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10月24日 20100821NADo you agree ordisagree with the following statements? There is nevera reason for people to be rude (impolite) to another person. Usespecific reasons to support your answer.

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Some people highly value the politeness in the communication in their social life. In their opinion, we should not be rude to others at any time for any reason. However, if we do an interview or survey in our real life to average people who walk on streets, you probably won't get a positive answer about this seemly correct assertion. Not to mention other normal people, just ask yourself, "will you still smile and calm down when some person slaps on your face, spits in your eyes, punches your nose, or even worse shoot your mom dead?" Absoluteky not. Pehaps you will point out that I am pushing the answer to the most extreme situations, but you just never know what is going to happen in your life and how the cruel reality would testify your naive belief.

Therefore I will give further reasons in the paper to support my point of view that it is impossible to be polite forever to anyone in any kinds of situation.

First, to be polite is a positive doing when your friends also treat you nicely. However, there's always a dark side of the story, which not all of people are as nice as you expect. In school, it is highly possible you will meet some bad kids who beat you up after class, or who seduce you to try drugs. At the moment, just being polite is not enough to protect yourself. We should be tough and know what is the right things to do in order to give them a good lesson. Sadly, lots of poor children are too afraid of being "impolite/rude" to those bad kids, or even too timid to confront the violence on campus. Due to their weakness, they don't know how to say ‘No", and when to seek help from their parents, teachers and even policemen. Thus politeness is indeed a good behavior to nice people, but not an appropriate attitude to those rude, harmful and violent people. Please think about our policemen, do they know politeness? Yes. Are they nice all the time? No. When they are dealing with gangsters, they could not be nice but hardcore, because that's the way of speaking in their situations.

Second, it is really hard to avoid being rude all the time, even if you are truly hoping so. For example, some misunderstanding that we really do not mean, however, is hurting us sometimes. To be specific, different cultures, languages and habits may cause misunderstanding among friends. Some words are mild to you, but offensive to your friends. So when you use them in the conversation, your friends will regard you as rude even you don't realize it. For this reason, it is too realistic to say never for people to be impolite, because different people may have different standards about politeness.

It is a beautiful dream that in our society everyone treats others equally and nicely with respect, but the reality is always more cruel than our imagination. Understanding the politeness is a must in modern society admittedly, but to practice it to all of the people forever is difficult, since people you meet are varied, complicated or even violent and dangerous. Sometimes it is necessary to be tough to get things right and speak for the justice.

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10月25日 20100320NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? Since most people can solve their problems by themselves or with the help from their families, the help from government is often not necessary. Use specific reasons to support your answer./ x7 E% m* s7 {/ i/ n5 y' G9 \% U* R" M7 a
Some people think the value of government in modern society is limited, since we can solve our problems by ourselves or seek help from the people nearby. However, I could hardly agree with the point of view. The main reason is because there exist many more problems that we as normal citizens are unable to help, such as peace, millitary, poverty, security, health and education. In the paper, I will explain my perspectives one by one.

Currently most of people like us are living in the modern or even post-modern societies, which means we are not waving our own clothes, raising our own cattles, feeding the pigs for our own sakes. We are far more developed so that we know cooperation. To be specific, all of us are only taking parts of the jobs and we trade for whatever we need and want. That means even if you can live your life literally by your hands, you won't do that since you don't have to. It is just like the value of govenment for one hand. In the complicated current societies, all of countries in the world are having their own governments, no matter what kind of political systems they are, from the local governements to the central governments. the important reason is that in the increasingly complicated human societies, except for solving the hungry problem, we still need to consider other higher level of problems, like education, war and millitary, public health, security and so on. Without governements, our needs are difficult to meet.

Take security as an example, without governemnts and policemen, if you have to seek protection ,who will you turn to? Gangsters? Then they will charge you huge amount of money and kill you eventually. And by this way, your case will turn out to be even more complicated so that you will never get your justice and peace. Admittedly, policemen and our juristic structure in the government play critical roles in our life. they are just like air, without which we could not live even for one minute! However, we often overlook them too easily.

When it comes to the topic of education, the goverenment's value is also evident. Suppose all of the educational systems are established by private organizations, then what will happen? It is highly possible that only rich children can receive education, while the poor kids are unable to step into the doors of education. Without proper education, those poor kids will never get any chance to change their destiny but struggle at the bottom of the societies forever. They can even turn to the darkest side of the society, seduced by drug dealers, prostititors and gang people. By this way, education can not become part of our citizens' basic rights but the only privilege of rich and powerful people.

