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As things stand now(就目前情况来看,用的不错), a hot conversation(debate) emerges that it beeter(better) to watuch(watch) serious movices(movies) that help people think than to watch movices(movies) that amuse and entertainment people. some people supports this idear(idea),but others deem its just a prejudice. In my perspective, I am in favor of the latter in term of my education and experience.
那个conversation之后可以是which is better,the movie that…, or the movie…
In term of…,不知道能不能这样用,还请高人给确认。而且要是自己的阅历的话,后面的主语都应该是I了,而不是you,我觉得啊。我就图省事,直接说for the following reason了。
First of all, one great things(单数) about comedyis(comedies) that, you can release yourslef(self) form the pressure of study. Laughing is the best healer, No matter how depressed you feel, seeing the exaggerate face, and funny plot, you will come back to life again. we never forget the master of comedy Chaplin,who bring the laughing to the whole world, and wipe out the sadness during the second world war。
拼写和断句的问题有点让人抓狂,其他的都好了。
What"s more,sociologicalstudies have found that a person,who watching comedy movuces, is more easy to keep a postivtive attitude to life.laughing is to people, what water to fish. Once you laugh ,your desre to better life become stronger. since, comedy movices is not just good for your feeling, but for your heathy as well. Forgetting all the despairon yesterday, so we are going to be a new adventure today. That’s what we can benefit from the comedy.
有那个study使得说理有力多了,学习啊!还有最好在第一句点出该段的分论点。然后开始展开来论证你的这个分论点。
In addition, seldom people do realized(原形) that comedy still help people thinking. when you noticed a actor"s choice, which you maight be made totally the same, result in a funny ending. you must think over after meeting thr same satution in your own life. one essential difference between comdey and tragedyis the extent to which use a happiness to draw audience attention, which is use saddess to draw it.- \9 e+ n2 J" p, U. _7 p4 k
第一个论据支持的不太好,后面不是应该思考,而且不由自主的让人去思考,和严肃电影一个效果。最后一个长句也就是第二个论据好似说服力也不强。
I don not dent the serious movices live a deeply impression and moved a lot of people, but the advantages of comedy is cleary outweigh the drawbacks. So, to conclude, It is not better to watch serious movice that help people think than to watch movices that could amuse people
让步句是亮点,很好。最后可以不要说宁肯看喜剧而不是正剧,觉得应该说看喜剧的advantages。
笑笑,不错,继续加油,多加注意你的拼写和断句哦 |
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