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发表于 2011-10-10 18:43:15 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

本帖最后由薰叶初于 2011-10-20 20:50 编辑

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1# 薰叶初

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2# albert199010

谢谢您老人家~~您帮我改的作文我看到了~哎~我会努力改善的...希望我帮您改的作文不要有太多错误了~~太惭愧了~:dizzy:

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发表于 2011-10-11 06:26:10 |只看该作者

作文我复制下来了~改好传上来~
这是我的作文~欢迎批改~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1292096-11-1.html

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发表于 2011-10-11 07:21:07 |只看该作者

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哈~我知道的~上完课中午帮你改哈~昨天晚上我已经稍微看过一遍了~

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发表于 2011-10-11 18:26:32 |只看该作者

改好了~~很晚才回到寝室所以不好意思现在才发……= =

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发表于 2011-10-11 20:47:49 |只看该作者

连中午给我改作文太感谢了！！改得好详细！！！完全感谢！！！
没迟到吧……byebye有点不好意思的说~~:lol

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发表于 2011-10-12 15:38:09 |只看该作者

10月12日 20100522NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Working at home using computers or telephones is better than working in the office.

The global world of work has witnessed radical changes in recent years, among which telecommuting, which guarantee the possibility of working at home, stands out as the most remarkable brainchild of the brand new era. A growing number of people choose to complete their work at home and communicate with their colleagues by using computers or telephones. But I do not consider this method is much better than working in the office, for long-distance working has plenty of drawbacks.

First and the foremost, the major disadvantage centers on telecommuting blurs the line between people’s leisure time and their work. People, who work in the office, have fixed office hours, generally from 9am until 5pm. The rest time, except for some specific occasions when they have to work overtime, is leisure time. However, if people start to work at home, they may feel unable to separate their lives from their occupations. They may start to check their emails once get up, and stay busy until late night. Without the time spends in commuting to their work places, they may actually work longer hours than their colleagues serving in offices.

Furthermore, the quality of work may suffer, for the reduced face-to-face interaction with other employees or supervisors. An essential element in the successful operation of a company is effective contact between co-workers. This contact not simply indicates making a few telephone calls or sending a few emails. It involves face-to-face discussions, brainstorming, persuasion or even arguments where innovative ideas and strategic decisions are created. This kind of working atmosphere can never be created in home conditions no matter how sophisticated the technology is.

Finally, once people start working away from the office, inevitably an increased sense of working for a task or a product will take the place of the decreased sense of working for an institution. Therefore, employers may feel less loyal to their companies and more inclined to change jobs or work part-time as long as it can provide reasonable pay and a flexible work schedule. Working in the office, on the other hand, often gives people a sense of belonging, a feeling that they are part of a larger group.

Apart from the disadvantages already mentioned, there are also drawbacks including loneliness, isolation, and laziness and so on. Therefore, this modern and attractive mode of working actually cannot compete with working in the office.

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发表于 2011-10-13 08:01:39 |只看该作者

10月13日 20100619NA Do youagree or disagree with the following statement? If you need to discussupsetting or controversial problems with others, Using e-mail/text messaging isbetter than using telephone/voice-messaging.

It is inevitable that sometimes we have to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others. What needs to be seriously considered here is the way how we communicate with other people about these. Though direct talking has its advantages, I fundamentally approve of the attitude of using e-mail or messaging. The explanations are as follows.

First and theforemost, the main reason I prefer writing method centers on the time which enable me to well organize my words. Undoubtedly sufficient time provide us with chances to take account of all respects relating to our issues and modify the sentences, which will exhibit our best expressions. As an undergraduate, Iam often confused by new knowledge difficult to understand. And when talking to my professors, I always forget to ask some essential questions or fail to refer to academic researches. At the same time of writing email, I can readily access to valuable information with the internet available. Also professors may need some references in order to jump to safe conclusions. It will let me receive better replies.

Furthermore, we can avoid others’ negative behaviors when they face controversial issues. Direct voice communication makes them feel nervous, embarrassed, and angry or even want to have quarrels. We may easily get moody and even lose our temper. Let’s bring our discussion to a more practical context. Few weeks ago, after my consideration, I decided to give up my plan to do an ongoing research. But the problem was that I was afraid of telling my professor about the disappointing news, though he would forgive gradually. His facial expression would dramatically raise my guilty. At last I chose to send messages and we had a discussionafter we both calmed down. Now I can devote myself to other projects with greater significance.

Finally, writing email and textmessage can lighten our burden if we incline to collect numerous answers about some same topics. Clearly the prerequisite of gathering is the guarantee that everybody involved has read questions and basically understood them. An excellent function of email and message is that they can send a same one to a lot of people at same time, but all we should do is just making up sole one. The telephone does not own the fantastic function. It only can satisfy the require for one call per time. It is the more efficient and convenient way to correspond that leads sending email to be prevailing.

To sum up, with all things discussing above, we do recommend people sending emails or messages when they need to askothers’ opinions about controversial issues.

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