Last but not least, the public health is also problematic if we don't have goverenment's support. Nowadays the governemnt provide large amount of money and facilities for the people's health. As we all know, the price of hospital services is outrageously high, which is far beyond our accountability. Without the health insurance, how many of us could still pay for that? Maybe few but not many. Most of citizens may lose their life because of lack of appropriate medical services when they need. At certain times, when there is certain diseases transfered often among population, it is impossible for single person to stop it, and the only solution will be the organization of our government, and even several different governments' cooperation.

All in all, the modern "happiness" is not only about we can have foods and house to live, but also about education, safety, health, and even freedom, respect, and careness to others and so on. Without goverenment, it will be extremely hard to realize the meaningful happiness we are seeking for. Due to the limit of the time, I could only name some of the values of the goverenment: Security, Education and Public health, whic are all the most basic rights we rely on. Conclusively, The Goverenments are playing incredible roles in our life, although we still have a lot of potential to make it work better for us. It is no longer 14th century now, so that we recognize that as modern or post-modern people we need to enjoy higher level of basic rights, which can be promised and realized not by singles but through a wholesome goverenment.

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发表于 2011-10-26 08:19:47 |只看该作者

10月26日 20100312NA Agree or disagree? If children wantto do well in school, parents should limit the hours of watching TV programs ormovies

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发表于 2011-10-26 08:53:27 |只看该作者

I still remember that when I was a small child, I was so addicted to watching TV. As soon as my parents left living room, I would turn on TV set secretly, enjoying the program as much as I could. However, currently as I grow up, I have to admit that watching TV too much affects children's efficiency and stop them to devote whole heartedly in school. Although I was suspicious about my parents' TV time limit, I begin to realize they made a correct decision. I will explain my point of view one by one.

First, if you hope your children do well in school, they should, at first, be healthy, which is the basis for everything. Watching TV for a long time will hurt kids' eyesight largely. When they stare at screen for two hours or even longer they won't be willing to read textbooks anymore, because their eyes are too tired to read anythings afterwards. Additionally, there show all sorts of advertising on air to children, including certain junk foods, fast foods, cigarettes, and alcohol. Young kids will be interested in those stuffs too early, and try to sneak to taste them before the legal age. That would hurt and even poison their bodies. Further, certain movies are limited to the adult audience, so if the young kids watch those programs accidentally, the effects on them will be negative. For instance, certain sexual contents are not allowed to expose to the children too early without the parents' company. Thus TV or movies will be an important element in the environment to take effects on children's education even you don't hope so.

Another reason for TV limit to young students is due to the big competition for better education and their comparatively limited time and energy. It is well known that if you intend to enter a good university, you have to enter a good high school at first, but no one would say that I don't hope to get in the good high school. For this reason, competition even for the basic education is fierce. Suppose your child is watching TV at most of her spare time, while her other classmates are studying hard for quizzes, home works and exams, who will be more possible to get an opportunity to go to college in the further? Not to mention sports and artistic training. Honestly speaking, everything needs time, and time is money. If our children don't learn how to use time efficiently at early age, they will lose more chances later on. To do well in school is not equivalent with staying home to be a humit. By contrast, except for studying hard, children should take part in the extracurricular activities as much as possible, such as doing volunteer jobs, visiting museums, and making friends with different people.

In order to be a healthy and excellent student, young child should spend time on various activities evenly. Based on this reason, our parents are legible to control their time watch TV and movies. I have to admit that qualified TV and movies will also help their education, but to control the time limit is a must for the kids' good.

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发表于 2011-10-26 11:19:40 |只看该作者

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发表于 2011-10-27 03:57:34 |只看该作者

ai...都木有人改。。。

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发表于 2011-10-28 02:48:48 |只看该作者

10月27日 20100306NA Some people believe that people should follow their ambitious dreams andgoals even they are not realistic; others believe that people should focus onachieving realistic goals. What’s your opinion and why? Use specific reasons to support your answer.% w4 _$ ^& N7 p4 z9 ~, F7 y( N8 |; L

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发表于 2011-10-28 03:33:09 |只看该作者

Having dreams is a wonderful thing to many young people, however, when you get to realize that you will never make your ambitious dream come true, what will you do? Some people will stick to it, while others may decide to quit and start doing something else instead. In my opinion, I would support the more realistic one, the second choice, over the first one, because I know the reality is cruel, our energy and time is limited, and also we may have family and responsibility to fulfill.

