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希望各位大大多多关照。都能取得自己的理想分数。

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本帖最后由 xover 于 2012-2-10 18:27 编辑

2/10 independent

I agree with the statement that children should be encouraged to finish their works with independence. Parents can not or not be able to do everything for their children since the future belongs to the next generation, not to the elder.

Admittedly, some helps from parents may be efficient in the childhood. No doubt, new-born babies have no understanding about this complex world. It is their parents that leave them a strong influence about the complicated world. For instance, my parents taught me recognize the character, recite the classics of the culture lecture, and most importantly, distinguish the mortal and evil. However, parents should not pay much more attention on children for somewhat the children can easily be spoiled and this may lead he/she in trouble when he/she lives alone.
First, parents deal with more difficulties the children facing for the children rather than let them be. This may result in that children can not learn to be mature or grown up. If a boy/girl do not work the problem out on his/her own hands, the same question may trouble he/she a second time, eventually a third time or fourth time. Here I remember I broke my unique pen at thirteen, which was a award for the first prize in the competition. And I treasure it like a gem. The broke made me dispute like falling in a deep. Overwhelmed by the pain, I turned to my father, expecting he could fix it. In fact, my dad rejected to me and told me that your treasure only to be reborn in your way. Later days, altogether with my dad, I read as much as dozens books, done experiment and consulted the professors so I fixed my award. From that on, I could not only fix a pen but learned a truth of life as well. The truth is only through completing a task individually that can be thought as knowing it.
These are my reasons why I agree with the independence more.

2/10 integrated writing

The reading material mainly tell us that the benefits of group. But in the listening, the professor is not approval of them. First, the reading said that wider range of knowledge and skills while the professor thought that individual can contribute more because of the efficiency. Usually, a group takes advice and works as whole, which may waste lots of time. But individually, a person can move more quickly.
Second, the professor mentioned that some suggestion may be missing as the adviser is not so influence.
Third, in the professor's perspective, a person work individually are ,in some extend, highly creative since he or she could not be disturbed or influenced by others, which is not available in a group.
Last but not the least, if a group failed the project, who would be blamed to? The leader? No, according to the professor the guys who should to be blamed to be are the all members.

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The reading material mainly tells us about the benefits of group
work. But in the listening, the professor is not approval of them.
First, the reading said that group has wider range of knowledge and skills while the professor thought that individual can contribute more because of the high efficiency. Usually, a group takes advice and works as a whole, which may waste lots of time. But individually, a person can move more quickly.1 ^4 F1 G3 U" T" {
Second, the professor mentioned that some suggestions may be ignored as the adviser is not so influential.
(貌似有点太简略了。。时间不够了吗？)

Third, in the professor's perspective, a person who works individually are,
to some extent, highly creative since he or she would not be disturbed or influenced by others, which is not available in a group.) ~: U0 {- ?" |, r! K
Last but not the least, if a group failed the project, who would be blamed? The leader? No, according to the professor the guys who would be blamed are all the members.

最后最好加一句总结。。

加油。。。

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I agree with the statement that children should be encouraged to finish their works with independence. Parents can not or not be able 觉得should’nt比较合适 to do everything 否定该用anything for their children since the future belongs to the next generation, not to the elder.
Admittedly, some helps from parents may be efficient in the childhood. No doubt, new-born babies have no understanding about this complex world. (It is their parents that leave them a strong influence give them great influence about the complicated world. For instance, my parents taught me to recognize the character characters, recite the classics of the culture lecture classic literature, and most importantly, distinguish the mortal moral才是道德，mortal貌似是“凡人”的意思，感觉good and evil更加地道 and evil. )感觉这段与观点有冲突，且与主题相关性不大，楼主再看下However, parents should not pay much more attention on to children for somewhat 这个地方感觉该是somehow the children can easily be spoiled and this may lead he/she in trouble lead he/she to be in trouble when he/she lives alone.
First, parents deal with more 感觉这个有点多余 difficulties the children facing for the children themselves如何 rather than let them be do. This may result in 貌似不接句子 that children can not learn to be mature or grown up grown-up. If a boy/girl do does not work the problem out work out the problem on by his/her own hands, the same question may trouble he/she a second time, eventually a third time or fourth time. 这句。。Here I remember I broke my unique pen at thirteen, which was a the award for the first prize in the a competition. And I treasure it like a gem. The broke 这是动词还是名词 made me dispute like falling in a deep into the deep. Overwhelmed by the pain, I turned to my father, expecting he could fix it. In fact, my dad rejected to 去掉 me and told me that your treasure only to be reborn in your way. 感觉怪怪的 Later days, altogether with together with my dad, I read as much as dozens of books, done experiment experiments and consulted the professors so I fixed my award. From that on From then on, I could not only fix a pen but also learned a truth of life as well 感觉有了not only…but also了就不要它了. The truth is only through completing a task individually that can can you be thought as knowing it.感觉这句有问题，楼主再看下
These are my reasons why I agree with the independence more.

