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Whether it is a good thing for people to move to a new place because they will lose their friends? It is a controversial issue, and different people will hold different views. As far as I am concerned, we will not lose our friends after we move to a new place.On the contrary, we can obtain more new friends. I will list my reasons as follows.                             

To begin with, I have to admit that friends are the treasure in our live, and nobody can live without friends. When we come up with some difficulties in our life, friends can help us out. When we feel depressed, friends can always cheer us up. Additionally, when we are enjoying some wonderful thing, people who we want to share our happiness with are our friends. Friends, to be honest, occupy a great part of our life, and can not be lacked.                       

There is no denying the fact that making friends needs time and energy, but that is not to say that we move to a new town will result in lack
of friends. Communicating with the people in the new town or country, asking them for help, and helping them voluntarily can take many new friends to our life. We, however, should remember that only if we show people our genuine heart will others return us with sincerity. Just in this way, we can get many friends who can company us on our way. New friends can bring in new perspective which will broaden our horizon.

Finally, I have to point out that we should not forget our old friends when we make new friends, and moving away from friends does not mean we will lose them..We can e-mail or call our friends when we encounter something new, sharing our new experience, excitement and anxiety. Anyway, in my opinion, friendship will not change with time and location, and when we need them, our friends always be there waiting
to help us.If the friendship can not bear the test of time and distance, it will not be a real one.

To sum up, friends are very important in our life, and we can not live without them, but distance and time will not alienate friendship.
On the other hand, we can make many new friends after we move to a new town or a new country.  

Whether it is a good thing for people to move to a new place because they will lose their friends? It is a controversial issue, and different people will hold different views. As far as I am concerned, we will not lose our friends after we move to a new place.On the contrary, we can obtain more new friends. I will list my reasons as follows.                             

To begin with, I have to admit that friends are the treasure in our live, and nobody can live without friends. When we come up with some difficulties in our life, friends can help us out. When we feel depressed, friends can always cheer us up. Additionally, when we are enjoying some wonderful thing, people who we want to share our happiness with are our friends. Friends, to be honest, occupy a great part of our life, and can not be lacked. 个人觉得离题了，这个应该放在开头段作背景把。。。                     

There is no denying the fact that making friends needs time and energy, but that is not to say that we move to a new town will result in lack& N5 @# M  ]: G- k' {% Q  of friends. Communicating with the people in the new town or country, asking them for help, and helping them voluntarily can take many new friends to our life. We, however, should remember that only if we show people our genuine heart will others return us with sincerity. Just in this way, we can get many friends who can company us on(in） our way. New friends can bring in new perspective which will broaden our horizon.

Finally, I have to point out that we should not forget our old friends when we make new friends, and moving away from friends does not mean we will lose them..We can e-mail or call our friends when we encounter something new, sharing our new experience, excitement and anxiety. Anyway, in my opinion, friendship will not change with time and location, and when we need them, our friends always be there waiting! Q9 i5 y0 f# l9 a
to help us.If the friendship can not bear the test of time and distance, it will not be a real one.

To sum up, friends are very important in our life, and we can not live without them, but distance and time will not alienate friendship.On the other hand, we can make many new friends after we move to a new town or a new country.

感觉整篇是在侧重写什么是friends。。

说错的话请见谅。我个人逻辑思维有点乱乱的- -。。。

Whether it is a good thing for people to move to a new place because they will lose their friends? （这句话在逻辑上不太通。。。如果楼主硬要加上because那句，那么前面半句应该改为 Is it a bad thing for people to move..... because... 一般疑问句和是非疑问句，请楼主细细琢磨一下） It is a controversial issue, and different people will hold different views. As far as I am concerned, we will not lose our friends after we move to a new place.On the contrary, we can obtain more new friends. I will list my reasons as follows.                             

To begin with, I have to admit that friends are the treasure in our live, and nobody can live without friends. When we come up with some difficulties in our life, friends can help us out. When we feel depressed, friends can always cheer us up. Additionally, when we are enjoying some wonderful thing, people who we want to share our happiness with are our friends. Friends, to be honest, occupy a great part of our life, and can not be lacked.                       

There is no denying the fact that making friends needs time and energy, but that is not to say that we move to a new town will result in lack
of friends. Communicating with the people in the new town or country, asking them for help, and helping them voluntarily can take many new friends to our life. We, however, should remember that only if we show people our genuine heart will others return us with sincerity. Just in this way, we can get many friends who can company us on our way. New friends can bring in new perspective which will broaden our horizon （前一段是完全离题，这一段也有些离题，只有后一段很切题）.0 l( k- k$ d' _ （）

Finally, I have to point out that we should not forget our old friends when we make new friends, and moving away from friends does not mean we will lose them..We can e-mail or call our friends when we encounter something new, sharing our new experience, excitement and anxiety. Anyway, in my opinion, friendship will not change with time and location, and when we need them, our friends always be there waiting8 h$ Z$ e4 _" Y% o
to help us.If the friendship can not bear （sustain？） the test of time and distance, it will not be a real one.

To sum up, friends are very important in our life, and we can not live without them, but distance and time will not alienate friendship.
On the other hand, we can make many new friends after we move to a new town or a new country.  

楼主的论证很详实，只是内容上略有离题。

另外，在词句方面，可能尚需积累。

在表达方式上，有些观点切忌过于affirmative，因看你卷子的人很可能和你有完全不同的价值观。过于武断，可能招致反感，对成绩不利。