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       The statement that institutions should persuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed is seemingly a correct announcement. But in fact, there are flaws about the statement that lead it to uselessness. And in my opinion, as an educational institution, it should give advices to the students but do not persuade them get away from what they like.

Because of the characteristics of the educational
institutions, it is their duty to recommend the students to design their major and career.The students are not old enough so that they have few experiences about the future and the fields they may later be in. So at this point, the institutions should give comprehensive advices to the students to help them distinguish among these. What's more, as for the students, choosing a better field means he/she can get a better career so that he/she can achieve the goals he/she had established easily. And as for the country, these better choices of the students can make the country refine its structure and capacity of people working in different fields .

However, advices do not mean to
dissuade because
the essential responsibility of an institution is that it should serve the students as their basis. First of all, the fields are still changing so that people can not use the tendency today to evaluate what the potential they have and what they will be in the future. Secondly, even if the filed is hard to success, the interest of a subject is still the first director of a choice. As for they like it, the educational institutions should not persuade them to get away from the fields. Even if the students choose a field that is easy to success but they do not like, there are few possibilities for them to success and they won't be happy.


What the educational institution should really do
is to lead the students to better chase their dreams and help them to make their dreams come true. There is no matter hard or easy for ways to achieve their dreams. In whatever field if people want to success, it would not be a easy thing. And as an educational institution, it should encourage the students to choose a better way to get what they want. They should help the students to cut off rather than encounter lots of setbacks. If they do nottry at first, who can say that he/she would or would not success? And last but not the least, the development of human societies resemble the choices of students. If there are no scientists to search for and pursue the "hard fields", how can people get today's modern world? As the students are in favor of them, they should go for it and the institutions should help them to make their dreams come true.

It is easy to
allege that if a field is hard to
success, the students had better avoid choosing that. But it can't be concluded so hastily. As a students really fancy about it ,he/she should pursue it whatever others think about or whatever the future will be. Because interest is the first indicator and motivation to success.


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这是第一篇issue,3.31考试,已经改了一下但是还有很多错误,欢迎指正谢谢!
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发表于 2012-3-5 01:54:40 |只看该作者
表达太生涩,极大的制约了你论证观点的水平……

论证的问题主要有:
- 如同其他一些写这个题目的作者一样,你没有论证学校和学生谁能更好的把握将来的发展方向,以及为什么
- 在难以成功的领域里,有兴趣就能成功是不成立的,你没有考虑到本人天赋的作用
- 在学校到底应该做什么这个问题上,你的第一论述段和第三论述段是矛盾的
- advice和dissuade真的不是一回事吗?

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好的谢谢,我再回去看一下相关范文找一下思路

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