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2# xover

The reading material mainly tells us that
about the benefits of group. But in the listening
lecture, the professor is not approval of them it. First, the reading said that wider range of knowledge and skills这里似乎缺少谓语啊，这一句不完整，看不懂...while the professor thought that individual can contribute more because of the efficiency. Usually, a group takes advice and works as whole, which may waste lots of time. But individually, a person can move more quickly.似乎过于简略了，对于waste time 这一点应当进一步阐释一下，如spend a lot of time on meeting, hard to reach consensus等
Second, the professor mentioned that some suggestion may be missing as the adviser is not so influence.这一点也欠细化啊囧，这样字数够吗…

Third, in the professor's（lecture中的人不见得都是professor, 就直接用in the lecture 更为恰当） perspective, a person work individually are ,in some extend, highly creative since he or she could not be disturbed or influenced by others, which is not available in a group.（最好能与原文再对比一下，使用contrary to…等词汇，显示不同的观点）$ ?* x' j% g3 Y" A5

Last but not the least, if a group failed the project, who would be blamed to? The leader? No, according to the professor the guys who should to be blamed to be are the all members（这一点会造成的结果creative ideas and ignore concern about risky decisions也没有写出来，是不是没有听到？）

最后最好再加一个总结吧
加油哈

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2/11 independent writing

I agree with the statement that the main duty of a professor is to educate than to research. Professors are mostly the elite of a society and are who can deeply have a nation influenced. So, the duty of professors definitely determines a country powerful or not.
First of all, when a professor is doing his or her research, what about his or her students? Who does tell them the theories of truth? And who can instruct them? No one else can, because the professor is indeed the expert in his or her own field. He or she knows the secrets or theories and only he or she can explain why and how the theories been formed. Professor Gao, my teacher of quantum mechanics for instance, was teaching me and my classmates until he received a military project plan. Thus, His teaching schedule had been broken up. He had to quit educating us because of the project. Later, he asked his RA to substitute for teaching. Obviously, we can't catch his RA's ideas and in the final exam, sixty percent of my classmates failed.
Secondly, the outcome from a research may not have any value in practice now but may have in future. Then, here comes the trouble, why do the professors do the research that values nothing in our times rather than cultivate the youngsters who will develop and turn it into practice in future. In an economist's sight, education is more profitable under such circumstance. Meanwhile the path of the research may be filled with obstacles and even could not work out just with today's knowledge. Einstein, for example, paid his totally attention to Grand Unified Theories in his last years. We know the most intelligent person failed and no one succeed till now. If he spent these years in training students, it is possible that the students can help him solve the problem.
Here are why I am approval of education is more beneficial than research.

哎。花了近2个小时。。考试怎么办哦。。

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I agree with the statement that children should be encouraged to finish their works with independence (do sth with independence可以这样用吗？倒是查到了个例句，叫sb work with independence). Parents can not or not be able to do everything for their children since the future belongs to the next generation, not to the elder.

Admittedly, some helps from parents may be efficient in the childhood. No doubt, new-born babies have no understanding about (of ?) this complex world. It is their parents that (我觉得有点怪……)leave them a strong influence（impression?）
about the complicated world. For instance, my parents taught me(how to ) recognize the character, recite the classics of the culture lecture(文化讲座？), and most importantly, distinguish the mortal （good）and evil. However, parents should not pay much more attention on children for somewhat (这个后面能跟句子吗？)the children can easily be spoiled and this may lead he/she in trouble when he/she lives alone. " u7 `6 G8 {* c. W) T
First, parents deal with more difficulties the children facing for the children rather than let them be.（do?） This may result in that children can not learn to be mature or grown up(被成长？). If a boy/girl do not work the problem out on（by?） his/her own hands, the same question may trouble he/she a second time, eventually a third time or fourth time. Here I remember I broke my unique pen at thirteen, which was a award for the first prize in the competition. And I treasure it like a gem. The broke made me dispute like falling in a deep. Overwhelmed by the pain, I turned to my father, expecting he could fix it. In fact, my dad rejected to(去掉吧？) me and told me that your （如果不是my就用冒号撒？主语变了很奇怪唷）treasure only to be reborn in your way. （似乎得加in）Later days, altogether with my dad, I (have?)read as much as dozens books, done experiment and consulted the professors so I fixed my award. From that on, I could not only fix a pen but learned a truth of life as well. The truth is only through completing a task individually that can be thought as knowing it (有点没看懂，汗了个喵……).
These are my reasons why I agree with the independence more.

