插入语适当加些标点吧） is real and objectiveevidence,especially information getting away from purely academicreasearches and could support what they are taught（好像有点语法问题。。getting away 用这里有点牵强，词性？）.The need calls for arequirement to the faculty of having plenty of relative practicalexample in hand,in order to make what they are instructing effectivelyand vividly（这里好像应该用形容词）.Where can faculty get such gain（没这么说的。。。）?It seems that nothingwill be better than getting a profession-relevent job outside theacademic world and accumulate experience frompractices，（这里要么前面用分号，要么加个连接词）ultimately,impart to（好词收了） students.However,considering the variouscharacteristics owed by different subjects and personality of eachfaculty,it is ill-conceived and unwise to acquire all faculty to spendtime on course-relevent job outside existing academicwork.Furthermore,whether the idea will finally achieve the goal isstill questionable,even may cause a negtive disturb to the functioningof daily teaching.（后半句个人建议用not to mention xxxxxx）（楼主的观点还是很清晰地，逻辑很好，层次也很清楚，学习了！！）

（transition 可能要注意下，有点唐突）When it comes to the Economics,which is closely interlated with oureveryday life,faculty in relative field can easily find that ocassionalworking outside the academic researches does do a favor to（用这里有点奇怪。。就用improve 或者其他synonyms就好） normalinstruction.Gregory Mankiw,who is a typical example that can keep abalance between teaching and official working.Mankiw was appointed asthe chairman of the Concil of Economics Advisor from 2003 to 2005.Thenhe has since resume（时态？） teaching in Harvard.Currently,he is a visitingfellow of the American Interprise Institution.Owning suchlikeexperience in both instructing of university and officialworking,Mankiw has demonstrated publicly he benefits a lot（不懂。。） from tryingvarious things,surely what he gets from government job has a positiveeffect on his instruction at university. But on the contravacy, it ishard to imagine the faculty in the field of aeronautics or archeology（这个that能省么？）could find it very helpful to work outside lab,for such subjects arecomparetively divorced from reality and acquire more accurateexperimental data from scientific test and field-work.What should beinstructed to students is mainly the method to do a research or analyserelative data. （例子好新，LZ学这个的？BTW，楼主的逻辑+论证很好，继续学习！！）

Not only the factor of different subjects,but also personalcharacteristics ought to be taken into consideration when decidewhether faculty should be demanded to work outside.Take John Nash,whois unsociable and eccentric,for example.Even in a broadly-speaking samefield of learning with Mankiw,obviously Nash prefer to find his inspireand direction in a sphere of basic academic research.Ignoring therespect to individual traits and make a slapdash requirement blindlymeans ocuppying present time and energy,even disturbing the normalfunctioning of instructing.

All roads lead to Rome.In fact,the quality of instruction can also (be)evaluated and promoted by other factors(加个标点吧，不然句子好长。。) like students' learningactivity and open academic environment provided by college anduniversity.Actions should be taken on the basis of originalintention,any one-sided decision may lead to a unexpected rusultagainst initial intention.

In sum,integrating the academic output and practical experience getfrom course-relevent work outside school is a good way to improve thequality of instruction.But comprehensive factors should be thought ofwhen requiring all faulty to spend time on outside working,includingthe characteristics of different subjects and faculty's personalsituation.In addition,excepting the requirement to faculty,promotion inthe aspect of students and school can also upgrade the quality ofinstruction.

楼主每段的逻辑和论证都蛮好哦！！学习了学习了~~全文的structure很好，条例也很清楚！！
不过，文法部分有待加强，有的表述不是很到位~~~当然，其实逻辑什么好才是最重要的！！
LZ加油哈~~~

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不过，文法部分有待加强，有的表述不是很到位~~~当然，其实逻辑什么好才是最重要的！！
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看到自己的文章被表扬真是内牛满面啊~~~！！谢谢，一起加油吧！

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What can convincestudents at large in the course of instruction（个人建议插入语适当加些标点吧） is real and objectiveevidence,especially information getting away from purely academicreasearches and could support what they are taught（好像有点语法问题。。getting away 用这里有点牵强，词性？）
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out of purely academic reasearches会好一点吧？

Where can faculty get such gain（没这么说的。。。）?
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Where can faculty get such pracitcal experience?

