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题目：The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams’ revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch’s $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
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提纲：
作者列出了几点事实：（1）A的员工有40个，F的员工有25个，且很多还都是兼职。（2）去年A的收入是F的两倍，且平均房价要比F高。（3）十年前F花了四个月的时间卖了一个房子，而去年A只花了一个月卖了出去。
所以作者得出结论，如果想更快的并且好的价格卖出房子，就要找A。
1、作者提到A的员工比F 的多且，F 的很多员工兼职，但员工的数量少与工作时间短并不能说明工作效率低，可能两个公司的规模不一样，用人方式也不一样，因为F公司的员工工作效率高所以工作时间才会短。
2、去年收入高不代表今年收入也一定高，且收入不等于盈利，可能A公司的收入高但却是低价售房，效益并不好，收入的高低还跟两个公司出售房子的质量，房型，地理位置，等等很多因素有关，还与面对的客户群体，可能A出售的房子属于奢华型的，所以平均房价当然要高。所以单纯的收入比较不能说明A公司比F公司可靠。
3、作者只列举了自己这一个例子，不够充分，而且两套房子的地理位置，面积大小是否相同，都会影响到房子的出售。时隔九年，F公司的状况可能大有改进，A公司的状况可能也不及当年，变化因素会很多，例如国家政策改变导致房价上涨。
作者应该综合两公司多方面因素进行比较说明在何种情况下选择哪种公司更划算，这样说明就会更有说服力了。
正文：
  The homeowner cites the following facts about Adams Realty and Fitch Realty. First, Adams has 40 agents while Fithch has only 25 and many of them work only part-time. Secondly, Adams's revenue and average home sales last year was higher than that of Fitch. Thirdly, Fitch took more than four months to sell a house ten years ago, in contrast, Adams took only one month last year. However, lacking more accurate informations we cannot make sure that wether we should choose Adams if we want to sell our home quickly and at a good price.
  The homeowner claims that Fitch has fewer agents and less work-time than Adams.But this cannot necessarily indicate that Fitch has a low efficiency. Perhaps the two firms have a different scale, Adams has a better working condition and it is located in the center of the city. Or maybe the way of employ workers are contrast in these two firms, Adams is prefer to full-time work and Fitch is likely to make the workers' time more flexible.
The homeowner assumes that the revenue in Adams' was twice as high as that of Fitch last year so that the revenue must be also high in Adams this year.It is much more possible that the revenue in Adams is high but the profit from selling these house are not as much as the revenue.The quality and layout of a house are related to the revenue, and if the building located in the city where are flourishing, the price of the house would be higher compared to those located in the suburbs.Perhaps the customers of the two firms are also different. Unlike Fitch, maybe Adams are facing most of whose incomes are very high. It is also possible that Adams sells luxurious house, thus high revenue is naturally.
  The homeowner cites an example of his(her)self that Adams selling house is much faster than Fitch. But this comparison does not establish, because the contrast is based on a different period of time.Adams and Fitch might have variety of change among the nine years. And the price of the house maybe increasing during the nine years.The homeowner does not ensure all the external conditions consistently, such as the size of the two house.
  In sum, until the author provides further evidence to exclude all the concerns,it is unfounded to reach the conclusion involved in the argument.
If there is a sufficient sample and the author consider given factors and more convincing evidence,the argument will be more credibility and logically acceptable.

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