水平有限，改得不好。。。还请多多包涵，望共勉哟亲~~~~

当里个当。

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I agree with the statement that the main duty of a professor is to educate than to research. Professors are mostly the elite of a society and are who can deeply have a nation influenced（我不太明白。为什么PRO会有nation influence？）. So, the duty of professors definitely determines a country powerful or not.感觉这话太大了太重了。

First of all, when a professor is doing his or her research, what about his or her students? Who does好像语法不太对 tell them the theories of truth直接theory就可以吧？? And who can instruct them? No one else can, because the professor is indeed the expert in his or her own field. He or she knows the secrets or theories。。。觉得好怪。。 and only he or she can explain why and how the theories been formed. Professor Gao, my teacher of quantum mechanics for instance, was teaching me and my classmates until he received a military project plan. Thus, 太急着thus了 His teaching schedule had been broken up. He had to quit educating us because of the project. Later, he asked his RA to substitute for teaching. Obviously, we can't catch his RA's ideas and in the final exam, sixty percent of my classmates failed.

Secondly, （记得在某本托福书上看到说这个是不正式的用法。。不过看到很多满分作文也用应该无碍吧）the outcome from a research may not have any value in practice now but may have in future.我感觉你这个逻辑吧。。。research总是要有人在做的。现在如果没有人去研究，将来人也做不出来是吧？Then, here comes the trouble, why do the professors do the research that values nothing in our times rather than cultivate the youngsters who will develop and turn it into practice in future. In an economist's sight, education is more profitable under such circumstance. Meanwhile the path of the research may be filled with obstacles and even could not work out just with today's knowledge. Einstein, for example, paid his totally attention to Grand Unified Theories in his last years. We know the most intelligent person前面加个one of吧。。 failed and no one succeed till now. If he spent these years in training students, it is possible that the students can help him solve the problem.

Here are why I am approval of education is more beneficial than research.

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2.13 independent

If I am in that situation I would like to ask my classmate to consult a professor tutor rather than me when he or she is troubled by schoolwork,not because I am selfish in refusing to help him but asking a professional tutor is more beneficial.

First of all, having a deep understanding of the faults that most of students would make, professor tutors usually can point out where the work is wrong or unknown directly and exactly and correct the errors rapidly and effiently. Thus, it saves much time. For instance, one that I once made in physics took my huge time but not to solov with help of my classmate. However, my teacher corrected it just in minutes as teaching physics for so many years that he had dealt with the same mistake for lots of times.
Second, with lots of free time, a professional tutor's main job is to work out the problems that students may ask.While we students couldn't afford too much time in helping classmates to make solutions to some questions, espcially in the period of preparing for the coming final exams. Getting a pleasant score is our, all students', the main goal and so little time is left for discussing with classmates,which means we couldn't help others or be helped from others. Then we look forward a professional tutor since we don't have the time to help or be helped.
As brief, Turn to a professional tutor when be troubled or trooped
is more efficient on one hand, and more time-saving on the another hand than ask helps for classmates.

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本帖最后由陶太郎于 2012-2-14 12:15 编辑

整体思路还是很清晰的。

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11# idealibt

实在是没什么思路。。憋不出来。。

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2/15

憋啊憋啊憋啊憋。

When talking about how to succeed in a team, some people are usually aware of criticism acceptance an important factor, while others are in the opinion opposing that. As far as I am concerned, criticism may not contribute to success.
First of all, criticism usually means denying all your outwork and sometimes, a shame especially in front of many colleagues, which turns out to be an embarrassment. You can imagine that an egomaniac boss just made a decision at a meeting, when a straight employee, having found the decision was wrong just in his view, makes a critic challenges the boss's authority. What would happen in the next second? Of course, the employee has to hunt another job of 99 percent possibility. This is not a success both for the boss and the employee.
Also, critics from others are not always true. Some critics may be a trap that your enemy makes, they, with any ideas they could find, want to beat you. For instance, in many spy movies there is always a so-called trust assistant beside the boss or general. The assistant usually made useless suggestions; eventually they set a trap for the boss or general and led him or her to step to it before he or she is aware of. Thus, if taking these critics, the result must be a cataclysm.
Another kind of critics from who just express their perspectives is possible false. For these critics, we must ignore if we want to success. Distinct from others' thoughts, some people prefer to suggest theirs in a critic. These guys just want to 'correct' your idea, but indeed yours is more practical and more beneficial. For example, after the team has adapted a project, some members whose approach is deserted by most members would be critical of the adapted project. It’s senselessness for all the team

As a brief, criticism affects success in no aspect.

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