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2# Lusota 谢谢Lusota的认真修改呢，自己还有很多很多不足的地方呢，一起提高，加油哈~

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2.9日100924NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? College or University should offer students more preparation before they start working.

As Thomas Jefferson once said that I am great believer in luck, and I find the harder I work, the more I have it. There is little doubt that if people want to be successful in jobs, enough preparation is an essential element. Preparation plays an undeniable role in our realizing dreams. I completely agree with Thomas Jefferson and believe that preparation before getting start working, in most cases, helps people find and catch their careers and finally reach their goals.
I strongly support the idea of preparation before the College or University students begin their careers for it may benefit students not only in the present but also in the future. By preparing, student will be taught more practical skills and useful experiences in various fields about the job which they will obtain in future to guarantee the comprehend of the job, ensuring the dream will be come true.
And at the same time, just imagine if two students, student A did not have the enough experience when he starts working, and on the opposite, the other one student B have already prepared, what will happen? I believe that student A would be more awkward, nervous and making more mistakes than student B. The reason of this phenomenon is that everything about the job is unacquainted for the students A who just come from College or University, and preparation not be taken, they can not suit the situation both mentally and physically. However, student B have acquired amounts of knowledge, it lead them to choose the right way to solve the problem quicker, and more accuracy.
In a word, I believe that universities should require students to take class of the preparation of the job, rather than require students to go to work without any preparation. Only by developing the comprehensive knowledge and skills on job of each student, can a student use what he/she has learned in a more effective way and really enjoy the fruits of their hard work. And what is more, the greater comprehensive expertise the students have, the stronger a nation will be.

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As Thomas Jefferson once said that I am great believer in luck, and I find the harder I work, the more I have it. There is little doubt that if people want to be successful in jobs, enough preparation is an essential element. Preparation plays an undeniable role in our realizing dreams. I completely agree with Thomas Jefferson and believe that preparation before getting start working, in most cases, helps people find and catch their careers and finally reach their goalq% u q
I strongly support the idea of preparation before the College or University students begin their careers for （加and删for） it may benefit students not only in the present but also in the future.（not only提前可改为半倒装形式） By preparing, student will be taught more practical skills and （+more） useful experiences in various fields about the job which(which改so that) they will obtain in future to guarantee the comprehend of the job, ensuring the dream will be come true.
8 M2 M! x, c$ R+ A* n$ OAnd at the same time, just imagine if two students, student A(weibo都实名制了，你还不搞实名制啊？) did not have the enough experience when he starts working, and on the opposite, the other one student B have already prepared, what will happen? I believe that student A would be more awkward, nervous and making more mistakes than student B. The reason of this phenomenon is that everything about the job is unacquainted for the students A who just come from College or University, and preparation（should） not be taken, they can not suit the situation both mentally and physically. However, student B have acquired amounts of knowledge, it lead them to choose the right way to solve the problem quicker, and more accuracy(more quickly and more accurate).8 x. Z2 H. P" x' |& b T! [
In a word, I believe that universities should require students to take class of the preparation of the job, rather than require students to go to work without any preparation. Only by developing the comprehensive knowledge and skills on job of each student, can a student use what he/she has learned in a more effective way and really enjoy the fruits of their hard work. And what is more, the greater comprehensive expertise the students have, the stronger a nation will be.

PS. 用的句式太单调了。多看句子，然后用在你文章上，久而久之你就可以变成你写作的模板了

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2月10日 101203NA Do youagree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should help children todo their work or encourage children to do their work independently.

As we all known that, children is country’s future. In modern society, how to raise a child isbecoming a ticklish problem.
Parents are always holding two opposite opinions about acontroversial issue of whether they should encourage their children to do theirwork themselves without any help. Some opponents claim that it is of necessityof parents to help their children to do their work because especially in china thereare too many children need help , or they can not finish their work, while someproponents champion the rival idea that in today’s society, with the intense competition, there is a tendency that doingwork independently is a ability that everyone should have, especially forchildren, so parents should encourage their children to do their work independently.I definitely support the latter choice with the intensive purpose and substantial reasons.
First of all, let’s get down the fundamental and agree that nowadays the abilityof independence is the one of most dominant power in a lot of realms and we canfeel that this kind of ability is of importance. Therefore, if parents have noinclination to formation the ability of independence of their children, theychildren will be out of date and wash out sooner or later. At least it seems toone of my classmates, for instant, lacks of this kind of ability. She livedwith her parents before go to college to study. And her parents planned everythingfor her, both learning and life. And she just followed what her parents said.However, when she was admitted to a university, she left her parents, shebecame awkward and didn’t know how to plan her life. At the end of thatsemester, she even didn’t pass the courses. And now she is suspended fromschool because of she can’t suit the independent phenomenon.
Furthermore, not only can children acquire themethod to absorb new skills but also can build the qualities, such as self-support,self-confidence and critical thinking. Perhaps during the childhood, many ofthe quality that the children have can’t influence obviously. But once children grow up and become a adults, and in that new platform, all of these qualitiescan help them to be success.
In conclusion,that all parents should encourage their children to do work independently. Itwill enhance their children both mentally and physically. It is fairly clearthat the increasing number of talented person can be created in our countrywith the ability of independence.

