【寄托七月组】AW-6.10-Argument4（附互改说明）

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assignment for 6.10-argument 4

4. The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend. "Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

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写作限时40Min完成，提交DDL: 6.10 22:00

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╱．戀淵。UID：3514639

1 开头
2 不一定数量多就更好
3 不应定销售额高，房子均价高就好
4 10年内有很多变化
5 结尾



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Argument 4
　　
　　Thesis:the friend told that if he or she wanted to sold the home quickly and at a good price,he or she should use Adams Reality.
　　
　　Argument1: Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time.
　　Argument2:Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000.
　　Argument3:Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month.

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556 words
反驳了3大点：
P2：人数的问题以及工作性质的问题
P3：收入的问题
P4：纵向对比以及横向对比
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hamxyy 发表于 2014-6-10 21:25
处女座，哦不，处女作，轻拍。写的太烂也超时了，用了1h20m+。批我作文的还望海涵啊。

P2：人数多不代表 ...

咦。。。新朋友一只哎。。第一次正常。。那速度算快了

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先占楼，马上交。
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[想法]
这两天忙自己的进度，额外的任务需要腾出时间，这个argument说好些也好些，说不好写也不好写，
主要是注意些论据直接的关系，以及strength and weaken.结尾最好不要以列出一大堆证据的方式，
那个写法就是evidence的introduction了。还是需要注意不同的introduction不同的角度吧。

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xusen808 发表于 2014-6-10 21:02
Argument 4
　　
　　Thesis:the friend told that if he or she wanted to sold the home quickly and a ...

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