（transition 可能要注意下，有点唐突）
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有G友指出来了，自己看的时候也有点不顺，就是当时没找到，多亏了你们的帮助啊

All roads lead to Rome.In fact,the quality of instruction can also (be)evaluated and promoted by other factors(加个标点吧，不然句子好长。。) like students' learningactivity and open academic environment provided by college anduniversity.
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哦呵呵~真的好长……
In fact,the quality of instruction can also (be)evaluated and promoted by other factors.Such as students' learning activity and open academic environment provided by college and university.

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发表于 2010-1-16 23:03:32 |只看该作者

你好，我贴了篇刚写的ISSUE到坛子里，欢迎狂拍~~~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1051843-1-1.html

以后一起多交流，合作愉快

另外，在WORD里面，工具->语法和拼写->选项，可以设置是否进行语法和拼写自动检查

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本帖最后由 jinziqi 于 2010-1-17 14:53 编辑

Generally speaking, people would like to accept commonsencecommonsense which is based on their daily life and presents understandings, rather than abstract theories. Such an inclination is same to students. What can convince students at large in the course of instruction is real and objective evidence, especially information getting away from purely academic reasearchesresearches and could support what they are taught(/learning). The need calls for a requirement to the faculty of having plenty of relative practical examples in hand, in order to make what they are instructing effectively and vividly. Where can faculty get such gain? It seems that nothing will be better than getting a profession-releventrelevant job outside the academic world and accumulatinge experience from practices, ultimately, imparting to students. However, considering the various characteristics owed by different subjects and personality of each faculty, it is ill-conceived and unwise to acquire all faculty to spend time on course-releventrelevant jobs outside existing academic work. Furthermore, whether the idea will finally achieve the goal is still questionable, even may cause a negtivenegative disturb (应该用名词吧) to the functioning of daily teaching.

When it comes to the Economics, which is closely interlatedinterrelated with our everyday life, faculty in relative field can easily find that ocassionaloccasional working outside the academic researches does do a favor to normal instruction. Gregory Mankiw ,who is a typical example that can keep a balance between teaching and official working. Mankiw was appointed as the chairman of the ConcilCouncil of Economics Advisor from 2003 to 2005.Then he has since resume teaching in Harvard. Currently, he is a visiting fellow of the American InterpriseEnterprise Institution. Owning such like experience in both instructing of university and official working, Mankiw has demonstrated publicly that he gets benefits a lot from trying various things, and surely what he gets from government job has a positive effect on his instruction at university. But on the contravacy contrary, it is hard to imagine the faculty in the field of aeronautics or archeology could find it very helpful to work outside lab, for such subjects are comparetivelycomparatively divorced from reality and acquire more accurate experimental data from scientific test and field-work. What should be instructed to students is mainly the method to do a research or analyseanalyze relative data.

Not only the factor of different subjects, but also personal characteristics ought to be taken into consideration when decide whether faculty should be demanded to work outside or not. Take John Nash, who is unsociable and eccentric, for example. Even in a broadly-speaking same field of learning with Mankiw, obviously Nash prefer to find his inspire and direction in a sphere of basic academic research. Ignoring the respect to individual traits and make a slapdash requirement blindly means ocuppyingoccupying present time and energy, even disturbing the normal functioning of instructing.

All roads lead to Rome. In fact, the quality of instruction can also be evaluated and promoted by other factors like students' learning activity and open academic environment provided by colleges and universitiesy. Actions should be taken on the basis of original intention, and any one-sided decision may lead to an unexpected rusultresult against initial intention.

In sum,
integrating the academic output and practical experience get from course-releventrelevant work outside school is a good way to improve the quality of instruction. But comprehensive factors should be thought of when requiring all faulty to spend time on outside working, including the characteristics of different subjects and faculty's personal situation. In addition, excepting the requirement to faculty, promotion in the aspect of students and school can also upgrade the quality of instruction.

发现少了很多空格，写完了最好自己先检查一遍拼写，动词名词的形式都用得对不，是否主谓一致，定冠词的用法等等。还有用了从句以后再看看有没有谓语，以及两个句子要有连词连接。感觉开头太长了，一般简要介绍一下情况就可以开始阐述了吧，中间可以多阐述。

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