To most of us, there is always a big gap between dream and reality, except for very few lucky people. When I was 6-year-old, I said I was going to be fashion designer in the future. However, currently when I look back, as a scientific major student, I know it would sound a little bit ridiculous even if it was a really pretty dream. I am not persuading you that all of your ambition is useless, instead, what I am writing is the beauty of dream is just because it is only dream without pain. If you devoted too much of your time and opportunity for this unrealistic dream and got nothing eventually, you will never say it is "beautiful" anymore. Thus let the dream just be a dream or a part of good memory.

Another point I will make is about the limited time or energy we have. For most of us, life is not easy at all. Please look at those 99% of American people on the wall streets, or maybe you are one of them. Some of them are students just like us who have to pay their student loan for half of their life. Some of them are poor workers even don't have any health insurance at all, and they have to have a surgery or die, and some of them... Perhaps you will ask them, "why not become a NBA player, a rock star, a movie star, or a football player?" Unfortunately, they just lost their chances for all kinds of reasons: not beautiful enough? too short to play basketball? too fat to run on the football games? and so on. Nevertheless the point is that right now is not about dream anymore, rather, we should be "down-to-the-earth" to really see what is the problem and figure out how to solve it and help them. Otherwise, we will lose them forever, and hence lose the United States sadly. In other words, realize dreams needs time, money and energy, but for some people with difficulty, it is more practical to just solve the real problems instead of caring about "dreams".

Last but not least, as adults we may have family to raise, which is a gift and also a burden. With family, adults should not only think about their dreams, but fulfill their responsibility as much as they could. For instance, to raise and educate their kids, to pay taxes for the government as a citizen, to do volunteer work as a member of community, and to take care their parents as a good son/daughter at home. All of those things will take some time and money from us, but we still need to finish them one by one wholeheartedly, because that is the meaning of living your grownup life - not only for yourself, but for your wife, your family, your community and your country. If you want to play soccer as a professional when you are 40, it means that your wife has to work harder to raise the whole family, and your kids probably won't get in the good schools since you will not have enough time to help them. Also your parents will be left alone without communication, care and respect. Think about those points, and then you will know the price for your selfish dream.

Conclusively, to be realistic is an important characteristic for lots of us, because we will pay fully attention to our current life and work harder to make it better, rather than avoiding our responsibilities for family and society. The reality is not always perfect, so as a normal person, it is wiser to accept reality and use our limited time and energy on the right things.

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发表于 2011-10-28 10:55:34 |只看该作者

能否给个评价阿？谢谢了

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发表于 2011-11-3 08:04:00 |只看该作者

Rather than help their children do homework, the parents should encourage their children to do it independently, do you agree or not? Explain why with details and examples.

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14# 云鬓香 In my point of view, to do the homework for the children is not helping them but hurting them instead. Although I really understand some parents' feeling, I personally don't recommend the irrational doing. I have several reasons to support my viewpoint.

First, when we try to figure out whether it is correct or not to do the homework for your kids, we have to understand the meaning and aim for doing homework. Mostly it is an effective way to help your children digest what they learned in the morning at school by solving related problems all by themselves. It is very important to make sure that they are not corroborating with others to finish the homework, otherwise it will be harder for teachers or parents to find out their problems. Also, even if parents can help them finish homework once, twice and three times, once they have exams at school, who is going to help them then? No one. Thus it is critical for parents to realize that there will be a day in the future you will never be able to assist your kids again. So the real help for your children is to let them be independent as soon as possible.

Second, in order to effectively educate the kids, I would rather to ask parents to train their children to be independent since very early age. To be a mature adult, the person should be able to make his/her own decisions, to know how to communicate with others naturally, to finish his/her works responsibly, to learn the leadership from real experiences and so on. I still remember, when I was little, I once took part in the art competition. I was really hoping that I could win the final champion, so I asked help from my mom. However, she refused to color part of my painting. She said, "your painting is your own story, expressing your own feeling. I could paint it and color it for you, but by doing this I will ruin it rather than assist your work. Only by your own hardworking, you will be able to be proud of yourself." Eventually I only got the second place but I really feel proud of myself, due to which I understand the true meaning of being independent. Life is long journey with both beautiful surprises and sad difficulties. But no matter this is sweet or bitter, they, our children, have to try it themselves, and no one can replace their positions, because this is their duties and their personal rights. Parents are crucial in their growth, but they are only effecting part of their growth not all of it.

Based on what I mentioned before, I strongly believe that doing the homework for children is not wise as all, for both long term and short term development of children. Instead, we should realize it is better to make children independent at early stage, because no one can play their roles but themselves.

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