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Today’s people care more about their health, though they may have not enough time to do exercises or other things that interest them. Some argue that people will waste too much time if their hobbies are totally different from their careers, which goes against with my point of view.2 M9 ]* y0 Q+ Y
" V1 d# o+ F" i3 G1 P7 IAdmittedly, for some people, such as professional athletes, they have already spent too much time on physical activities, thus sports that are very different from their own jobs seem not necessary. On the contrary, those sports sometimes add burden to them. Besides, so into their own work are some individuals(这个是倒装句吗?可以这样用的?) that they just contribute all themselves into their careers and have little time to other hobbies.7 _$ N) R0 q, Q' i4 I2 \, p) r& I
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hobbies or sports that differ to people’s jobs access them to let stress out(这个表达感觉怪怪的,用can release stress from people就行了吧), which benefits to their careers and their health as well. After keeping working as an assistant for several days, my aunt used to spend half of Sunday to sleep(sleeping), but still felt tired after being waken up and became increasingly bored about her work. Several weeks ago, however, she desired to play badminton or jog during leisure time, which truly refreshed her. Though she was sweaty every time after sports, she had more passion on her work since her pressure was gone during the sports. Of course, she became healthier due to regular exercises.
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# I: l8 ~/ j1 E& P& vFurthermore, such hobbies offer an individual a wider vision on his work, even on world, for he does not focus on his own job only, which offer more opportunities to his career. Assume that an investment company manager who was interested in biology. He did not intend to make money through things he did for killing time, such as collecting insects, viewing news regarding to biological discovery, and discussing issues on biology on Internet. Yet once a project about biology medical was proposed and he became the lead of that project. He accomplished it efficiently owning to his extra knowledge about biology.
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To sum up, even if we cannot deny that there are some minor disadvantages of having hobbies and physical activities that are different from people’s own jobs. I still hold the point that such hobbies and sports are necessary in general, since they decrease individuals’ stress and bring people boarder visions.
拼写蛮多错的,可以注意下,条理清晰,不过可以每段有主题句,那就更明确观点了。整体不错!加油,共同体努力! |
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