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As we all known that（不要乱用that）, children are country’s future. In modern society, how to raise a child is becoming a ticklish problem.8 W()* |- _$ Z9 v* E
(前面一段需要么，其实独立作文作文最好开门见山)Parents are always holding two opposite opinions on whether they should encourage their children to do theirwork themselves without any help. Some opponents claim that it is of necessityof parents to help their children to do their work because especially in China there are too many children who need help , or they can not finish their work.While someproponents champion(有动词用法？) the rival idea that in today’s society, with the intense competition, there is a tendency that doingwork independently is a ability that everyone should have, especially for children, so parents should encourage their children to do their work independently.I definitely support the latter choice with the intensive purpose and substantial reasons.) z/ }* k3 m1 I1 p( \9 U
First of all, let’s get down the fundamental and agree that nowadays the abilityof independence is the one of most dominant power in a lot of realms and we canfeel that this kind of ability is of great importance. Therefore, if parents have no inclination to form the ability of independence of their children, thier children will be out of date and wash out（？？） sooner or later. At least it seems toone（啥意思） of my classmates, for instant, lacks of this kind of ability. She livedwith her parents before go to college to study. And her parents planned everythingfor her, both on learning and life. And she just followed what her parents said.However, when she was admitted to a university, she left her parents, and her life get into mess and she didn’t know how to plan her life. At the end of thatsemester, she even didn’t pass the courses. And now she is suspended fromschool(你想表达悬挂还是辍学呢？用drop of) because of she can’t suit the independent phenomenon.
Furthermore, not only can children acquire themethod to absorb new skills but also can build the qualities, such as self-support,self-confidence and critical thinking. Perhaps during the childhood, many of the qualities that the children have can’t influence obviously. But once children grow up and become a adults, and in that new platform, all of these qualitiescan help them to be successful.7(写的短小但蛮好的)
In conclusion,that all parents should encourage their children to do work independently. Itwill enhance their children both mentally and physically. It is fairly clearthat the increasing number of talented person can be created in our countrywith the ability of independence.
最好字数凑够400个呢，然后在论述一个观点的时候要补充细节，想第一个就蛮好，用了一个例子去说明

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2月10日独立写作走过路过的亲，亲狠拍呐~

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As we all known that, children is country’s future. In modern society, how to raise a child isbecoming a ticklish problem.
5 C/ s$ ^# ^* L- M# @6 D$ q( nParents are always holding two opposite opinions about acontroversial issue of whether they should encourage their children to do theirwork themselves without any help. Some opponents claim that it is of necessityof parents to help their children to do their work because especially in china thereare too many children need help , or they can not finish their work, while someproponents champion the rival idea that in today’s society, with the intense competition, there is a tendency that doingwork independently is a ability that everyone should have, especially forchildren, so parents should encourage their children to do their work independently.I definitely support the latter choice with the intensive purpose and substantial reasons.
4 f1 V" h% P- I% H4 f5 fFirst of all, let’s get down tothe fundamental and agree that nowadays the abilityof independence is the one of most dominant power in a lot of realms and we canfeel that this kind of ability is of importance. Therefore, if parents have noinclination to formation the ability of independence of their children, theychildren will be out of date and wash out sooner or later. At least it seems to one of my classmates, for instant, lacks of this kind of ability. (这句怪怪的）She livedwith her parents before go to college to study. And her parents planned everythingfor her, both learning and life. And she just followed what her parents said.However, when she was admitted to a university, she left her parents, shebecame awkward and didn’t know how to plan her life. At the end of thatsemester, she even didn’t pass the courses. And now she is suspended fromschool because of she can’t suit the independent phenomenon.
8 \1 s/ d7 e8 X( [+ B+ _- A0 R" [Furthermore, not only can children acquire the method to absorb new skills but also can（这个can 是不是要去掉啊？） build the qualities, such as self-support,self-confidence and critical thinking. Perhaps during the childhood, many ofthe quality that the children have can’t influence（be reflected,influence是指影响别人) obviously. But once children grow up and become a adults, and in that new platform, all of these qualitiescan help them to be success.) y* h- {6 b# ?; ]1 c
In conclusion,that all parents should encourage their children to do work independently. (这句语法错误，无主句）Itwill enhance their children both mentally and physically. It is fairly clearthat the increasing number of talented person can be created in our countrywith the ability of independence.
作者的逻辑挺清楚的。 9# stancy_zhang

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楼主。。。我拍得好像有点狠了。。。你看看行不行。。。要有心理准备哈~

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修改完毕！

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今天这篇实在是写不出来，请各位猛拍哈。。。

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